Secret Talents by Barry Elliott

Secret Talents

barryelliott2 — 2014-10-14 08:46:52 UTC

Write about a talent you have.

Use these questions to help you write your paragraph.

1. What is the talent?

2. Have you ever done it in public?

3. Is there a special way to do it?

4. Do you practice?

Also, use the written example on page 39 to help you with ideas

My talent So young

2014-10-15 09:58:41 UTC

My talent is that I can write music on stave when after listen to music. I can memorize the melodies when I am listening to music. I first discovered this talent when I was ten. I listened to music everyday and I liked to memorize the music which I heard. I have done this many times with my friends and teachers. I practice often writing down a music faster.

My talent Su Mi

2014-10-15 09:59:25 UTC

My talent is that I can make a doll. We call it ball jointed doll. I had an exhibition in my collage when I graduated. There are many ways to make a doll. Currently I'm studying anatomy of how to make a doll naturally. I haven't made one recently but I'm trying.

My talent soo jin

2014-10-15 10:00:05 UTC

My talent is that I can roast meat very well. When we get together in school, I always grill barbecue for my classmate. I first discovered this ability when I was teenager. I often practice cooking and learnt recipes from cooking program and blog. I have done it many times at meeting friend or classmate. They always like it. There is no magic secret, just to be practice.

Feedback

barryelliott2 — 2014-10-15 10:00:54 UTC

Ji Yu: Masic (spelling) - academy(1 was....) (space after academy) - instead of (change to including) - . So, (delete full stop and comma)

Soo Jin: is that roast mean (missing a subject and helping verb between that and roast) -

Su Mi: Doll (capital letter) - so called Ball jointed doll (delete so, add suject and verb) - I haven't done practice (delete done. Use past tense of practice) -

So Young: when I after (add 'and' between when and after. Move I to after after) - when I listening a music (add verb to be after I. delete a. add to)

My talent Ji Yu

2014-10-15 10:01:41 UTC

My talent is that I can sharpen a pencil in seven seconds. There is no magic secret. When I went to art academy (I was 17 years old), I sharpened many pencil for my freinds so I became faster and faster. Every time new student came academy, I showed my talent.

2014-10-16 10:59:13 UTC