https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv Comments including: Objective, Beats, Character Development, Subtext, Voice and Speech en-us 2016-10-20 16:46:55 UTC 2016-10-27 18:17:45 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155052 victor:
lawrence: good moment before, great transitions, interesting tactics

lili:
 -moment before?
 -it can be bigger then it is
 -stabbing part good!

alex h:
 -moment before?
-good beats/ transitions
-re read, re re  read good!

michaela:
-great start
- hands slaps?
-great build of volume 

logan:
-hands in ur coat? y?
-good points of focus

roy:
-head jerks?
-great imagining the head dress
 
zoey:
-great opening 
-nice story telling
- great transitioning

amaru:
-good moment before
-beats r good

joel:
-slow down
-diction
- u are wondering to much 
- dropped the end

chelsea:
- volume 
-dropping things i can't here you

madison:
-begining was better
-great use of the language 

morgan:
-  u r leaning in do u want to stand ?
-great build up to the scream

lance:
-great moment before
-good speed
- good ending

bridget:
-great opening
-great. playing with ur pitch

cathrine:
-great transistions 
-pitch change great
-very funny
-slow down just a bit

kyra:
-great accent
- a lot better
- great speed

maya:
-great start
- volume
-great levels

gili:
- make a hook
- more levels

alex p:
- good moment before
- good levels






]]> 2016-10-20 17:11:52 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155052 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155054 2016-10-20 17:11:52 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155054 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155078 2016-10-20 17:11:56 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155078 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155091 Lawrence- good beats
-Good points of focus 
-Clear tactics 

Lili- Strong character
-Good use of voice 
-Better beats/tactics then the first time

Alex H- good character 
- Easy to understand 
- good beats 
- Very natural 
 
Michaela- Strong intentions 
- Like she is actually talking to someone 
- Strong character and voice
- Good build 

Logan- Very good change in tactics and beats 
- Strong choices 
- Good use of diction

Zoey- Stronger character then the first time 
- more frantic and crazed, stronger choices
- clearer build from beginning to end 
- Good!!
Amaru- Good physicality 
- stronger intentions 
- more urgent then before 
- good beats 

Joel- good vocalization 
- Good tactics/intention 
- higher stakes then the first time 
- Strong character 

Chelsea- good vocalization 
- Clear character 
- Strong choices
- Good changes and tone/beats

Madison- Strong choices
- Good beats 

Morgan- Very real/natural 
- good physicality 
- Good beats and choices
- clear objective/point of focus 

Lance- Good moment before
- Strong choices 
-good vocalization 
- clear objective 
- Good character 

Bridget- Good opening beat
- Strong character 
- Strong choices 
- Good beats 
- good change in tone

Katherine- Good change in character/tactics
- Good beats 
- Strong character 

Kyra- Good accent 
- Good build 
- good distinction between beats 
- Clear she was talking to someone 

Maya- Good connection with what you are saying 
- good beats 
- I like the pauses 
committed 

Gili- Good volume
- Clear beats 
- Good connection to piece 
- a little more variation 

Victor- Strong choices
- Good build
- Good pauses 
- Good beats and tactics 
- good focus 

Alex P- Good moment before
- Very natural, like you are actually talking to someone
- Good accent and use of diction 
-Very strong character 
- Good beats and neat changes 
- good levels 
- Strong choices
- I like the walking around

]]> 2016-10-20 17:11:58 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155091 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155100 2016-10-20 17:11:58 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155100 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155145 2016-10-20 17:12:03 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155145 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155162
Lawrence-  Nice beats! Good Character 
Lili-  good! 
Alex H -  nice beats. Tactics Clear. 
Michaela-  nice volume. nice beats 
Logan-  Nice!!! it was nice that you stood still
Roy- Very nice!!!!
Zoey- Great Levels 
Amaru-  Stop rushing! 
Joel- slow down...  stand still
Chelsea -  great beats! tactics clear! 
Morgan- nice opening. Nice Levels, nice delivery.
Lance- nice! nice levels
Bridget- nice just slow down a little 
Katherine- nice! just don't face the side. nice volume changes
Kyra-   same level :(
maya-  NICE OPENING. nice levels 
Victor- slow down. make beats more clear.
Alex P- great start. ]]> 2016-10-20 17:12:05 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155162 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155253 Lawrence: Use of candle was very realistic, easy to understand

Lili: Good focus

Alex H.: Strong character,

Michaela: Good build up and levels, clear focus

Logan: Stronger character throughout, could have clearer beats, easy to understand dialogue

Roy: Very believable and realistic, you can tell he was really seeing what was going on

