Language Wall 5/10: Hawkins by Beth Hawkins

From Amari and the Night Brothers

ehawkins23 — 2021-05-11 04:07:47 UTC

When his sister steps to the Crystal Ball, her talent starts off as Fitness and becomes Superhuman Athleticism.

Directions

ehawkins23 — 2021-05-11 04:10:23 UTC

Today, write anything you notice about the sentence in terms of grammar and language. Be sure to include your name!

Directions

ehawkins23 — 2021-05-11 04:15:58 UTC

Today you will imitate the sentence, following the structure but changing the meaning.
Mrs. Hawkins' example: When her students step into the classroom, their knowledge starts off as that of a 4th grader and becomes that of a 5th grader.

Directions

ehawkins23 — 2021-05-11 04:16:16 UTC

Today, we will revise our sentence. How can you improve it and make it stronger?
Mrs. Hawkins' example: When her new students saunter into the bright classroom, their knowledge begins as that of a 4th grader and evolves to become that of a 5th grader.

Directions

ehawkins23 — 2021-05-11 04:21:40 UTC

Write down what you notice is different about each sentence, and how it changes the meaning of the sentence.
1) when his sister steps to the crystal ball, her talent starts off as fitness and becomes superhuman athleticism
2) When his sister steps to the Crystal Ball her talent starts off as Fitness and, becomes Superhuman Athleticism.
3) When his sister stepped to the Crystal Ball, her talent started off as Fitness and becomes Superhuman Athleticism.

Bennett

2021-05-17 19:40:38 UTC

starts with a capital.
1 comma
fitness is capitalized
superhuman athleticism is capitalized
crystal is capitalized
1 period

Riley

rgu24 — 2021-05-17 19:40:39 UTC

I notice that the sentence starts with AWUBIS, so there is a comma. I also notice that Fitness and Superhuman Athleticism are upper-cased. The Crystal Ball is also capitalized. They are capitalized because the talents are specific things and the Crystal Ball is the name of a specific object.

Kelly UwUXD

2021-05-17 19:40:56 UTC

When his sister steps to the Crystal Ball, her talent starts off as Fitness and becomes Superhuman Athleticism.

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I notice "When.","Crystal Ball.", "Fitness.", and "Superhuman Athleticism," are capitalized.

It also has a comma because "When a sentence starts with AW WOOBUS," "I'll probably need a comma.".

Nicholas

2021-05-17 19:40:58 UTC

I notice that the sentence is a complex sentence with a comma. I also notice that it has all the correct sentence needs. For example a capital at the start and a period at the end. It also has the F in Fitness capitalized.

Danny

dalvarez241 — 2021-05-17 19:41:03 UTC

I notice that...
1. The sentence ends with a period.
2. The sentence is a complex sentence.
3. The sentence starts with a capital letter.
4. There is a comment after ball
5. Superhuman, Athleticism, Crystal, and Ball are all capitalized.

charm

cmeyer243 — 2021-05-17 19:41:04 UTC

1) When starts with a capital letter
2) after ball there is a coma
3) there is a period at the end of the sentes
4) 6 capital letters

Katelyn

2021-05-17 19:41:05 UTC

I notice that this sentence has a comma. I also noticed that some of the nouns in this sentence are capitalized.

Ayaan

2021-05-17 19:41:07 UTC

-Commas
-Capital Letters
-Periods
-Nouns
-Fitness Capitalized
-Superhuman Athleticism Capitalized
-Crystal Capitalized
-

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rgarcia2411 — 2021-05-17 19:41:18 UTC

1 comma
6 cap letters
1 period
1 conjuncy
1 comma auwbis (pog)

free jacob flopper

2021-05-17 19:41:18 UTC

there is 1 comma
one period
starts with capital

like my post

Sri

2021-05-17 19:41:25 UTC

I noticed that the F in Fitness is capitalized and the S in Superhuman is also capitalized and the A in Athleticism is also capitalized. And also that the C in Crystal is capitalized and the B in ball is also capitalized.

A

2021-05-17 19:41:28 UTC

When his sister steps to the Crystal Ball, her talent starts off as Fitness and becomes Superhuman Athleticism. /(>^<)/

-Comma
- Capital letter at the beginning.
- period at the end
- Fitness, Crystal Ball and Superhuman Athleticism is capitalized.
/ ( ^v^ ) /

Brooks

2021-05-17 19:41:32 UTC

the crystal ball is capitalized

Kimberly

2021-05-17 19:41:47 UTC

starts with a capital.
1 comma
fitness is capitalized
P.S... Katelyn is annoying

Rowan

2021-05-17 19:41:49 UTC

I notice that there is a comma to add on to the sentence, and to make it AWUBIS I also notice that Crystal, Ball, Fitness, Superhuman and Athleticism are upper case.

