https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv Thanks for your supportive feedback! en-us 2017-06-22 15:36:33 UTC 2018-03-28 14:22:18 UTC hello@padlet.com 23scohen https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv/wish/227083019 cool page m8

]]> 2018-02-01 15:16:48 UTC https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv/wish/227083019 23lcerchio https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv/wish/237385265 Hi Hasan! good job on your Narrative I really enjoyed it. I really loved your hook you did so good on it. I also liked how you put like little chapters to show what was going on and what part of the story it was. But one thing I wish you have done better was your puncuation because I found some errors in it that are really easy to fix. Overall, Amazing job! ]]> 2018-03-02 13:48:49 UTC https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv/wish/237385265 23hthurman https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv/wish/237407374 Your story was so good!  I was very intrigued and I really wanted to find out what would happen next.  I really liked that you used high level word choice.  It really brought the story to  a whole new level.   "Even with the Mustang’s traction control, it still spun its wheels off the line. Thus, I took a few laps to adapt to the dynamics of the car then I was clocking blazing fast lap times. Mr. Lampard was in the passenger's seat for the whole session.  He gave me some great tips." This line shows some of the great word choice you used. Something to consider for the future is to check for GUMS errors. I found a couple while I was reading. Overall, great job!]]> 2018-03-02 14:33:42 UTC https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv/wish/237407374 23rcawley https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv/wish/237416441 Hi Hasan. Your compare and contrast phrases that you used were remarkable! The way you comanded the readers by telling them how important it was to act now on climate change to make sure it doesn't worsen. One thing i suggest to do in the future is not to be as repetitive when writing. Overall, Great job!]]> 2018-03-02 14:49:43 UTC https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv/wish/237416441 23rdamania https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv/wish/237464201 Star: I loved how you used so many Compositional Risks. It made your writing a lot more descriptive.
Star: I also loved how you used really good word choice. It made your writing really interesting.
Wish: In the future I think you should double check your spelling and homophones.
-Rushil D.]]> 2018-03-02 16:01:30 UTC https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv/wish/237464201 https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv/wish/246911889 Hasan, you somehow managed to make a normal, everyday event an interesting piece of clever satire. The overall mockery of the piece is completely delightful. You've pulled off another great piece. ]]> 2018-03-28 14:15:42 UTC https://padlet.com/23hali/qsz29slrmpcv/wish/246911889