https://padlet.com/Haidyn_B/clickheretogivemefeedback123456 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-05 19:37:18 UTC 2021-10-19 21:58:57 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-uploads.storage.googleapis.com/625054346/86606847058bd381e8a3f9b6e407bbbd/200w__2_.gif 27cbirck https://padlet.com/Haidyn_B/clickheretogivemefeedback123456/wish/1513725236 Dear Haidyn, your writing piece was OUT OF THIS WORLD!  “He has to go to school, has to go and get ready for the bright yellow school bus,” I loved that sentence and the detail it that was amazing!  I loved the beginning of your essay, “Imagine a child about m10, sitting on the couch with a game controller in his hands and headset on his ears.”  My only wish is a very tiny one, to put some comas to make the sentences a little shorter.  Other than that your essay was amazing, and AWESOME!
From your (Awesome) friend,
 (The Amazing) Caitlin Birck :)]]> 2021-05-11 15:02:52 UTC https://padlet.com/Haidyn_B/clickheretogivemefeedback123456/wish/1513725236 https://padlet.com/Haidyn_B/clickheretogivemefeedback123456/wish/1517975931 Haidyn, I absolutely loved your essay even though I did not agree with it. A great point in it though was how you used lots of descriptive words in your warrants. Also, i thought it was great how you really set up the situations. I think That was the true highlight of your essay. One thing I wish you done was cut down on the total over the top way of showing kids that may be addicted, i think that doing this is truly through the eyes of someone who has personal and biased opinions. But The essay all together was amazing and You are a great writer! keep up the great work  ]]> 2021-05-12 15:37:30 UTC https://padlet.com/Haidyn_B/clickheretogivemefeedback123456/wish/1517975931 27liannotta https://padlet.com/Haidyn_B/clickheretogivemefeedback123456/wish/1612334802 Hi Haidyn! The first thing that I noticed that really stood out to me was that when you wrote, you used words and techniques that made me feel like you were talking to me in real time, but obviously you weren’t. For example, “So my last words of advice to you is, DON’T YELL! Wait, did that wall just move? OH NO! AHH! Sorry, got to gooooooo…” The second thing that I enjoyed about your creative writing piece was that you used a lot of description words and a lot of figurative language to elevate your piece to another level. One thing that I noticed was that you were missing some words and had like one or two uncapitalized I’s but that doesn’t matter much. At the end of your piece you were missing the word you and some other places in the piece you needed to add some words. Otherwise, I really enjoyed your piece a lot and it was really creative.]]> 2021-06-17 14:10:53 UTC https://padlet.com/Haidyn_B/clickheretogivemefeedback123456/wish/1612334802 27npilgrim https://padlet.com/Haidyn_B/clickheretogivemefeedback123456/wish/1612564878 hi Haidyn I loved your piece I know my little sister screams in the house.I also liked how descriptive your little story about the kid Norman was.however I did want to read a little bit more but your piece was still really fun to read and look ar\t ]]> 2021-06-17 15:56:37 UTC https://padlet.com/Haidyn_B/clickheretogivemefeedback123456/wish/1612564878 27dlassman https://padlet.com/Haidyn_B/clickheretogivemefeedback123456/wish/1614438900 I thought your peice was very funny and creative. I thought it was very creative because the role you chose is not a very commen role like the brushing your teeth the peice you wrote was the only inside  once role and I think that makes it creative. One star i have is the role book because the role just do not talk is funny another star is your summery that we do not know much about the yelling walls and that you do not have time to list them all I thought it was a very good way to rap your story up. My one wish is for a reaction for the parents going missing two but overall it is great]]> 2021-06-18 14:38:19 UTC https://padlet.com/Haidyn_B/clickheretogivemefeedback123456/wish/1614438900