College Personal Statement Analysis by Avi Barnes https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb After we read each personal statements answer the questions in the first column for each essay. This is informal writing, keywords and phrases are fine (doesn't have to be complete sentences). en-us 2021-07-28 17:44:49 UTC 2026-02-04 02:57:47 UTC hello@padlet.com Wassana T. (EXAMPLE) avibarnes https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663329183 1.Family is important, being the eldest fulfilling goals is important.
2.When parent does not support their decision, but prove them wrong by balancing education and house work.
3. She shared this to prove her strength, show the admissions that she can take responsibility.
4. This made her stand out because most of her experience that she explained are burn outs for people,  some people have supportive life but could not take challenges.
5. Her experience show how she progress when she challenged herself and her family did not support her.]]> 2021-07-28 17:44:49 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663329183 Ms. B (EXAMPLE) avibarnes https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663329193 1. This reveals that she is a caring person and that she has a lot of responsibilities in her life.
2....]]> 2021-07-28 17:44:49 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663329193 Tyler (EXAMPLE) avibarnes https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663329194 1. She is a hardworking, responsible, and passionate student.
2. She beautifully takes us through the journey of her experience with different careers and how she settled onto bioengineering.
3. Sharing this shows how invested she is in her education. As well as her burdens and development as a person.
4. Shows dedication 
5. She seems to reflects positively on her experiences in finding her career.]]> 2021-07-28 17:44:49 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663329194 mary avibarnes https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663329200 1. she went through a lot, also has a lot of responsibility.
2.  she know what she wanted to do which is helping people
3. determination and the challenge she face 
4. she went through hard time but never give up
5. she loving helping people 
6. work in the medical field    

]]> 2021-07-28 17:44:49 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663329200 The Questions: avibarnes https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663329203 1. What does this experience reveal about the applicant?

2.What makes it significant or special?

3.Why do you think she shared this with admissions?

4.How does this experience/event make her standout?

5.How does she reflect on how the experience taught her lessons or changed her view on the topic/life?
]]> 2021-07-28 17:44:49 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663329203 Bao https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663344487 1. She is working hard to pay for rent
2. She got to take care of residents despite that it was tedious work. 
3. She is sharing this with admissions because she wants to focus on medical fields to improve the community health.
4. This experiences makes her stand out because her parents want to inspire her to become a doctor.
5. She had revealed about bioengineering.
6. She had learned that bioengineering is the path that will allow her to solve real-world problems]]> 2021-07-28 18:11:39 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663344487 Muna M https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663347586 1: The experience reveals that she is a hardworking student who tries to do everything within her power to help her low income mother.
2: What makes this story significant is how hardworking the students is. I think colleges want to know you can handle challenging work and she already proved she can handle it.
3: I think she shared her story with the admissions because it makes her stand out.
4: Her experience makes her stand out because not many people are on the same boat she is in.
5: She does reflect on how her experience taught her to be hardworking and resilient.  ]]> 2021-07-28 18:17:19 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663347586 Zane L https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663347705 1. She's hardworking and she need to pay rent.
2. I think her working with the residents was really special 
3. Shows she ready to work
4. Its a unique experience
5. She likes helping people ]]> 2021-07-28 18:17:33 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663347705 Marwa Qayumi sn398459 https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663347714 1. The experience reveal that she is a hard working and caring person.
2. The experience that she had to work to help her mother pay for rent  which she went through so much difficulties.
3. I think she shared the admissions because she wanted to show how she deals with difficult times and how she cares.
4. I think because she loved to help people, helps her standout.
5. working in the medical field.

]]> 2021-07-28 18:17:34 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663347714 Fartun Dirif https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663347778 1. It revels that she's a hardworking person.

