https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c Made with a wish on a star en-us 2020-10-07 14:24:43 UTC 2020-10-09 15:06:32 UTC hello@padlet.com kfort1591 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/812123879 Kailey Fortner
Your paper was great! I would recommend adding more transitions at the beginning of your paragraphs. I liked your lead.


]]> 2020-10-07 23:43:59 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/812123879 kfort1591 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/812137397 Step 1- Click the link, click "open new window" and go to slide 4.
Step 2- Click on a link in one of the BINGO boxes.
Step 3- Read the story and make comments using your checklist. Your comments will be posted in this Padlet. Be sure to include your name in your comment and the initials of the person you are leaving the comment for.
Step 4- Continue reading and commenting on stories until Ms. Fortner tells you to stop.]]> 2020-10-07 23:53:05 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/812137397 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813516340 I like your bingo board mrs.long]]> 2020-10-08 12:42:59 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813516340 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813527347 Kayleigh Short
I loved your story Layla! It had a lot of dialogue, action, detail, and internal thoughts and feelings. By what I can see, I don’t think you really need to add anything. Good job!]]> 2020-10-08 12:46:16 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813527347 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813532471 Lola Westadt 
I love your story just maybe add a little more internal thoughts and fix your grammar but overall great story.]]> 2020-10-08 12:47:46 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813532471 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813536371 I went on the wrong part of the slide... never mind the comment about Layla’s story 😂]]> 2020-10-08 12:48:53 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813536371 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813553527 Ryleigh Witt   I think that you have a lot of good detail but I think that you need to finish and at the beginning where it said it was 6:45 the it should have been capitalized because it was the beginning of a sentence]]> 2020-10-08 12:53:57 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813553527 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813561038             Jasmin Westfall 
You had a really good story but you forgot some words if you want you could go back and fix it if you wanted but other than that your detail was good you did a good job!]]> 2020-10-08 12:56:08 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813561038 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813561450 John Martin
I think your story sounds great and has a lot of detail. I can’t think of anything else that it needs.]]> 2020-10-08 12:56:14 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813561450 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813561521 Logyn Olson~ I really liked your story and maybe try to not say names as much but overall it was great%👍🏽👍🏽]]> 2020-10-08 12:56:15 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813561521 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813562744 Kayleigh Short
I really liked your story, but I really think that in the speaker tags, add more stuff like “I/they said excitedly” I think they just need some more emotion😁]]> 2020-10-08 12:56:35 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813562744 s27mcne5301 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813571141 Eddie McNees 
Your story was really good but try not to say names over and over ]]> 2020-10-08 12:58:56 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813571141 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813573365 Bl I think you did great on your story]]> 2020-10-08 12:59:33 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813573365 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813582937 Ryleigh Witt
I think that you should make it more detailed and you just have a random b at the end of one of your sentences. Also you should make it longer and also instead of just saying I said you could say it with more detail and felling cause it sounds like your not wanting to do this and that your having no fun ]]> 2020-10-08 13:02:08 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813582937 s27ohae2702 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813585203 all of her speak]]> 2020-10-08 13:02:35 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813585203 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813587217 Kayleigh Short
I really loved your story! I loved all of the detail, dialogue, and internal thoughts/feelings in your story! I don’t think there is anything that you could really add, good work! 😁]]> 2020-10-08 13:03:07 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813587217 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813587724 I think you could add some transition words in your story but other than that your story was good 👍]]> 2020-10-08 13:03:15 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813587724 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813592508 Mark olle 
I like your story a lot it has good dialogue and lots of detail, the story really shows what it was like as you were young and as you are now. I don’t have much else to say but it’s great and there’s not much wrong about it.]]> 2020-10-08 13:04:28 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813592508 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813597124 Lola Westadt 
Add a title and a By:your name but overall your story is really goood]]> 2020-10-08 13:05:38 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813597124 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813600418 Kayleigh Short
I think you could add more details, and use more emotion in your speaker tags. I also think that maybe you could add more action and internal thoughts/feelings.]]> 2020-10-08 13:06:27 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813600418 s27ohae2702 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813601026 Great job ]]> 2020-10-08 13:06:38 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813601026 s27mcne5301 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813602998 Eddie McNees 
You had a few spelling errors but your story was good ]]> 2020-10-08 13:07:10 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813602998 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813604605 Ryleigh Witt 
I thought that it was good but you have some miss spelled words and your missing some words for example, when you said “we hoped side by side” you should have said we hopped in the side by side. But other wise I think it’s good]]> 2020-10-08 13:07:35 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813604605 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813610343 John Martin 
Your stour is really action packed and is great. I think you could add some more detail though.]]> 2020-10-08 13:08:52 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813610343 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813612770 Lola Westadt 
You need to and paragons and indenting
Overall it was ok]]> 2020-10-08 13:09:29 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813612770 s27ohae2702 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813617831 Love the lead and the strong theme