Zoey: Good energy/commitment and clear, different beats

Amaru: Good energy, very clear stakes, could use more varied beats

Joel: Funny, nice character, really committed to choices

Chelsea: Believable,  could have been a bit louder

Madison: Could've gotten more into it, but still good overall

Morgan: Realistic, good clear beats strong focus

Lance: Good opening beat, could've had more levels vocally

Bridget: Nice character, varied beats

Kyra: Accent a lot more noticeable, higher stakes this time

Maya: A lot less of Maya this time which is good

Gili: Good monologue but character could be a lot more, she's very outspoken

Victor: I liked the sarcasm, but could be more hurt throughout, make CB feel bad for coming in there

Alex P.: Good accent, could use more levels]]> 2016-10-20 17:12:15 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155253 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155401 2016-10-20 17:12:35 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155401 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132155642 Lawerence:
-great commitment in the beginning 
-slow down on some parts

Lili:
-start monologue with a bigger beat
-slow down
-collect your thoughts after a beat, don't rush into the next one
-work on levels

Alex:
-great commitment
-maybe more levels


Logan:
-maybe just a little more clearness on when beats start and stop
-more levels
-great job on taking your time

Roy:
-great start
-keep it up
-more levels

Zoey:
-great start. started off strong
-great connection
-great taking time
-great focus 
-good ending

Amaru:
-goood start
-keep it up
-slow down
-

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]]> 2016-10-20 18:03:51 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/132176453 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133699668 Lawrence- Othello 
 - Strong opening beat 
-Smooth transitions   
- The levels didn't really change but i could see that you really loved her 

Lilli: Take your time with the beats, you're rushing a little bit 
- Good projection  
-Holding back 
Alex H: Good physicality 
- Good subtext 

Michela: Smooth transitions 
- Nice build up 
- Good subtext 

Logan: Hands in pockets? 
- Good transitions  
- Could see intentions  

Roy: Good opening 
- Smooth transitions 
- Nice physicality 
- Good character development but did not see any comedic intentions 

Zoey: Strong choices 
- Nice transitions 
- Loved when you took your time with the clock 
- Could see how you hated the bad clock 
- Strong ending 

Amaru: rushing 
- Good moment before  
- Saw there was urgency/ passion 

Joel: Need to see more comedic intentions 
- Good build up talking about middle school 
- Slow down 

Chelsea: Didn't screech enough 
- Needs to be a little more comedic (even though you hate comedy) 
- Good transitions when you talk about your childhood is over  

Madison: Could clearly see your argument with yourself 
- Stayed on the same level  

Morgan: Good levels 
- Nice transitions 
- Nice build up 

Lance: Good moment before 
- Took notes from last time 
- Strong physicality 
- Strong ending beat 

Bridget: You took your time with the beats 
- Saw urgency 
- Could see the person you were talking to 
- Clear subtext 
- Were you trying to cry at end?  

Catherine: Good transitions 
- Take your time 
- Clear subtext  
- Make it bigger 

Maya: Nice transitions of beats. 
- Very honest 

Lilli: Moment before? 
- Try not to be glued the paper 
- Good energy  

Victor:  Slow down 
Good build up 
Don't apologize you're doing fine!   
Could be more sarcastic about guidence counselor  

Alex P: Good moment before 
Accent is better 
Nice points of focus 
Subtext was much clearer

]]> 2016-10-27 17:06:36 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133699668 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133699988 Lawrence: Like how he treats the candle now. treats the two light images well. stronger breathing in the last line. 

Alex H: Good use and understanding of her language.

Michaela: Good build! Very clear point of focus. Good commitment, really liked the part where you told her she shouldn't be worrying about anything but eating.

Roy: A little rhythmic at the beginning. Really nice images. Could stretch your words out a little more. Nice honesty. Love that monologue for him.

Zoey: Really punching opening, its strong, but a little hard to follow from the get go. Like that she brings it down.

Amaru: A little gaspy, I like how the "I love you"s seem to come out of him. Could spend a little longer on the words themselves. 

Joel: Voice is a little pushed. going a little lower than normal. Better honesty. Focus more on the monologue less on the jokes. Don't push the swear words. Good world building. Slow down. 

Chelsea: a little more control on the breathing. Clear intentions. What's the monologue about?

Madison: Better through line, got the story more.

Morgan: Liking how you affect her, a little inwardly focused at moments. Careful on build, it was good this time but it kind of felt like she was trying to make more volume, rather than intensity.

Lance: Liked your introduction. Solid start. careful on the repetitive lines, could be more varied. carry through ends of sentences. A little pushed on the yelling. good use of poetic structure.

Bridget: More confident introduction. Jarring start, but was funny. good comedy, lost character for a moment, then got it back. Feels a little melodramatic in the middle, works at some moments and not as well at others.

Katherine: Very quickly informed the audience what's going on. Slow down words a little bit. Good character. Yas Katherine. Nice comedy while still being in character. Like the commitment. Little shaky right near end.

Kira: There's more commitment to the voice this time. Nice use of lower register. I definitely felt what you went through. Could be slightly stronger in physicality. Liked the moment you took to look at yourself near the end. 