2. What makes special is that she works to help her mom with bills and she's very talented.

3. She shared this with admission because it relates to her topic and what she's trying to discuss.

4. It makes her stand out because not a lot people help there parents pay the bills.

5. Because she made a lot progress which helped her recognize what she wants to pursue. ]]> 2021-07-28 18:17:42 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663347778 Nhi https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663348020 1. She is a person who is very much caring for others and is hardworking. 
2. She worked in a nursing home which gave her the opportunity to take care of others. 
3. I think this was shared with admissions because the experience and journey she had went through, shows the lessons and perseverance she brought along with her showing who she is. 
4. This made her stand out because you can see how independent she was and she showed how she was figuring herself out.  ]]> 2021-07-28 18:18:05 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663348020 Siam L https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663348167 1. She is a hard working caring student.
2. The experience made her realize what she interested in and what she wanted to do.
3. She shared this story as the story tells who she is and what she is passionate about and why. 
4. The story shows how independent and hardworking she is. the story also shows off her experience and her realization
5. Help her find what she wants to study. ]]> 2021-07-28 18:18:25 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663348167 Marvin Flores https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663348189 1. She's independent and she worked hard for what she wanted to achieve
2. The struggle 
3. To show how hard she worked to get there and how much she was interested in it
4. This Makes her standout because it shows that she did everything by herself and worked hard to get there.

]]> 2021-07-28 18:18:27 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663348189 Jurry Flores https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663348251 1. She is a hardworking person and cares for her people.
2. It shows her experience of someone who works hard for her mother and still makes time to show her love in the career she picks.
3.  She shared this to prove that she is responsible.
4. She stands out because it shows her burn out of working alone.
5. Her being in the medical field. ]]> 2021-07-28 18:18:34 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663348251 Jared Tellez https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663348978 1. Reveals she is a diligent independent student 
2. what makes this special is i doubt most of the other people at her school are going through this same experience 
3.  She shared it because it shows how she transitioned through her struggles 
4. Most high school students don't have to provide for their families 
5.]]> 2021-07-28 18:19:41 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663348978 Maryam Noori https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663350462 1: She is very diligent person she is willing to put all her work to do something she likes.
2: She is showing her parents that she can balance her school life and her normal life and can do both is special.
3: To show that she will do anything to get something she wants, she showed that she will take responsibilities and will not give up.
4: This experience make her stand out because she is doing several hard jobs at once taking care of her siblings, doing school work, working towards an IB diploma, and etc.
5: I think this experience taught her that she can balance her life out she can take responsibilities and she is capable of doing a lot more. ]]> 2021-07-28 18:22:42 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663350462 shayla H. https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663351138 1.shes an independent person and she rely on her self  to get things done 
2.what makes this special is that people have similar problems and questions 
3.the struggles
4.what made her stand out is 
that some people don't have to take care of siblings or help out around the house .
5. she had positive attitude and she took responsibilities when her mom got the point were she got weak and could help with the kids and she made time for her siblings and school and studying.]]> 2021-07-28 18:24:02 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663351138 Zeyuan https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663351566 1. genuine and willing 
2. She's very strong and involved in her interest, but is also a example of career change.
3. Really shows her will to make a change in her subject regardless of the form.
4. Willingness to change but also adapt.
5. The feeling of belonging and success over the regiment of your aimless beliefs is that of a better path.]]> 2021-07-28 18:24:51 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663351566 Deka https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663351568 1. She is hardworking to help pay rent and help herself
2. She wants to help in the nursing home
3. She shared because how she worked so hard for her job and the job gave her a opportunitie to grow.
4. This makes her stand out because she had to wake up early to wake up to pay rent and get a job experience.
5. working in the medical field and helping people.]]> 2021-07-28 18:24:52 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663351568 Bao https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663351609 1. Family is very important of her life, but education is also important because she is responsible for what she needs to work on, including IB classes.
2. She took care of her family, such as doing chores and taking care of siblings. However, she is taking IB classes which she had thought that her parents would be more supportive in.
3. She had shared this to admissions because even though IB classes are difficult for her she wanted to balance it out between family and school.
4. Even though it was difficult to take IB classes, she wanted to challenge herself while getting good grades.
5.  Despite that this was a troublesome thought, she was doing well in IB classes while taking care of her siblings. She was still showing them that she can balance her life priorities.
6. She had learned that even though IB classes had shown her challenges in pursuing her goals, she was still persistent in achieving them]]> 2021-07-28 18:24:58 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663351609 Zane L https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663351737 1. That she had huge amount of responsibility but is still willing to challenge herself.
2. What makes it special was her challenging herself with IB and that was also significant because then she showed she could balance family and school.
3. It shows a lot about her as a person how responsible she it but also how hardworking she is
4. It makes her standout because it shows she has the ability to balance life.
5. It taught her balance and she reflects on it a way that really shows that it was hard.]]> 2021-07-28 18:25:14 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663351737 Fartun Dirif https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663352180 1. Although she didn't have any support she still found away to still do her best and overcome the things she was going through at home

2. what makes her special is  even though she had  a limited support system she still found a solution.