Sean

2021-05-17 19:41:53 UTC

Its starts with a capital and has a comma in it. also Superhuman Athleticism is capititlized. There is 18 words also.

Eemil

2021-05-17 19:41:53 UTC

There's a comma.
There's 6 words capitalized
There's a period
The sentence starts with a capitalized word
It's a complex sentence
-There's 3 verbs (steps, starts, becomes)
-There's 3 nouns (Crystal Ball, sister, Superhuman Athleticism)

moni

2021-05-17 19:41:59 UTC

starts with a capital, ends with a period,has a comma

Maggie

mbrodie24 — 2021-05-17 19:42:01 UTC

-Starts with a capital letter
-Ends with a period.
-One comma
-6 capital letters.
-18 words
-Nouns

drake

dforbes24 — 2021-05-17 19:42:02 UTC

I notice that the sentence has a comma and that some of the words are capitalized.

AmeliaB

2021-05-17 19:42:31 UTC

Starts with a capital, ends with a

Isla

2021-05-17 19:42:34 UTC

- starts with ,
- starts wen need a ,
- 6 capital letters

Lyla

2021-05-17 19:42:37 UTC

The sentence starts off with what is happening, saying what there doing and who is doing it. Then the sentence plunges into further detail with the specifics of what is happening within the broader scheme of what is happening. There is one comma, five capitalized words, ends with a period, has eighteen words, and it is a complex sentence.

sol

2021-05-17 19:43:26 UTC

a in athleticism is capital same with superhuman 18 words comma after ball

AmeliaB

2021-05-17 19:44:25 UTC

When his sister steps into the crystal ball, her talent

I noticed a comma

lbarbour24 — 2021-05-17 19:44:51 UTC

Nate

nsherry24 — 2021-05-17 19:45:21 UTC

6 cap letters
comma, period and conjunction.

Sean

2021-05-26 20:57:18 UTC

When the pitch is through to me, I hit it out of the of the ballpark.

Danny, formally known as DAN with an E (or DAN-E)

dalvarez241 — 2021-05-26 20:57:43 UTC

When the baseball is pitched, the batter named Mickey Joe walks off and goes into the position of left bench.

Katelyn

2021-05-26 20:57:51 UTC

When her brother steps to the painting, his amusement starts off as calm and becomes excited.

moni

2021-05-26 20:57:52 UTC

when maggie scores a goal, the team gets excited.

Riley

rgu24 — 2021-05-26 20:57:59 UTC

When a caterpillar comes into existence, it eats a lot then becomes a butterfly.

Lyla

2021-05-26 20:58:02 UTC

Maggie and Lyla's obsession with diego grows stronger each day, starting as a deep admiration and became the kind of love that consists of killing wives and getting married to diego.

Sri

2021-05-26 20:58:03 UTC

When i play with my tennis ball, it usually turns into me making a lot of noise.

Isla

2021-05-26 20:58:04 UTC

When charm goes to Nuget, she she goes even more crazy than a wild monkey.

Maggie

mbrodie24 — 2021-05-26 20:58:05 UTC

When diego falls, he gets back up again because he is a mighty warrior.

drake:3

dforbes24 — 2021-05-26 20:58:15 UTC

When I demolish people in video games, I'm a cheetah then I destroy them.

Rowan

2021-05-26 20:58:21 UTC

When I play baseball, I catch everything and become the Best Baseball Player Ever

Ayaan

2021-05-26 20:58:25 UTC

When I play Fortnite, I dominate my opponents everytime.
When he hops onto Fortnite, he easily dominates through the lobby.

Bennett

2021-05-26 20:58:32 UTC

When my friend plays video games, he gets better and becomes a pro.

Eemil

2021-05-26 20:58:34 UTC

When his brother kicks the ball into the goal, his team becomes the one in the lead.

charm

cmeyer243 — 2021-05-26 20:58:38 UTC

When the Diego's fall, the diegets fall with them.

Kewy

2021-05-26 20:58:53 UTC

When I get home, the first thing I'm going to do is wash the dishes, followed by vacuuming the hallway.

ramon formerly known as ram with an o

rgarcia2411 — 2021-05-26 20:58:56 UTC

When I terrorise my wallet in Valorant my vandal goes from default to reaver.

AmeliaB

2021-05-26 20:59:19 UTC

When i draw a picture i get better drawing inside the lines

Kimberly

2021-05-26 20:59:22 UTC

When i play video games, i start off as a bot to a pro :0

Nate

nsherry24 — 2021-05-26 20:59:29 UTC

When I play video games they become cowardly in fear i'm so good :D

Nicholas

2021-05-26 20:59:36 UTC

When

Nicholas

2021-05-26 21:00:02 UTC

When I beat the final boss, I feel very accomplished.