]]> 2020-10-08 13:10:47 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813617831 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813619172 Mackenzie Eggering 
Your story is great but you need to work on your grammar ]]> 2020-10-08 13:11:08 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813619172 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813632423 Lola Westadt 
Love your story but next time maybe some internal thought like what were you thinking when you were nervous but overall your story was really good]]> 2020-10-08 13:14:31 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813632423 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813642821 Mark olle
Your story fort in the creek was interesting but had a few things in need of working on like the dialogue, spelling And detail ]]> 2020-10-08 13:17:09 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813642821 s27calh7033 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813781687 To whom created “Cerebral Palsy“ please check your use of “&”, but overall I really admire your use of inner thoughts and feeling. Your story was great! 
                       -Hayden]]> 2020-10-08 13:50:52 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/813781687 s27ohae2702 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816487302 I like the movie and very fun ]]> 2020-10-09 12:38:57 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816487302 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816526088 The story’s are amazing every body was great 👁👄👁            
                          ]]> 2020-10-09 12:53:17 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816526088 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816527401 I think your story is really good and it was really fun to read I can’t wait to read more - Julian]]> 2020-10-09 12:53:45 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816527401 s27braa7694 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816529717 Lola westadt 
Your story was grate but there were some parts that I had to stop and think about what I was reading because it was hard to understand. ]]> 2020-10-09 12:54:36 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816529717 s27braa7694 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816533912 Carder Davis, I think you could have had just a little bit more detail.]]> 2020-10-09 12:56:10 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816533912 s27braa7694 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816545178 2020-10-09 13:00:23 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816545178 s27braa7694 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816548421 Login Olsen,
I love your beginner ]]> 2020-10-09 13:01:31 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816548421 s27ohae2702 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816548964 2020-10-09 13:01:42 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816548964 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816553350 I love everyone’s writing, you all have done very well]]> 2020-10-09 13:03:01 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816553350 s27braa7694 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816560596 2020-10-09 13:05:21 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816560596 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816561254 Great job to everyone. Well done

]]> 2020-10-09 13:05:35 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816561254 s27glim4665 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816563803 I like everyone’s writing they are all so interesting ]]> 2020-10-09 13:06:22 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816563803 s27bonb8837 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816570851 I really liked your story. I loved how you went out of your comfort zone to talk about something private and important to you. That’s cool.]]> 2020-10-09 13:08:30 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816570851 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816580316 I think you could have added what happened between some parts, and adding detail into those parts you could add. But otherwise I loved the story of you racing your four wheeler.
              -Bobby G

]]> 2020-10-09 13:11:35 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816580316 s27braa7694 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816589353 Dakota Durr,
Your title is confusing ]]> 2020-10-09 13:14:23 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816589353 s27ohae2702 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816592083 To whom created “Cerebral Palsy“ please check your use of “&”, but overall I really admire your use of inner thoughts and feeling. Your story was great! 
                       -Hayden]]> 2020-10-09 13:15:16 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816592083 s27braa7694 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816597929 Dakota Durr,
Some of your transaction Words are weird]]> 2020-10-09 13:17:07 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/sndungkr55axh14c/wish/816597929