Padlet đặc sắc của tôi by Phuong Le https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o Được tạo bằng một vầng hào quang bí ẩn en-us 2022-03-09 12:25:43 UTC 2022-03-12 02:54:29 UTC hello@padlet.com Writting: Linh Anh https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2086036287 The table illustrates how an Australia ( --> Australian) family spent ( thêm monthly) in 1991 and 2001.
Overall, it can be seen that there was an upward trend in most of these items. However, the expenditure of housing and transprortation ( lỗi chính tả) was lower in 2001.
In 1991, as can be seen ( bỏ câu này) , the budget for goods & services was the highest of all the expenditure with $250 per month. This figure rose to $20 in 2001. Food budget was the second largest with $155 in 1991 which increased slightly to $160 in 2001. For housing, $95 was spent on this item and this number grew to $100 at this time.
The allocation for transportation decresed from $70 in 1991 to just $45 in 2001. At the same time, electricity & water budget was $75 per month in 1991 before going up to $120 in 2001. The amount of money spent on clothing was $30 in 1991 which fell to just $20 in 2001.
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]]> 2022-03-09 13:20:11 UTC https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2086036287 Cao minh minhdabacon https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2086046762 The table shows the (thêm monthly) spending of an average Australian family between 1991 and 2001.

Overall, the expenditure of an average Australian family was higher in 2001 than 1991, 715 Dollars and 675 dollars per month respectively.  ( có thể thêm thông tin là  Except Clothing và Transport  declined )

The budget spent on electricity and water saw an increase over ten years from 75$ to 120$.  In terms of  expendicture in  other goods and services, the rise of it was just 20$. At the same time, "food" and "Housing" items both rose slightly 5$. From 95$ to 100$ and from 155$ to 160$ respectively.
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However, there was a small decrease in spending on 2 other items which were Clothing and Transport. They spent less in clothing --> the former which was ( bỏ) --> with 30$ in 1991 but drop to 20$ in the next 10 years. Similarly, the budget for transport--> the later decreased from 70$ in 1991 to 45$ in 2001. 

It could be seen that the expendicture on food and other goods and services was the biggest item which an average family spent on in both 2001 and 1991. Altogether, they accounted for more than a half of the total spending. By comparison, the Westminster were poured into the clothing category.  ( đoạn này là không cần thiết, em nên lấy ý chính bổ sung vào đoạn thứ 3 trong bài vì các thông tin đều liên quan đến nhau và để tránh dài dòng)

Note: Chú ý phân bổ nội dung và bố cục 1 bài Task 1 hợp lý, sắp xếp các ý có liên quan với nhau, nêu cụ thể số liệu, và chú ý không viết kết bài trong Task 1

 

 

]]> 2022-03-09 13:25:35 UTC https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2086046762 Task1-Tùng https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2086054047    Given  is the table indicating how an Australian household spent (thêm monthly) on six different types of goods  from 1991 to 2001.
   Overall, a glance at the chart reveals that ( bỏ câu này)  the total monthly spending was paid in 2001 was higher than that in 1991 and Australian spent more money on almost areas except clothing and transport.
   Looking at the detail, it can be seen that they spent the largest expenditure on other goods and service in both 2 years with 250$ in 1991 and rose slightly to 270$ in 2001. The two next biggest budget Australian spent on are (--> were) food with 155$ and housing with 95$ in 1991 and both of these budget ( lặp từ both) --> they all increased 5$

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By contrast,  while ( bỏ while) The allocation for clothing  and transport  witnessed a decline (was 30$ and transport with 70$, two of them fell to 20$ and 45$)-->  from 30$ in 1991 to 20$ in 2001 ,and 70$ in 1991 to 45$ in 2001 respectively. In 2001 saw a significant increase of the spending on the electricity and water from 75$ to 120$.( câu này em nên viết ở đoạn thứ 3, chia rõ ràng đoạn nói về cái tăng và đoạn nói về cái giảm) ]]> 2022-03-09 13:29:28 UTC https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2086054047 lephuong25091999 https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2086067158 2022-03-09 13:36:26 UTC https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2086067158 lephuong25091999 https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2086068436 2022-03-09 13:37:06 UTC https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2086068436 Ngọc Mai https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2086245203 The given table compares the monthly expend ( từ này là Verb --> expenditure) of an average Australian family between the year 1991 and 2001.
Overall, most of Australian family's monthly spending in 2001 was higher than those in 1991. ( có thể thêm thông tin là các hộ gia đình dành tiền vào hầu hết các types of goods ngoại trừ...)
Looking at the table, in 1991, the expenditure of --> on food increased from 155 dollars to 160 dollars per month in 2001. There was a considerable increase ( lặp từ increase --> rise) in Electricity and Water, from 75 dollars per month in 1991 to 120 dollars in 2001. We can see (an increase ( lặp từ)  in --> bỏ cụm này) housing rose  from 95 dollars per month to 100 dollars per month for 10 years. Thêm từ Besides, other goods and services increased ( lặp từ) -->reached over 270 dollars in 2001 as well

