https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-05 15:07:06 UTC 2022-03-10 14:19:37 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Apple.png 27bcardenas https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1068192518 Hey guys! Please leave a comment bout’ my writing down below  ^_^]]> 2021-01-08 18:16:40 UTC https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1068192518 27abirck https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1079141712 Hi Brynn, I think a writing strength of yours is the beginning. It was the perfect thing to hook me into your piece. I really imagined the setting as you were describing it. I could even  smell it also. “A crisp pinewood smell, pine cones everywhere.” I loved that line because it felt as if I was there with you. Another thing I loved about your writing piece was the descriptions, “The sun shining down and reflecting in brisk water mimicking our world, just a more rippled and burry version.” I also liked this line  because of the part where it said “mimicking our world” I loved this because it made the description deeper instead of saying someone like: “the water reflected me.” You made it easier to imagine, and again I could vision it. And the numbers dislodge you added into your writing piece, because I could hear someone shouting it, like I was there. No wishes from me!

]]> 2021-01-12 15:56:40 UTC https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1079141712 27mhuber https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1517125384 One thing that I really like about your essay is the scenarios you created. I thought you did a really nice job when you explained how kids feel with no video games compared to how they feel with video games, and you did a great job showing how their mood can change. Another thing I loved about your essay was your conclusion at the end. You did a really good job wrapping up what you already stated about how kids feel about video games, and how they can help children. I have no wish for your essay. ]]> 2021-05-12 12:20:12 UTC https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1517125384 https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1517944695 Heyo Brynn! This essay was very persuasive. All your points and factors were made. Each of them had information to back them up. Kids nowadays spend time online more than ever, yet some people aren't aware that it's great for kids to socialize, relax, and have fun with their friends just by being online. I also liked your use of transitions since they made an amazing effect in your essay. It helped put it together and make it smoother to read and understand. As well as making it seem more detailed and in depth then just having simple transitions. I do not have a specific wish for you.

]]> 2021-05-12 15:30:47 UTC https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1517944695 27kvelizacuna https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1518063171 Hi Brynn, amazing writing piece. I really liked your intro it is so relatable when you said” Everyday is like the same. Get up, walk, sit down, listen. This goes on for 2 more hours until school ends” I feel like the way that you elaborated these few sentences was really good and I could really feel the boy’s boredom. I also really enjoyed your 1st warrant it was super detailed and persuasive like when you said”She can just barely concentrate on her homework. During dinner, she hardly said a word. Putting away the dishes, she realizes that she has free time. So she turns on the Nintendo switch and starts playing Mario Karttm. At last! Something fun to do! After a little bit she logs off in a pleasant mood” I can tell how the girl felt before playing a video game and after. Amazing writing piece, I have no wishes for you ! 🤗]]> 2021-05-12 15:56:28 UTC https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1518063171 https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1614462739 Hi Brynn, I really liked how descriptive you were, the way you described the shadow really put a picture in my head. I also liked how festive the ides was, I don’t think anyone would’ve come up with this idea and i really liked it. One wish i have is that since this was a creative piece in my opinion i think it could’ve had a little more humor instead of being so dark but besides that I really enjoyed your piece great job! - Emma J.]]> 2021-06-18 14:50:42 UTC https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1614462739 27cbirck https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1614715244 Hey, I really liked your writing piece.  The way you did it is very well written.  I liked the way you described the shadow.  I also really like your pictures on your slides (There amazing).   That’s all for now, goodbye.
-Your friend, 
(The Amazing) Caitlin ]]> 2021-06-18 17:24:36 UTC https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1614715244 27abirck https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1614757379 Hello Brynn. First off I wanted to say that your theme was really good and the typewriter-like font and stuff in black and white really pulled the storyline together, considering the story being about shadows and stuff. The first thing I wanted to talk about was your storyline. It was so creative and really how you executed the rest of the project to match with the storyline made it feel kind-of more creepy and better. Using the storyline of a shadow was in short, a very enjoyable and unboring topic and it was super creative as well as not confusing and straightforward. Your description of the shadow was very unique because instead of a big monster going out and cursing your soul for all eternity, you made it so the shadow was something you could not feel like in real life. Anyways onto the second wish, was the side comments. I feel like without the pictures and the side comments the story would be more creepy and as well as more bland. Having these side comments really made the story better. It sounded like you were actually telling me about the truth, instead of it being a full live action scene. A wish is to give a more satisfying ending instead of it being like: force the kid to ride their bike, I feel like it could use one more sentence just ending the piece. But other than that 11/10. Good job Brynn! 



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]]> 2021-06-18 17:54:31 UTC https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/1614757379 27cbirck https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/2088422049 Oh hey, I really liked your Buy my Product.  I really like the name of your product, and its a very good idea for pets to be not cold on Winter days.  I think the cost is good and reasonable for what you are selling.   Though it can be sold for cats and dogs, I don’t fully understand why its different from other dog/cat sweaters. 
 Bye Bye
(P.S) If I tried to put a cat sweater on Linus I think he would kill me.
From your friendo,
Caitlin  ]]> 2022-03-10 14:19:37 UTC https://padlet.com/27bcardenas/r0jg5a8ekmwvc6rm/wish/2088422049