AP Writing Rubric Padlet 9/12/24 by Alannah O'Mara-York

1- Deer Park

11565312 — 2024-09-10 13:18:16 UTC

The classic deer park would be the perfect thesis for water. EVERYONE knows this water and has most likely had it before. It's straight forward and it gets the job of hydrating you done. It's refreshing and arguably the best brand of water.

0- Aquafina

11565312 — 2024-09-10 13:18:26 UTC

This is the opposite of a good thesis for water. Anyone who was dying of thirst would avoid drinking this water because like a bad thesis it would just restate the problem at hand; being thirsty. This water, even on the hottest days, is never refreshing and it will never properly quench your thirst.

4- Smart Water

11565312 — 2024-09-10 13:18:32 UTC

Smart Water is a good example of what it means to have good evidence just like smart water has a good and smooth taste so should your essay smoothly introduce evidence and it flow naturally. With every sip of smart water it reinforces why it's so good just like with every piece of evidence your claim should be supported.

3- Essentia

11565312 — 2024-09-10 13:18:37 UTC

Essentia is good the taste is fine. However it could be better, it's missing that distinct flavor that could separate it from all the other waters as something significantly special. On it's own it's solid, but after drinking something better you realize the imperfections that Essentia has.

2- Fiji

11565312 — 2024-09-10 13:18:51 UTC

This is an okay brand of water. This could help your thirst but like a 2 in the evidence and commentary it won't support you in multiple different claims. Like it could help your thirst but you definitely won't be super satisfied.

1- Dasani

11565312 — 2024-09-10 13:18:56 UTC

Not a lot of people like this water but if you are really desperate it can help you become slightly hydrated. This water is fine but it isn't a strong contender in the evidence category. This is just a water bottle and on the outside it might look like it has a good thesis and a couple solid commentary and evidence paragraphs but it lacks the stability of good evidence and details resulting it only being a summary.

0- Tap Water

11565312 — 2024-09-10 13:19:00 UTC

Tap water isn't great but if you are really thirsty this can hold you over until you get some better water. This doesn't address the prompt because it isn't a brand of bottled water. This water has nothing do with the essay at hand and it is irrelevant evidence that doesn't support anything.

1- Voss

11565312 — 2024-09-10 13:19:04 UTC

This is possibly the fanciest and most sophisticated water bottle there is. This is a glass water bottle among a bunch of plastic water bottles. This, like in a good essay provides a certain level of sophistication that just can't be matched by any other water bottle. This can take you a trip exploring different complexities in the argument.

0- Nestle Pure Life

11565312 — 2024-09-10 13:19:08 UTC

Nestle Pure Life is a water bottle brand that always mentions on the bottle all of it's sophisticated filtering processes and why it's so good, but just like an essay with no sophistication the claims are ineffective because once you actually taste Nestle Pure Life water all of these claims become invalid because the taste is underwhelming.