Bonus Lesson by Avin Jason

Select ONE of these situations. Write an email to a relevant individual/ department expressing your situation. Remember to clearly state who you are, relevant details and what ACTION you would like to see taken.

avinjason — 2020-06-25 04:54:54 UTC

Situation 1: Your boss gives you a shift on a day of full uni classes.

Situation 2: Your university professor doesn’t give you adequate feedback on your assessment, on which you scored poorly.

Situation 3: You catch a manager verbally bullying someone in your team.

Situation 4: You have been given a group work assignment at university. The assignment is due in two days and one group member has done 0 work.

Sayo (situation3)

2020-06-25 10:00:35 UTC

Dear Mr.Jason
Hello, Mr.Jason, I'm Sayo Kinoshita, in the business department.
Thank you for your wonderful workshop last weekend. It motivated me so much.

Today, I would like to report a serious issue hapening (taking place) in my department. (Specifically,) The issue is bullying in my team. Mr. Morrison, our team manager, has said unacceptable words to my team member, Ms. Berejiklian for more than 4 months. She is too scared to tell the truth ( to report this situation ) to you, Mr. Jason, the general manager. Instead of her,(In support of her, I am reporting) I report this and attached a record as an ( unnecessary article) evidence, so could you check it,( review this incident report) please? If hearing investigation is necesary, I welcome to attend it to support her. ( I would be wiling to sit in and verifiy her story, if called upon.)

Thank you for your paying attention to us.
(your attention and concern.)
regards,
Sayo Kinoshita
Email: sydney@sydney.co.au
phone: 0123456789

This is a very clear and well structured email. The suggestions I've made do not change the intention or clarity of the request.

Situation 2: Your university professor doesn’t give you adequate feedback on your assessment, on which you scored poorly.

2020-07-01 06:20:08 UTC

Subject: Question about 0000 assessment

Dear Professor A,

Hello, Professor A!

My name is *** **(UniKey: abcd1234, University student ID: 123456789) and I am a student in your 0000 class. I am writing to ask some more feedback for my **** assessment two weeks earlier so that I could improve myself better.
same comment as before
I am always attracted ( sounds too personal ..perhaps say "I enjoy ) your humorous teaching method and your rigorous study ideas. I tried my best to prepare for **** assessment, but only find out a poor ( but was disappointed by the low ) score. I admit it is my terrible time arrangement that should be responsible for my presentation ( is due to poor time management that my last presentation suffered), but there must be something more academic that I have not been aware that mark down my score ( were there any academic considerations that affected my score?) . Would you prefer to give me more detailed feedback on the assessment? If so, your helpful suggestions will definitely help me to have a better understanding of your course and to do better next time.

Would it be possible to arrange an appointment some time? I have spare time (am currently free) during:
Wednesday 8:00-15:00
Thursday 8:00-12:00
Saturday 8:00-17:00.
If you are not convenient (see earlier notes for conclusion ) at that time, I would be glad as well if you could send the evaluation to my school email address:

abcd1234@uni.sydney.edu.au

I would be greatly appreciated if you could give me further feedback.

Thank you for your patience and consideration. I am looking forward to your early reply.

Best regards,

*** **

(Cecilia)

Subject: BIO 0000 assessment feedback requirement *

2020-07-09 08:42:48 UTC

Dear Professor A,

Hello, Professor A!

My name is *** **(UniKey: abcd1234, University student ID: 123456789) and I am a student in your BIO 0000 class. I am writing to ask more detailed feedback for my BIO assessment two weeks earlier so that I could improve myself better.

Would it be possible to arrange an appointment this week? I am available during the following hours:

Wednesday 8:00-15:00

Thursday 8:00-12:00

Saturday 8:00-17:00.

If you are not convenient at that time, I would be glad as well if you could send the evaluation to my school email address:

abcd1234@uni.sydney.edu.au

I would be greatly appreciated if you could give me further feedback. Thank you for your patience and consideration. I am looking forward to your early reply.

Best regards,

*** **

(Cecilia)

Great writing Cecilia. These are my suggestions:

I am writing to ask more > I am writing to ask for more detailed feedback.

my BIO assessment two weeks earlier so that I could improve myself better.> my most recent BIO assessment, so that I can look to make improvement for future assessments.

If you are not convenient at that time> If that time is not convenient for you,

I would be greatly appreciated if you could give me further feedback> I would greatly appreciate further feedback

Solution3

2020-10-08 06:36:28 UTC

Dear Jason

Hello Jason, I am Yingfan, in the 36DEC class. I want to reprot you something.

Today morning I saw my class manager verbally bullying my classmate, I think maybe he did some horrible mistake, but the manager should not talk to him very aloudly. I hope you can help my classmate and give our manager a warning. We are all the same student. Nobody can bully other.

Best regards
Yingfan

Situation 4: You have been given a group work assignment at university. The assignment is due in two days and one group member has done 0 work.

