https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie Made with the help of a typing monkey en-us 2018-04-05 06:23:36 UTC 2018-08-25 09:46:20 UTC hello@padlet.com misssylvianne https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248751001 "Excuse me! Excuse me! Family emergency! I squealed awkwardly as I threw myself against the full train carriage in a selfish attempt to create that little bit of standing space for myself, steeling myself against dirty looks thrown my way by irate commuters who bore the brunt of my body weight hurled against them. 

"Excuse me! Brother dying... in the hospital... accident..." I panted breathlessly, hoping for some sympathetic display of camaraderie from my fellow commuters. 

It worked. 

More space was created by empathetic commuters and one even asked me what had happened. While relating the incident with whatever sparse details I could remember of that fuzzy conversation a short while ago with Mother, I ended up peppering the story with an exaggerated hyperbole of crashes and muted imagination of bloody scenes and details re-enacted and re-created only in my mind. ]]> 2018-04-05 06:23:57 UTC https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248751001 https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248751316 2018-04-05 06:25:56 UTC https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248751316 https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248751352        At the young age of 8, my brother, my dear brother, died because of a very unfortunate disease - Ectopia Cordis. It is a congenital malformation in which the heart is abnormally located either partially or totally outside of the thorax. He was born with his heart partially beating outside of his chest. I saw a heart, beating, out of my own brother’s chest! He wore a cast on his tiny little body since he was born. 

 A year ago, he had an operation in which his heart was placed back into his body, where any other normal person would have it at. Although he had his operation, his heart could never be in the normal position. After the operation, he could have his cast taken off. He was over the moon when he woke up from his operation the next day without the uncomfortable cast he wore for seven years. 

 A week later, he was walking down the street back home from school when he came across a traffic light. The light turned green and he crossed the road without looking to his sides. ]]> 2018-04-05 06:26:08 UTC https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248751352 https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248751591 According to my mother, my brother had crashed into a car. My irresponsible brother was using his handphone while crossing the road and he did not realise that the traffic light had turned red. Since lady luck was not on his side at that time, a car went hurtling towards his direction and could not slam on the breaks in time, it hit my brother. Immediately, the impact of the crash made my brother collapse in a heap and injure his leg severely. 
Blood was gushing out of his leg. By then, my brother was unconscious and had turned pale. Without hesitation, the driver who had collided with my brother came runing out of his car and immediately asked one of the passers-by to fish out their telephone to call the ambulance]]> 2018-04-05 06:27:28 UTC https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248751591 https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248751660   Too engrossed in my story,I missed my stop and only realised it when my commuter had cut me short and told me he had to go.He hoped that my brother would be alright.
  Just then,I realised that I had miss my stop,got off the train and had taken another one to my destinated stop.
 
  It felt like an eternity !

When I reached the hospital,my mother was already there, looking pale,she had tears in her eyes.As I walked over, there was a stony silence between me and my mother.Breaking the silence,mother said ,"Why were you so late....?"
  "I-I m-missed my stop."I stuttered.
  Recked with anxiety, Mother told me that I had missed my chance to talk to my brother,and it might be the last chance to do so.
  What did I not try to understand my brother better....?

]]> 2018-04-05 06:27:52 UTC https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248751660 https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248756031 1) It is believable as that disease is something real and the storyline is not so predictable. Also, we think that their story is quite unique and interesting but the two of you said he died because of the disease but after reading the continuation, it seems like he died because of an accident.]]> 2018-04-05 06:50:33 UTC https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248756031 https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248756347 •It is believable as many youngsters use their phone everywhere they go, and neglect their surrounding. There are many news reports about how youngsters use their phones dangerously and injure themselves, because of their wrongdoing.

•They]]> 2018-04-05 06:51:59 UTC https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248756347 https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248756597 Firstly, it is not believable that after learning that your brother is in the hospital and you are on the bus reading a book, not worrying about your brother at all. You should like emphasize on you being nervous.

Secondly, you had me interested at the last part where your mother said you had a last chance to talk to your brother,bla bla,bla,bla,it was really nice and smooth .

Lastly,I think I really could relate to the mother the most if I was in her shoes.If I had my son reaching late to see the last of his brother,I would question him.However , you could improve on your magnetic characters as I didn't really have one.]]> 2018-04-05 06:53:03 UTC https://padlet.com/misssylvianne/tykodsuasyie/wish/248756597