3. Because she  wanted to indicate that she is independent and hardworking  even through her troubles.  

4. It makes her stand out because she truly only had her self and she was her own best interest. 

5.  Her experiences taught her that even if you don't have a great support system no matter what continue to overcome your struggles and keep going ]]> 2021-07-28 18:25:52 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663352180 Deka Gesod https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663352803 1. She is balancing her home life and school. She can balance her life really well.
2. This is special because she is also a parent to her younger siblings and working hard to maintain her IB classes which is very hard to do.
3. She is sharing this because she went through so much hardship of focusing on herself and others and balancing that out can be really hard.
4. This makes her standout by she can do manage her time really well.
5. That she can still achieve her goals even though it can be hard.]]> 2021-07-28 18:27:03 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663352803 Marvin Flores https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663353823 1. It reveals that family is important for her
2. I think it makes it special because it tells about a family vs school problem which some students relate to.
3. Because it reveals that she can have time for family and education
4. It makes her standout because it shows how responsible she is by taking care of her family and also having good grades on IB classes 
5. This experience showed her that she can have time for both family and education.]]> 2021-07-28 18:29:03 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663353823 Muna M https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663353994 1: The experience reveals that the applicant is one of a kind and hardworking. 
2: Her experience is significant because not many students have all the responsibilities that are upon her. 
3: I think she shared it with admissions because her experience shaped her view on life.
4: Her experience makes her stand out because not many students can balance school and life.
5: Her experience taught her that balance is key to survival. ]]> 2021-07-28 18:29:17 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663353994 Siam L https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663354041 1. Independent, helpful, caring, capable student. Values family. Balances well.
2. The story shows how capable the student is, taking care of her siblings while challenging herself at school.
3. She shared this experience because it showed how capable she is, and how good at balancing she is.
4. She was put in a position where she had heavy responsibility while pushing herself academically shows how capable she is.
5. In the final paragraph she talks about how she is persistent and how she is good at balancing. ]]> 2021-07-28 18:29:24 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663354041 Marwa Qayumi sn398459 https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663354185 1. Family and the school challenges. 
2. She showed her family that she can balance her school and normal life.
3. To show how hard working she is and how she does things to achieve what she wants.
4. Working in two parts of her life at once, makes her standout.]]> 2021-07-28 18:29:43 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663354185 Nhi https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663354187 1. This reveals that the student is very passionate about family and is someone who sets high standards for themselves. 
2. The student's parents were not as impressed or proud but they still proceeded to push through the obstacle. 
3. Sharing this shows that she is a hardworking student who can lead and push through difficult challenges. 
4. This makes her stand out since had troubles with family but managed to pull through on her own either way. ]]> 2021-07-28 18:29:43 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663354187 Jared Tellez https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663354453 1. Reveals that she is a student of many responsibilities but also can hold a balance
2. She was getting minimal support yet persevered with the college level classes 
3. A college student needs to know how to have balance, her essay showed that she has experienced this already firsthand 
4. Good grades wasn't enough for her she wanted a real challenge 
5. She is independent and knows how to maintain a balance, most importantly she kept her composure ]]> 2021-07-28 18:30:17 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663354453 Jurry Flores https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663354749 1. She is able to take challenges.
2. It tells that even when her parents did not approve, she kept going to show her parents that she can do it.
3. Shows her dedication.
4. She stands out because even with so much work, she was able to make it through.
5. She reflects on this experience to work hard and prove her hard work.]]> 2021-07-28 18:30:54 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663354749 Husna https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663357335 she is hardworking, pro acitve, and responsible.
she want a lot of work and responsibility.

