Informative Speech Revision by Dr. Ben Davis

lu26151 — 2024-11-11 19:34:38 UTC

Informative Speech Revision: Revised my conclusion.

mollycernich — 2024-11-13 04:29:33 UTC

I revised my introduction and conclusion with an emphasis on a slower rate of speaking, eye contact, gestures, and more inflections.

gracielovell — 2024-11-13 23:56:38 UTC

Informative Speech Revision: I revised my introduction and delivery of my speech.

jo44127 — 2024-11-14 18:30:58 UTC

I revised the introduction portion of my speech, focusing on avoiding rhetorical questions and slowing down the delivery of my thesis and preview statement before going into my first point.

ecb6824 — 2024-11-16 18:03:16 UTC

Revision: body of speech

2024-11-16 20:38:15 UTC

I revised parts of my introduction and second body paragraph for the reasons I list at the beginning

mko5412 — 2024-11-16 21:38:53 UTC

I revised the first two body paragraphs of my speech by including better citations.

qx66144 — 2024-11-16 23:46:21 UTC

Revision: the introduction and the conclusion.

2024-11-17 17:13:02 UTC

Edit of body paragraph 1 (first half), specific revisions of body language and speech speed

orc4236 — 2024-11-17 18:23:20 UTC

I revised the majority body of my speech, focusing on my vocal tones and gestures to add a bit more to my speech.

cs45754 — 2024-11-17 22:22:29 UTC

I revised a section of the body to be more clear in my verbal citations.

ncs6387 — 2024-11-17 22:48:49 UTC

I focused on trying not to sway as much, removing vocal fillers such as So and Now, and tried to ensure my undated sources had more credibility behind them.

iz47855 — 2024-11-18 02:27:33 UTC

I revised the rhetorical question, dates in citations, and gestures/facial expressions.

smw8428 — 2024-11-18 02:40:59 UTC

I revised my speech by providing more emphasis to my thesis in the beginning as well as emphasizing my transsitions from my introduction to my first body paragraph more to show where I was going.

bd43665 — 2024-11-18 03:50:03 UTC

I revised the introduction and conclusion of my speech, focusing on utilizing vocal inflections to convey emotion and tell a story. Additionally, I focused on eliminating persuasive elements from the conclusion and wrapping up with a memorable comment rather than by saying thank you.

efarwell66 — 2024-11-18 04:38:24 UTC

Revision: explaining my topic in the introduction, having more energy, and keeping my hands down at my said unless I’m gesturing.

va64641 — 2024-11-18 05:27:49 UTC

I revised the portion of my speech where I provided further supporting examples. This was one of the only major drawback in my speech, as I lacked many examples, so I decided to add more relevant examples that aligned with my main points

vy77538 — 2024-11-18 06:03:29 UTC

I revised my body part.

nj14351 — 2024-11-18 06:32:04 UTC

I revised my introduction and first main body section to focus on more intentional gestures and correct verbal citations.

ndt3271 — 2024-11-18 09:32:38 UTC

Battle of Adwa redo

2024-11-18 17:16:43 UTC

I revised the rhetorical questions in my introduction and the transitions in the body section to make the structure flow more naturally

cc24325 — 2024-11-18 17:19:11 UTC

Revised version of The Celebration of Ashenda: Cultural and Religious Significance

ye28413 — 2024-11-30 04:08:53 UTC

I revised the middle portion of my speech. With the focus on improving my hand gestures and eye contact.

ecg1613 — 2024-12-02 03:27:25 UTC

Revised section on cultural meanings to have clearer citations

rb7152 — 2024-12-02 04:34:05 UTC

Revised to remove visuals and make conclusion more concise.

gn46755 — 2026-04-05 20:08:32 UTC

revised the beginning of my speech