Sebastien Google Sites Peer Feedback 2019 - 2020 by Sebastien Castillo Medina https://padlet.com/26scastillomedina/r8erjaz25bf4 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 18:36:41 UTC 2026-01-04 08:16:51 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-uploads.storage.googleapis.com/438973260/621779cfd15dbbcc3edda6d983b55c63/1n0uvj3w46421.jpg The Strength of your narrative is when you, in my opinion, look up to Celia to try to get the bullies to leave you alone I really think it is cool how others can be able to think that it is a-OK to listen to what others use as advice later on in life. It teaches others that you can always look up to others no matter what their age is sometimes there is no limit and age is just a number. In addition to my first star, I like how you make Darryl aka the local school bully look so weak when he didn’t have anyone being his follower anymore. It shows readers that no one is that cool when they try to act like their so popular but really their your average person. However, a suggestion I have for you is to give a brighter backstory about Nathan’s cousin because I think it would make it better with a brighter backstory because there are hardly any details about him. 26fnanton https://padlet.com/26scastillomedina/r8erjaz25bf4/wish/421788548 2019-12-09 18:49:16 UTC https://padlet.com/26scastillomedina/r8erjaz25bf4/wish/421788548 Story Feedback-Brandon 26bdinizo https://padlet.com/26scastillomedina/r8erjaz25bf4/wish/422348719 A strength in your story is when you said “The hallway of Greenfield Middle School smelled like expired milk mixed with my uncle’s shoes.” You used this very well. This will help the reader know what is going on and know what it smells like. In addition another strength in your story is how much dialogue you used in your story. This makes your story helpful to understand. However, a place where you can add is your capitalization. In this sentence “. I realized If I was still shy, introverted, and anxious.” you put the I uppercase it is supposed to be lowercase. ]]> 2019-12-10 18:40:40 UTC https://padlet.com/26scastillomedina/r8erjaz25bf4/wish/422348719