(7B) DO NOW: Post Your Revision Goal by Dario Sulzman https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj Make a post with your name, one piece of feedback you've received for revision, and one sentence from your draft where you plan to start revising. en-us 2023-11-15 14:15:23 UTC 2025-08-18 04:26:05 UTC hello@padlet.com Taylor https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790912857 1 piece of feedback: To add more for the 5 senses to a few situations

1 sentences: "When the doctor asked what was wrong two weeks later, I told him how I had been feeling"

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  • didn't get any

  • working on finishing, grammar, and adding dialogue

    • ]]>     2023-11-15 14:22:46 UTC https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790917575     Ian https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790917904 Feedback: Add more characterization and clarity to specific scenes.


    Sentence: "Most of my aunts, uncles, and older cousins never went to college, and some are currently living lives of struggle and drugs."

    ]]>     2023-11-15 14:23:00 UTC https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790917904     Mimi https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790917968 To be more descriptive of my breakthrough within Music and how it’s centered who I am and how I live.

    Kinda being more positive while creating a better structure and balance in my writing.

    ]]>     2023-11-15 14:23:02 UTC https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790917968     Isabelle https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790918957 feedback: instead of explaining, just make your reason a scene of your parents conflict and you processing it.


    sentence: my family has had many complications, leading me to…

    ]]>     2023-11-15 14:23:42 UTC https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790918957     Niasha 2114776 https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790919956 Feedback: add more detail

    “He never showed up for my birthdays , or school events , actually he never even spent quality time with me.“

    ]]>     2023-11-15 14:24:21 UTC https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790919956     Jamere https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790920189 I have to finish first

    ]]>     2023-11-15 14:24:29 UTC https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790920189     Juliana https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790920441 To connect a sentence back to Ecuador and try to stay under the 650 word limit.


    Also try and successfully conclude my essay.

    ]]>     2023-11-15 14:24:37 UTC https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790920441     Uriel https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790920809 revise my ending to repetitive and might be on the longer end.

    ]]>     2023-11-15 14:24:53 UTC https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790920809     Alina https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790922986

  • didnt get any feedback

  • me talking about my realization within my essay, and to add more details there

    • ]]>     2023-11-15 14:26:16 UTC https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790922986     Eric 10430124 https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/qqdgj36j4s2cqtgj/wish/2790943110 Show more actions in the emotions part

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