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However, we can see ( lặp cụm we can see)--> there was a fall in Clothing from 30 dollars per month in 1991 to 20 dollars per month in 2002. Also, there was a decline in ( bỏ)  Transport winessed a decline from 70 dollars to 45 dollars per month.]]> 2022-03-09 14:56:50 UTC https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2086245203 Hien_task 1 https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2087914332 The line graph illustrate the number of visitors from the UK who went abroad and those visited this country from 1979 to 1999, while the bar chart show some nations which UK residents tended to visit most in the year of 1999.
Overall, it can be seen that there was an increase in the number of both types of visits and France was the most propular country for the British.
 According to the line graphs, the number of visits abroad by UK residents was higher than that to the UK by overseas residents and this remained unchanged throughout this period. The figures were similar in 1979 about 10 million, but the number of people went abroad increased significantly to over 50 million in the year of 1999. In contrast, there was a steady rise in the number of overseas residents which reached just under 30 million in 1999.
Turning to the bar charts, the most popular countries ( --> country) to visit  ( --> visited) by UK residents was France because approximately 11 million visitors came to that country in 1999. The next favourite country was Spain with 2 million people less than that of France. The less popular countries for UK residents were the USA, Greece and Turkey with about 4,3 and 2 millions people coming to these countries respectively.
Score: 5.5

]]> 2022-03-10 08:55:09 UTC https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2087914332 Hien_task 2 https://padlet.com/lephuong25091999/sawz2e63euzyil1o/wish/2087917394 In recent times, there is a common trend that numerous women tend to give birth later in life. Many people think that this development is beneficial, while others suppose that it has more downsides than plus ones. This essay will look at some reasons for this trend before coming to the decision.
There are several causes why women choose to have children late. First of all, some people want to be finacially and emotionally stable before raising a child. In fact, the cost of living is becoming more expensive, which forces parents to have ability to afford these sheer expenses if they want to have a child. Moreover, many women are ambitous and they aim to achieve and accomplish ( bỏ) certain goals before becoming mothers. In reality, they have a tendency of pursuing higher education and having a well-paid job ,so getting married and giving birth to a child is not the primary priority.
On the one hand, it is undoubtedly true that there are some drawbacks for this trend. Firstly, women at higher age face more risks when they bear a child than younger ones. In fact, having children when reaching over 35 can affect pregnancy due to ageing health. Moreover, raising a child at old age is more arduous that( than) that at young age not only because of their age but their children are also too young to self-manage.
On the other hand, I would argue that the benefits of this development outweigh the drawbacks. First and foremost, when women are at old age, they have a stable job, which helps them to be easier to afford sheer cost on having kids. For example, women with highly-paid job can give birth to a child in an international hosiptal which provide modern equipment and better childcare. Furthermore, if women reach a certain age, they will be more mature and emotionally stable to raise kids. In fact, some young women have to suffer from depression because they have children at young age when they are not ready for becoming mothers. Last but not least, when having children at old age, ( --> thanks to having children later in life) women (thêm can) gain a lot of experience and overcome numerous challenges. This (thêm may) help them sympathize with their kids more easily and give their children useful advices when they are in trouble.
In conclusion, I suppose that benefits of women’s giving birth to a child at old age outweigh drawbacks because of reasons that I have mentioned above.
Note: 
- Chú ý sử dụng các từ: can, may, will... để khiến ý của câu văn nhẹ nhàng và khách quan hơn ( bởi vì thì hiện tại đơn diễn tả 1 sự thật ở hiện tại nên khi viết essay câu văn sẽ bị cứng nhắc và mang ý chủ quan)
- Diễn đạt ý tốt, mạch lạc, liên kết các câu bằng từ nối hợp lý
Score: 6.0 Exellent!
 

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