https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb Reflect on Sample Intro 1 by writing 1 glow and 1 grow! en-us 2021-02-02 20:40:26 UTC 2021-02-05 14:11:47 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f973.png https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158855850 they described what the essay was going to be about clearly. Good transitions. The grabber makes you want to read more. ]]> 2021-02-03 14:21:18 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158855850 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158870834 the general topic of the essay isn't clear, is it workers rights or immigrant rights? There's maybe a little to much details about each subtopic. ]]> 2021-02-03 14:23:47 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158870834 ashleyt296 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158872304 I think the grabber is okay, it allows the reader to connect/apply themselves to the essay in order to make them interested/hooked on the essay.]]> 2021-02-03 14:24:02 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158872304 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158872474 2021-02-03 14:24:04 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158872474 candicee4 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158879444 The grabber is good, it lets the reader sort of get a more clearer image of the topic. It does the job of hooking the reader. ]]> 2021-02-03 14:25:18 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158879444 dylanb128 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158879872 The grabber is decent and they elaborate on how poor people couldn't own an apartment, also added in other major issues like working conditions, women and child labor.]]> 2021-02-03 14:25:22 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158879872 brendas76 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158888556 I think that the grabber is good because it lets whoever is reading this an idea of how they lived before. It makes the reader interested and they would probably want to read more. ]]> 2021-02-03 14:26:41 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158888556 ashleyt296 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158894854 There isn't a clear thesis. Without a clear thesis we can't tell what the topics are easily/the purpose of the essay. I feel like if I were to put a theme on it i'd say try being more clear overall. ]]> 2021-02-03 14:27:48 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158894854 dylanb128 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158900739 It isn't clear on what is the thesis, there are different major issues so it's difficult to understand and should be more general.]]> 2021-02-03 14:28:47 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158900739 candicee4 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158906491 There is too much information in the introduction, the introduction could be a bit more general. Theres too many minor details.]]> 2021-02-03 14:29:45 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158906491 marinadelsolar https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158944673 2021-02-03 14:36:04 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158944673 marinadelsolar https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158948971 2021-02-03 14:36:48 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1158948971 alejandrap30 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163782567 The writer had goof evidence to prove their staement.]]> 2021-02-04 14:06:40 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163782567 charleys5 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163784608 there was good evidence that supported the claim ]]> 2021-02-04 14:07:01 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163784608 alejandrap30 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163787438 The topic sentence and elaborations were short, and didn't really expand on the topic.]]> 2021-02-04 14:07:30 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163787438 charleys5 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163787650 The topic sentence was short and didn't really explain what the paragraph was going to be about or provide any background. ]]> 2021-02-04 14:07:33 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163787650 leaht38 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163787762 i fell like there was to 'explain the topic sentence' like the person went straight into text evidence]]> 2021-02-04 14:07:34 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163787762 ashleyt296 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163795062 The evidence within the paragraph was good because it related to the topic and was supporting the claim. ]]> 2021-02-04 14:08:48 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163795062 arelisv3 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163801999 The topic sentence was too short , they did not really inform the reader what their essay is going to be about 
 ]]> 2021-02-04 14:09:44 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163801999 leaht38 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163802406 2021-02-04 14:09:49 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163802406 ashleyt296 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163804047 The explanation was short and with no depth. The second sentence was basically non existent since it right away jumped on to the quote. I think they should had elaborated on the topic sentence some more. ]]> 2021-02-04 14:10:06 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163804047 candicee4 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163807073 Their evidence was good, detailed and it said what it needed it to say. It was straight forward and got to the point ]]> 2021-02-04 14:10:39 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163807073 brendas76 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163809321 The topic sentence was short and it didn't really explain what the paragraph was going to be about.]]> 2021-02-04 14:10:59 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163809321 arelisv3 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163809680 Their evidence is good because it relates to the topic ]]> 2021-02-04 14:11:04 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163809680 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163819617 2021-02-04 14:12:45 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163819617 brendas76 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163821950 Their evidence was good since it related to the topic and supported the claim.]]> 2021-02-04 14:13:08 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163821950 darians11 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163825168 They didn't have an explanation for their topic sentence.]]