https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11 WWW, EBI, great vocabulary and grammar issues to work on en-us 2017-01-22 23:47:22 UTC 2017-01-23 00:40:42 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604746 CALLIE-
WWW: Lots of evidence and correct grammar, punctuation etc. Interesting title
EBI: Stronger adjectives
ANNI-
WWW: Strong adjectives, powerful title, good punctuation and grammar.
EBI: More interesting adjectives and less repetition.
TOBY-
WWW:
EBI:

]]> 2017-01-23 00:27:59 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604746 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604771 *Rebecca:
Nice piece of writing

*Velvet:
WWW: good vocabularies, depicts the situation well
EBI: ]]> 2017-01-23 00:28:32 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604771 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604807 www: Write something that was fake but it looks real.


]]> 2017-01-23 00:29:21 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604807 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604832 Nice piece of writing. Many persuasive techniques.However, there are some sentences doesn't make sense]]> 2017-01-23 00:29:53 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604832 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604841 By Andrew
-Toby
Very nice piece of writing, however there is not a lots of clickbait in the main essay. You can put reference of sponsored companies, links of other article and more persuasive techniques and be careful about grammar.
-Alex
Nice piece of writing with lots of techniques. However your title may need to shorter and more catchy, more persuasive techniques need to included in the main articles too. Also beware about your grammar.
-Callie
Nice piece of writing with good writing techniques and clickbait techniques.]]> 2017-01-23 00:30:10 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604841 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604931 WWW: plenty of ways for suggesting and it looks quite real,also you have written some other websites.
EBI: what is the samsung galaxy note 7 for?

]]> 2017-01-23 00:32:08 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604931 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604937 WWW: Good idea and imagination.
EBI: Some spelling mistakes, and some grammar problems. Maybe you should read it through next time.]]> 2017-01-23 00:32:15 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604937 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604941 www: well use of adjectives 
EBI: few grammar mistakes]]> 2017-01-23 00:32:19 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148604941 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605022 WWW: Good idea and great vocabulary used.
EBI: Check your ending and spellings.]]> 2017-01-23 00:34:16 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605022 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605054 WWW: title is very attractive, you included the culture of Chinese new year and give a brief introduction.
EBI: it can be a lot more interesting if you describe what happen during the process of making jiao zi]]> 2017-01-23 00:34:56 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605054 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605063 WWW: many reason to support your article.
EBI: Your main article was too long, try to make some bullet point.]]> 2017-01-23 00:35:04 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605063 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605071 WWW: Good structure and use of language
EBI: Too many random adverts!!!!!!!]]> 2017-01-23 00:35:15 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605071 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605089 WWW: The content was quite good but there were some mistakes
EBI: Improve on the grammar]]> 2017-01-23 00:35:35 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605089 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605213 WWW: Good clickbait title, will attract people.
EBI: it can be longer]]> 2017-01-23 00:37:33 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605213 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605276 WWW: good article 
EBI: write shorter it is too long

]]> 2017-01-23 00:38:15 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605276 https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605289 WWW: Good grammar and vocabulary
EBI: Check some of the spelling(look should be looking)]]> 2017-01-23 00:38:26 UTC https://padlet.com/david_robinson/t4qfimxj2y11/wish/148605289