2020-10-08 06:37:49 UTC

Dear Jason

Hello Jason, I am XXX, in the DEC36 class. I have some problem with my group task. I want to exchange my partner with other group. Because my partners and i have to finish them in a short time, but one partner has done 0 work.

Situation 4: You have been given a group work assignment at university. The assignment is due in two days and one group member has done 0 work.

isabellachengfeng — 2020-10-08 06:38:38 UTC

Dear Classmate,

I'm Isabella from our DEC group(9). The assignment we need to workout together is due in two days. So we need to work together immediately to finish the tasks. Do you have any problem with our assignment that you are responsible for?May be we can figure out together in the evening 8th October. Looking forward to your reply.

Best regards,

Isabella LIU.

Situation 2: Your university professor doesn’t give you adequate feedback on your assessment, on which you scored poorly.

2020-10-08 06:40:53 UTC

Dear Professor A,

Hello, Professor A!

My name is Xinlin Zhao(UniKey: abcd1234, University student ID: 123456789) and I am a student in your BIO 0000 class. I am writing to ask more detailed feedback for my BIO assessment two weeks earlier so that I could improve myself better.

Would it be possible to arrange an appointment this week? I am available during the following hours:

Wednesday 8:00-15:00

Thursday 8:00-12:00

Saturday 8:00-17:00.

If you are not convenient at that time, I would be glad as well if you could send the evaluation to my school email address:

abcd1234@uni.sydney.edu.au

I would be greatly appreciated if you could give me further feedback. Thank you for your patience and consideration. I am looking forward to your early reply.

Best regards,

*** **

Situation 4: You have been given a group work assignment at university. The assignment is due in two days and one group member has done 0 work.

2020-10-08 06:41:43 UTC

Dear classmates,

2020-10-08 06:43:13 UTC

You have been given a group work assignment at university. The assignment is due in two days and one group member has done 0 work.

Dear

You have been given a group work assignment at university. The assignment is due in two days and one group member has done 0 work.

hzha0621_3 — 2020-10-08 06:44:19 UTC

Dear classmate,

Hello XXX,I am your classmate from DEC 36 group.Urgently,our group work assignment is due in two days.So we need to work together to finish the task.I guess maybe you are busy that you do not have enough time to finish your part.Maybe you have some trouble.Whatever,I wish you can tell me the real situation.I wil try my best to help you.Moreover,we will finish the job! Looking forward to your reply.

Best regards,

Ray

situation 2 Your university professor doesn’t give you adequate feedback on your assessment, on which you scored poorly.

2020-10-08 06:44:31 UTC

Dear perfessor

I’m GUOHUAN LI, my student ID is:xxxxxxx. On my assessment, I’m didn’t get adequate feedback that lead to my scored poorly. Can you help me fix it. Thank you very much.

Best wishes.

GUOHUANLI (Student ID:xxxxxx)

You have been given a group work assignment at university. The assignment is due in two days and one group member has done 0 work.

2020-10-08 06:44:32 UTC

Dear classmate,
I'm Irene from our DEC group (1).The assignment that wo need to finish together is due in two days.But I'm sorsry to find you haven't do your part of the assignment yet.So I want to know if you meet any trouble in the process. Maybe we can work things out together.Looking forward your reply.

Best wishes.
Irene

some questions about homework

2020-10-08 06:44:42 UTC

Dear Professor,

I am your student. My name is XXX, and this is my unikey:abcd1234 and University student ID: 123456789.

The group work you assigned is approaching the deadline, but there is still some work to be done. Because one of our team members didn't do any work for personal reasons. I hope you can give us more time to help this student and finish our homework.

Kind regards,

XXX

Bonus Lesson by Avin Jason

Select ONE of these situations. Write an email to a relevant individual/ department expressing your situation. Remember to clearly state who you are, relevant details and what ACTION you would like to see taken.

Sayo (situation3)

Situation 2: Your university professor doesn’t give you adequate feedback on your assessment, on which you scored poorly.

Subject: BIO 0000 assessment feedback requirement *** **

Solution3

Situation 4: You have been given a group work assignment at university. The assignment is due in two days and one group member has done 0 work.

Situation 4: You have been given a group work assignment at university. The assignment is due in two days and one group member has done 0 work.

Situation 2: Your university professor doesn’t give you adequate feedback on your assessment, on which you scored poorly.

Situation 4: You have been given a group work assignment at university. The assignment is due in two days and one group member has done 0 work.

You have been given a group work assignment at university. The assignment is due in two days and one group member has done 0 work.

situation 2 Your university professor doesn’t give you adequate feedback on your assessment, on which you scored poorly.

You have been given a group work assignment at university. The assignment is due in two days and one group member has done 0 work.

some questions about homework

Subject: BIO 0000 assessment feedback requirement *