jackson vc. Google Sites Peer Feedback 2020 - 2021 by Jackson Viscardi-Carelse https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-04 18:50:53 UTC 2025-11-18 03:47:28 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Apple.png 2 stars and a wish https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1513019001 I like how you used a lot of transition words throughout the paragraph. I also like how you were very descriptive. Next time maybe do not post the entire doc and instead just copy and paste the essay]]> 2021-05-11 12:32:46 UTC https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1513019001 27gredling https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1513034200 I really like how you started your essay and it was very discriptive. It also included a lot of dialogue and facts

]]> 2021-05-11 12:37:01 UTC https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1513034200 To Jackson 27jsachkowsky https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1513611924 I really liked in the begging on how expressive you were telling the readers how you feel about kids playing sports and I 100% agree but my wish is for you to put a title next time.]]> 2021-05-11 14:40:13 UTC https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1513611924 Two stars and a wish Persuasive Essay 27kpilley https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1513999491 I really liked your piece I liked how you described the real life experiences of somebody getting into a college and the others person is to tired to play back to back because they had to much screens and the negative affects that they can have.  Another really good piece of your essay was how you started it off telling the reader about how you could end up like if you don’t make the effort and play sports or at least be outside.  One wish I have for you though is if you added a little more detail about what was happening in the moment it would make it better because readers would have a clear vision in their head About what exactly was happening.  Overall this was a very good writing piece and you did an amazing job.]]> 2021-05-11 15:55:12 UTC https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1513999491 Matt M 27mmartucci https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1518028939 Star- I really liked how you described how unhealthy it is for kids to not get outside and just sit in the house playing video games all day. Star- I liked your 2nd body paragraph when your described the feeling from that kid when he got excepted into UCLA. Wish- I wish you could’ve added more but other wise great job!]]> 2021-05-12 15:49:08 UTC https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1518028939 big brain AJ 27ahagopian https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1612541698 I liked how creative your story was with the sports getting sad and all. I also found your top secret mission very funny and interesting. Your story was great but I felt like you should have put all your bullet points together.

]]> 2021-06-17 15:45:44 UTC https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1612541698 Creative Writing Piece 27jhutchinson1 https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1614376665 My first star is that I liked how you added the bullet points in different places to whether it fit after which paragraph. I thought that was really creative. My second star is that I loved the little story about the football team at the end. It shows how the truth can happen and that you need to watch out. My wish though, is that I thought you repeated some things. But otherwise good piece.]]> 2021-06-18 14:06:18 UTC https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1614376665 Aidan https://padlet.com/27jviscardicarelse/shonbhrlphqzkpve/wish/1614732940 i like how the spy music activated
I like the name Tyrone Jamal James washington III
There were some capitalization errors 

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