]]> 2021-07-28 18:36:11 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663357335 Saad https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663358042 1. She can maintain the balance between helping her family and keeping up with school work and challenging herself with harder classes is tough work.
2. She challenged herself with harder classes while already having mild difficulty with taking care of her siblings and school work.
3. She is happy to share her achievements because it is a hard thing to accomplish with little support from the parents.
4. She kept a balance between schoolwork and taking care of the family as the eldest sibling.
5. She tells us her experiences helped her become the person she is today and how you need to challenge yourself to achieve greater things.

]]> 2021-07-28 18:37:44 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663358042 Zeyuan https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663402780 1. Firm and persistent 
2. She was able work by the family needs and still strive.
3. Tells about her broad capacity and flexibility and the same ability to subject herself for success.
4. The absurd and unreasonable request that she as to reason with.
5. Her strength can shake the reality of which other project on her.]]> 2021-07-28 20:00:41 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663402780 Muna https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663588072 1. She’s hardworking and is determined 
2. The uncertainty and raw struggle 
3. Because she wanted to express her story to pursue her career within UW 
4. That she work up early even working to help pay rent 
5. That she is capable of hard-work 
]]> 2021-07-29 01:38:13 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663588072 Muna Ali https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663589123 1. That family is important to her and plays a huge part in her life
2. That she stepped in as a second mother to her siblings 
3. Because she was preserving her home life and school life. Handling both parts of her life which is challenging 
4. She didn’t have support from her parents in the beginning but she continued to work hard and got her IB diploma!
5. That even though you don’t have fun or support from others it matters to set yourself first sometimes. And your priorities floor your own benefit. 
]]> 2021-07-29 01:39:12 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663589123 Muna Ali https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663590222 1. She’s hardworking and is determined 
2. The uncertainty and raw struggle 
3. Because she wanted to express her story to pursue her career within UW 
4. That she work up early even working to help pay rent 
5. That she is capable of hard-work 
]]> 2021-07-29 01:40:39 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663590222 Arvin Hakimi https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663676076 1. She is working very hard because  she need pay rent.
2. She is strong and never gives up.
3. she shared because how hard she worked, how much effort she put into getting here.
4.  It makes her stand out because She worked every job to pay the rent of the house, even jobs she didn't want.
5. She realized how much her experience had helped her and understood how she had overcome difficulties.]]> 2021-07-29 03:10:37 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663676076 Arvin Hakimi https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663699656 1. Her family is the most important thing to her.
2. He showed how he manages both his school life and his own life at the same time.
3. She told how much effort it took to get somewhere in the future.
4. She studied and managed to become an IB student, which makes him stand out.
5. This experience taught her how to achieve what she wanted.]]> 2021-07-29 03:33:07 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1663699656 Zane I https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1667081038 1. This candidate can adapt to difficult social and financial problems.
2. she has a lot of emotional endurance when it comes to anxiety and anger.
3. She is addmitting her struggles so we can understand it a little bit better.
4. The ability to deal with such problems tells us that she has very good problem solving skills which makes her standout.
5. She has learned from her negitive expieriences which not alot of people can do in this day of age.  ]]> 2021-08-02 20:55:48 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1667081038 Zane,I https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1668214073 1. Family is important to her especially.
2 she was a sort of caregiver to her siblings because her parents were not available.
3. There was a lot of pressure from her parents to take care of her siblings instead of attending college.
4. Besides all of the pressure she became a IB student.
5. Her experience taught her how to pursue dreams that seemed impossible.]]> 2021-08-03 22:22:58 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1668214073 Nasteho https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1668426117
  • Her experience reveals that she's a hardworking person who is inspired by other people
  • What makes it significant is that it's a good trait that can help her
  • To tell them her story 
  • It makes her stand out because it’s her own unique story and the problem she face and her hard work
  • She wants to solve problems that affect people’s well being and she wants to take that path

    • ]]>     2021-08-04 02:52:10 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1668426117     Nasteho https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1668461155
  • She is very persistent 
  • What makes it significant is that she showed her parents she was doing well with school and her responsibilities at home 
  • She wants to show them what kind of person she is and how she doesn't give up easily
  • This experience makes her stand out because her story is quite different from others
  • She reflects on her experience by continuing to achieve her goals and being persistent

    • ]]>     2021-08-04 03:26:49 UTC https://padlet.com/avibarnes/skoq1vfwnjtobhfb/wish/1668461155