https://padlet.com/26gbrown/rjqey2lcznyv Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 18:36:48 UTC 2025-10-27 15:05:42 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f95d.png https://padlet.com/26gbrown/rjqey2lcznyv/wish/420940897 A strength of your story “Haunting Thoughts” is the beautiful figurative language. I can imagine all the events in the story. When I read your story I’m experiencing all the vivid events. Another strength in your story is that it has a balance between thoughts and dialogue. You incorporate Blake and Jane’s dialogue exactly when it’s needed. Blake’s thoughts are also explained at the most crucial moments.A suggestion I can offer is to use a little more varied sentence structure. I noticed many of the same beginnings and words in sentences. This can make your story even better than it is now. I really enjoyed reading your story.

]]> 2019-12-06 18:55:08 UTC https://padlet.com/26gbrown/rjqey2lcznyv/wish/420940897 26ramberg https://padlet.com/26gbrown/rjqey2lcznyv/wish/421773441 I absolutely love your story!! I love all the description and I love the theme/ moral of your story. I love how you stated, “The onyx double doors opened, like an invitation to a party that no one wanted to go to.” I thought that was very creative. I really liked how you showed how much Blake cared about Jane especially when she went missing. I also really like how Blake went after Jane. I just suggest putting a space next to the I, “same way.I guess I’ll do it.” and fix “Blake splagfshed his face” to “Blake splashed his face.” I think you should definitely keep writing because your stories are amazing! 

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