Indigo

2021-05-26 21:00:05 UTC

when i steal Oreos they become my snack :>
EhEhEhEhEhEhEhE
/ ( ^v^)/

jacob

2021-05-26 21:00:09 UTC

when i miss a fly ball, i get yelled at and go play left bench

AmeliaBedila

2021-05-26 21:01:19 UTC

When i play volyball, i get better at hitting the ball strate and get the point and WIN THE GAME

stuart

2021-05-26 21:02:19 UTC

when i get mad i go to the potty seat and suck on waffes

moni

2021-05-26 21:02:49 UTC

when katelyn calls me short, i get mad.

Rowan

2021-05-27 17:51:34 UTC

When I snag every ball the baseball game, I become the unrivaled player in the stadium.

drake

dforbes24 — 2021-05-27 17:51:55 UTC

When I demolish people in video games i become a wild cheetah eating prey.

Sean

2021-05-27 17:51:55 UTC

When the ball is pitched to me, I hit it and it becomes a flying bird soring out of the ballpark.

Katelyn

2021-05-27 17:51:59 UTC

When her brother approaches the beautiful painting, his delight starts of as placid and becomes ecstatic.

maggie

mbrodie24 — 2021-05-27 17:52:02 UTC

When diego falls, he proudly gets back up again and becomes a mighty warrior.

Isla

2021-05-27 17:52:13 UTC

When charm goes to Nuget, she becomes even more crazy than a wild monkey.

jacob

2021-05-27 17:52:25 UTC

After I miss the the popup, my starting position becomes left bench.

Danny, formally known as DAN with an E (or DAN-E)

dalvarez241 — 2021-05-27 17:52:28 UTC

When the stunning knuckle slurve is pitched and the strike out is called, the batter named Mickey Joe walks off the field and enhances the amazing position of left bench.

Nicholas

2021-05-27 17:52:51 UTC

When I Professionally hit the final blow on the levels boss, I feel like my life goals have been accomplished.

the robot overlords

2021-05-27 17:52:52 UTC

we will rule the world and make humans build parts and bake donuts

moni

2021-05-27 17:53:10 UTC

When Maggie scores, the team becomes unbeatable.

Ramon

rgarcia2411 — 2021-05-27 17:53:47 UTC

In the time period I terrorise my wallet in valorant my vandal goes from a default to a superb reaver.
sheeeeeeeesh

charm

cmeyer243 — 2021-05-27 17:53:55 UTC

When the mighty warrior Diego falls, the fearless Diegets fall down with Diego and becomes a god.

Brooks

2021-05-27 17:54:04 UTC

When i beat a the very hard level, i was so happy that i could make coffee worried.

Riley

rgu24 — 2021-05-27 17:54:17 UTC

When a caterpillar hatches from its egg, it consumes as much as a leaf per day before transforming into a butterfly.

Indigo

2021-05-27 17:55:04 UTC

When I steal oreos, they become my snack and I chomp em while being chased by a golem that I made to get me oreos.
:>

stuart

2021-05-27 17:55:40 UTC

when i get furious i go to the potty seat and become a sucking on waffles kind of person

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Eemil

2021-05-27 17:56:12 UTC

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When his brother kicks the ball into the goal, his team becomes the one in the lead.
New:
When his brother kicks the soccer ball into the goal with high speed, his team starts off losing and then becomes the one winning.

Lena

lbarbour24 — 2021-05-27 17:56:25 UTC

When I watch my hit the toy ball back and fourth it looks like he is playing soccer.

kewy

2021-05-27 17:56:45 UTC

Kimberly

2021-05-27 17:57:24 UTC

Sri

sreddy241 — 2021-05-27 17:58:29 UTC

When I play with my tennis ball, its starts quiet and becomes me making a lot of noise.

Sean

2021-05-27 18:00:16 UTC

moni 2#

2021-05-27 18:01:12 UTC

When Katelyn irritates me, i get horribly mad.

Lyla

2021-05-27 18:02:52 UTC

Maggie and Lyla's obsession with diego grows stronger each day, starting as a deep admiration and became the kind of love that consists of killing wives and getting married to diego.

sub to stuart

2021-05-27 18:02:54 UTC

Isla

2021-05-27 18:03:22 UTC

Maggie

mbrodie24 — 2021-05-27 18:03:37 UTC

moni

2021-05-27 18:03:54 UTC

sub to stuart

2021-05-27 18:03:56 UTC

sub to stuart

2021-05-27 18:04:29 UTC