cst8 essay by Melisa McDermott https://padlet.com/melisamc0/q6y8f7yoni9n9aud en-us 2022-01-19 09:47:18 UTC 2026-01-26 16:40:29 UTC hello@padlet.com Do you get stressed most of the time, How do you solve it afterwards? Some of the causes of stress are:Relationships, sleep problems and money problems.First cause is, relationships that are suffocating and toxic. It is usually caused by people's trust problems, paranoia and doubts, and as a result, it causes the other person to be overwhelmed. After a while, when these things are repeated constantly, the other person starts to get stressed. relationships are adversely affected.The second reason is sleep problem. When people fail at something, when there are some things in their life that they can't figure out on their own, they think about such things a lot at night and therefore can't sleep. Usually, they are always angry, sleepless or stressed during the day, which affects their bodies badly.The last reason I will mention is problems with money. Sometimes people have financial difficulties and do not know how to support their families. They get stressed about how to pay their house rent and bills when they don't have enough money, and this can lead to some mental health problems because they think too much. And they make themselves sick. https://padlet.com/melisamc0/q6y8f7yoni9n9aud/wish/2000105869 Beyza
A very good start Beyza! There are some things that are missing though:
-In the introduction you need at least one more sentence. (Between the first and last)
-You are also missing a whole conclusion paragraph!
Some suggestions:
-In the thesis statement, you don't need to put ":"
-Be careful: don't say "I will mention".]]> 2022-01-19 10:52:20 UTC https://padlet.com/melisamc0/q6y8f7yoni9n9aud/wish/2000105869 CAn https://padlet.com/melisamc0/q6y8f7yoni9n9aud/wish/2008511113 Thank you! I can see that you are trying to use more advanced language and you actually did a good job:) I also like your use of linkers. I have some suggestions though:
Introduction:
-control "their",
-should learn about "the effects of stress"
-many "effects",
-"being depressed"
Body 1:
-"being depressed",
Body 2:
-issues "are" regarded
-Incorrect use of "because",
Body 3:
-"the" final effect,
-"increases"
Conclusion:
-"are becoming"
Overall, you have given suggestions in your paragraphs which should only be done in the conclusion. You should be as specific and detailed as possible in the body paragraphs(give examples).]]> 2022-01-24 10:56:07 UTC https://padlet.com/melisamc0/q6y8f7yoni9n9aud/wish/2008511113 Büşra https://padlet.com/melisamc0/q6y8f7yoni9n9aud/wish/2008537797 Traffic jams usually can be stressful problems. It has a lot of causes and effects. It’s effects sometimes can be difficult. On drivers, cities and environments are a few effects of traffic jams. 
The first effect of traffic jam is on drivers. People unable to reach somewhere on time. And in this situation, anger problems suddenly appear.
Another effect of traffic jam is on cities. For example, emergency services will not reach people on time. This situation can be very important than other situations for all people. Also, people can’t design of the cities. In the city, roads can mixed by people and they can get lost. 
The last effect of traffic jams is on environments. In these impact, air pollution can increase and the oxygen can decrease in the city. In addition, animals can become extinct. 
To sum up, traffic jams often can create a lot of effects. I think people immediately should make provisions for these situations because in then, it can be very late. 

Thank you! You have understood the structure and how to write topic sentences, thesis statements. However, your supporting sentences are not explained enough. You have just stated them and the moved on which is not enough. ]]> 2022-01-24 11:15:39 UTC https://padlet.com/melisamc0/q6y8f7yoni9n9aud/wish/2008537797