https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-05 19:08:15 UTC 2021-06-22 15:42:44 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f353.png 27arebuth https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1067900175 I loved your piece about getting our puppy, Phoebe! I think it was good that you added her name at the end and I like all your thoughts! I like how you included why we chose phoebe! one thing that could be improved is how many dogs there were because that is a important part.]]> 2021-01-08 17:12:36 UTC https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1067900175 27ejohnston https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1083903202 I loved your metaphors and how you worded them! “The puppy was a frightened turtle crawling into her shell.” I also liked the describing words of the dog and how you were feeling. One wish I have is that you described the setting a little bit more, about what you saw around you. Over all I loved your piece!
Emma J]]> 2021-01-13 16:54:36 UTC https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1083903202 27jmazzola1 https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1513947784 Hi Josephine! Your essay was incredible!! One star I have is I loved your hook! You did a perfect job at describing the setting, and the situation the girl was in!! Another star I have is your zinger! I feel that quote completely describes the issue and wraps up your story so well! One wish I have is for you to work on your word choice. Using words like devastated instead of sad, or furious instead of angry will make your writing so much better! Overall, your essay was so good!!

-Jules]]> 2021-05-11 15:45:29 UTC https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1513947784 27ajuckes https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1513950655 hi jojo one of the outstanding parts of your essay is”why does the teacher not see students are struggling with sleep and homework?” The why you worded that really made me think about why do they not see, it really put the thought in my head. Something that caught my eye was all of your transition words but most of all is when you said “first of all” when I read that it really sound like you were like lesso to what I half to say and it really made me understand what you want me to take away from this. I have no wishes for you , to me your essay told me everything I needed to know and was filled with amazing writing ]]> 2021-05-11 15:46:04 UTC https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1513950655 27mabrams https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1513981639 Hi Josephine, I really enjoyed reading your writing piece! I liked how each time you described the data you explained it and didn’t say it straight forward for example, in your 1st body paragraph you didn’t say “kids will get better grades.” Instead you explained it very well and took your time and effort to not say it straight forward. Another star of mine is your call to action. I really liked it because you had given multiple solutions to problems created by school start times, for example you had mentioned that teachers should notice what is happening to students and then you had mentioned that people can try to get votes for school start times to be changed to more of a reasonable time. My only wish is that you check your punctuation. Other than that, I really enjoyed reading your Essay! ]]> 2021-05-11 15:51:51 UTC https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1513981639 27mcoppockhuegel https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1517955955 Hi Jojo! I loved everything about your essay. Your warrants made me feel something. I loved how your data was picked perfectly. I don't have any wishes for you!]]> 2021-05-12 15:33:13 UTC https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1517955955 https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1612336824 Hi Josephine I really liked your creative writing piece and loved how I easily envisioned the story in my head. I also liked the transitions in your story when you were talking about Facility then Molly. Even with all the amazing things about your story I have one wish that you didn’t rush the whole story to fit it into one with all the details. 

]]> 2021-06-17 14:11:44 UTC https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1612336824 27mcoppockhuegel https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1612447087 Hi Jojo, I really enjoyed reading your piece! My first star is how you put characters in your piece. For example, you put Felictity and Molly. When you interrupted the story for background knowledge, I liked that part. My second star is the reason why pants and shirts fight, i thought that was a fun part. I don't have a wish for you!]]> 2021-06-17 14:59:52 UTC https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1612447087 27arebuth https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1612852938 Hi Jojo, I liked your plot in your writing! The first star I have for you is that I loved your tips on the last slide! I love how you made up that email and how you made up that dryer divider! Very clever! The second star I have for you is that you interrupted your story for dialogue! I don't have a wish for you! Good job!]]> 2021-06-17 18:29:58 UTC https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1612852938 27bcolon1 https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1619910828 Hi jojo, I really enjoyed your piece my first star is how good the cover piece was it was so pretty and the details! I thought it was a real laundry basket haha!! My next star is that the dialogue. Josephine you did amazing it is wonderful and i adore your story! I have no wish for you.

- Brielle ✨😊]]> 2021-06-22 15:42:44 UTC https://padlet.com/27jrebuth/ruso5mcwfdd4op4z/wish/1619910828