Alex M. Google Sites Peer Feedback 2021 - 2022 by Alexander Mac https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-10-04 17:32:19 UTC 2022-04-29 15:45:09 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-uploads.storage.googleapis.com/863299905/b49c7820036063ffb8ec28df70d9f564/drawing.png Adrian https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/1793938123 First of all, I love the name ALEX’S ADVENTUROUS ARTICLE, it's pretty creative. Another thing I like is the word choice, like ahoy or awesomeness. My one wish is that maybe describe your likes a little more. 


]]> 2021-10-05 17:41:45 UTC https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/1793938123 Jada https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/1794261148 In your About Me piece I enjoy how you listed facts about yourself so the reader can get to know you better. I also enjoy how went into detail  in your piece. A suggestion I have for you is add the quotation marks in your quote.]]> 2021-10-05 19:44:14 UTC https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/1794261148 Alex Holm 28aholm https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/1797453210 Something I liked in your About Me, “Alex’s Adventurous Article” was the introduction. I legitimately felt like I wanted to read all of your About Me. It really felt like you were confident in your writing, which is a very good thing. My favourite part of your introduction was when you said, “Now before we go in to this article of awesomeness, first there are a few facts you should know about me before we continue.” Another thing that I thought was spectacular was the specifics of the video games you like when you said, “First, these are my most common likes: video games. 8 bit, roleplay, any type of game is awesome!” It really gave me a good idea of your most common interests. However,  a suggestion that I can offer you is to maybe add a bit more detail into your other likes and dislikes. I’m very curious about your other interests and dislikes too.]]> 2021-10-06 18:22:01 UTC https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/1797453210 This was an intense, cool memoir. It felt like you were barely hanging onto a cliff but somehow made it, which really adds onto the story. It was cool how you had like zero lives left and that you were a one hit target.The reader feels like they're right next to you watching the game; it feel like you’re being told a story with every detail in it. Which really pulled the reader into the memoir. It could have more inner thoughts, i didn’t really see many. You’re ominous and strange btw https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/1925845801 2021-12-02 18:34:50 UTC https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/1925845801 About your Story Task-Marco L. https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/2156834387 Hey Alex! I noticed some great things in your story. I loved how you were so specific with your writing. You made sure to tell us that Kev didn’t get along with people in his school and he dog was his best friend. It showed me how much detail you added to this story. Another strength was how you were perfect with the writing speed. It wasn’t too slow nor too fast, it was just right. Most of the story’s I’ve read so far have gotten the speed wrong, at least for my taste. Something I think you could have done better was how you said Kev’s friend Billy was going to help make with getting his dog to get Cromwell training. I thought that Cromwell was his only friend since he didn’t get along with the kids at school. At least thats what you said at the start. Overall, this was a great story, one of the best, if not, THE best, one I have seen yet. Great job!]]> 2022-04-25 15:54:08 UTC https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/2156834387 Amogus https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/2160823851 2022-04-27 17:36:30 UTC https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/2160823851 Cooper Blank 28cblank1 https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/2164519036 Hi Alex! I really liked how you wrote this story. First thing I got to say is, I really liked how you made the story a lot about cars. Also that it was about racing. I was able to understand what was going on in this timeline. Wish you could have written a lot more! Still, I really liked how there was a lot of dialogue. But, something’s were confusing, life for example you said, “Where u at?” He said, “cuz he was.” I could not understand most of this, but I could understand the plot, some other things confused me a lot. I was going everywhere. But you made it so I could understand a bit. The only thing is can you make sure the story would make sense? ]]> 2022-04-29 15:45:09 UTC https://padlet.com/28amac/qq3dcs5dz2o63u6g/wish/2164519036