> 2021-02-04 14:13:41 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163825168 candicee4 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163827502 Their topic sentence was really short and didn't really give back round information, the whole paragraph was mostly evidence and the elaboration.]]> 2021-02-04 14:14:05 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163827502 gabrielap102 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163828095 The evidence supports the reasoning. It also is very detailed ]]> 2021-02-04 14:14:12 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163828095 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163830434 The paragraph had short sentences that didn't go off topic and where direct, so the entire paragraph got the message across.]]> 2021-02-04 14:14:37 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163830434 gabrielap102 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163837395 Needs more explanation in the topic sentence. And background to the sentence ]]> 2021-02-04 14:15:50 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163837395 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163839009 The word choice would differ throughout the paragraph. At one point the person would use the word abominable and then used the word bad. The word choice could be developed.]]> 2021-02-04 14:16:06 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163839009 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163840427 she has good imformation]]> 2021-02-04 14:16:22 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163840427 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163843904 2021-02-04 14:17:00 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163843904 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163851669 2021-02-04 14:18:24 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163851669 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163892874 Good Supporting Facts to help state the claim made in the intro   ]]> 2021-02-04 14:25:19 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1163892874 marinadelsolar https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168231842 2021-02-05 13:57:58 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168231842 charleys5 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168232793 good topic sentence and they connected it back to society today which was good. ]]> 2021-02-05 13:58:10 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168232793 marinadelsolar https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168233782 2021-02-05 13:58:22 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168233782 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168236206 it was kinda choppy she did like try to grasp it but like she went from on topic to another and that was kinda confusing. ]]> 2021-02-05 13:58:52 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168236206 charleys5 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168236663 the reader is kind of left wanting more after the quote, the quote doesn't really connect to the progressive era. ]]> 2021-02-05 13:58:56 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168236663 ashleyt296 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168236962 Nicely restated the claim. ]]> 2021-02-05 13:59:00 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168236962 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168237917 she did state her cliam and had good evidence ]]> 2021-02-05 13:59:13 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168237917 arelisv3 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168238239 It has a great topic sentence and it summarizes the main idea about what their essay was about ]]> 2021-02-05 13:59:17 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168238239 ashleyt296 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168240656 I feel like perhaps they should had explained the quote or picked another quote because I feel like the quote they pick was one that would need elaboration.
There was also a grammar mistake so they may wanna check over the conclusion a little more. ]]> 2021-02-05 13:59:49 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168240656 marinadelsolar https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168244720 has a good connection to now]]> 2021-02-05 14:00:42 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168244720 marinadelsolar https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168246310 could've elaborated more on racism]]> 2021-02-05 14:01:02 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168246310 dylanb128 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168247033 Great topic sentence, also mentions about society today.]]> 2021-02-05 14:01:12 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168247033 candicee4 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168255274 Good topic sentence, it connects to todays society which can make the reader to more research in general it's probably a standard conclusion, it shows the claim being restated nicely ]]> 2021-02-05 14:02:57 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168255274 arelisv3 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168256967 They should of elaborated more on what that quote means , the quote does not really sum up the essay , it just leaves the reader on a cliffhanger ]]> 2021-02-05 14:03:17 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168256967 brendas76 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168257197 It had a good topic sentence and they connected it back todays society.]]> 2021-02-05 14:03:21 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168257197 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168258167 2021-02-05 14:03:33 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168258167 dylanb128 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168258675 Could've elaborated more on the issues people of color faced and what the quote really meant.]]> 2021-02-05 14:03:39 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168258675 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168259827 2021-02-05 14:03:53 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168259827 brendas76 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168272055 They could've elaborated more on the quote and explained why its important.]]> 2021-02-05 14:06:15 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168272055 darians11 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168273225 Could've elaborated better and could have a quote that connects to the essay.]]> 2021-02-05 14:06:30 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168273225 candicee4 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168275833 Although the quote is good, they could have elaborated more on the quote]]> 2021-02-05 14:07:02 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/t69g71s3khp2qbjb/wish/1168275833