Maya: Honest start. Good beats. a little quiet for theater, would be awesome volume for film. I really like the range of voice. Clear subtext. 

Gili: More confident second start. communicating what's going on well. Once your focus can be up a bit more it'll be even better. 

Victor: Could use a bit more commitment to the situation. Slightly feels like you're reading the monologue in your mind. Nice simplicity. Live in the words a bit more. 

Alex P: Feels a little outside in. Not necessarily a bad thing, just could be more under the surface in the beginning. The big sighs and gasps are funny, but there also have to be lines without them to give them value. ]]> 2016-10-27 17:07:22 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133699988 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700058 2016-10-27 17:07:31 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700058 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700070 Lawrence: Your conflicts are very clear.

Lily: Nice volume

Better Alex: I like how honest you are and the use of comparison. You could use more of that comparison to justify.

Michaela: You really are giving it to him and your volume is perfect

Logan: It's so honest and clear

Roy: Talking just a little bit fast, but very casual and honest. Nice job seeing and reliving these memories

Zoey: It's very clear, basically everything you're saying is clear, nice physicality

Amaru: Very believable, talking a little bit quickly, not completely memorized, very determined

Joel: Very passionate about some parts in the monologue, slow down a bit my dude.

Chelsea: Really looks like you're actually talking to someone, so casual. Strong beat changes.

Madison: Not a very strong moment before, but great volume and good intentions.

Morgan: Strong build-up and pretty nice volume

Bridget: You got carried away by how much you love him, many choices were the same but some were strongly different

Katherine: You're trying so hard not to get mad and its very comedic.

Kyra: Good tactics, not completely memorized, clear objective

Maya: You look to your hands a lot, but your tactics are great and your purpose for talking is great as well.

Gili: Not memorized, but strong tactics to create the strong objective

Victor: Nice build up, needs better diction, maybe some stronger beats, pretty good overall

Alex: Very overdramatic, not a very clear point of focus, a lot of these tactics are the same, but nice objective]]> 2016-10-27 17:07:34 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700070 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700116 lawrence- Othello
~good use of subtext
~good diction
~good use of given circumstances
Lili- The Food Chain
~good use of volume levels
~good use of subtext 
~good beat changes
Alex H.- Roxanne
~great use of the hard language...made it make sense
~great use of inflection 
Michaela- Gem of the Ocean
~relationship to who she is talking to is clear
~Good build
~didn't play the same action the whole time
Logan- Othello
~No speech pattern with shakespeare's language 
~good diction
Roy- A chorus Line
~great transitions between beats
~nice job getting lost in the memory
~could use some more inflection
Zoey- Easter
~seems like this is the first time she's saying these words
~nice inflection
~good transitions between beats
Amaru- 
~clear relationship to who he's talking to 
~nice beat changes, could use a bit more distinction between them
~nice undertone of desperation 
Joel- The Irish Curse
~nice confidential beat
~nice conversational tone
Madison- Isabel
~Good opening beat
Morgan- Georgie
~exaggerate the actual difference between your character and Mary Tyler Moore
~good climax
Lance- Hamlet
~make sure you're stressing and eventuating the operative words
focus more on a single spot (or a few selected spots)
~nice use of the language
~good transitions between monologue
Bridget- The Princess Bride
~Good contrast between opening lines!!! 
~nice transitions between beats 
~nice job not playing the same beat
~try not to get caught in a vocal pattern
Catherine- Flight Attendant
~nice job posting patience with costumers and then re-gaining composure
Kira-
~use pauses sparingly
~nice character
Maya- Naomi
~great relationship to who you're talking to 
~nice transitions between beats
~careful of a speech pattern
~good undertone of desperation
Gili-Antigone
~Good focus

Victor- Dog sees God
~]]> 2016-10-27 17:07:41 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700116 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700134 lawrence: -Othello
 -nice visual reference 
 
Lillie: Amanda 
  -nice build
  -

logan
 -looked good from outside

roy
 - sounds believable 

zoe
 -nice tactics

Amaru
 -good start

chelsea
 - good character 

Madison 
 - good ending 

Morrigan
 - nice build

lance
- nice levels]]> 2016-10-27 17:07:45 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700134 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700177 Lawrence: Othello
           -good opening beat
           -good diction 
           -nice variations
Lili: The Food Chain
           -could've gone a little farther        
            towards the middle of the 
            monologue
            -nice variations
Alex H: Roxanne
            -Nice tone of voice 
            -Good change in tactics 
            -Objective was clear
Michaela: Black Mary 
            -you really went for it, which I   
            really appreciate
           -it was very urgent
           -nice build
Logan: Iago
           -I can really understand what      
           you're talking about
           -excellent diction
           -good focus
Roy: Paul
           -really good focus
          -you painted a really nice 
           picture
          -very good diction
          -very smooth transitions
Amaru: Holden
          -opening beat really hooked 
           me in
          -nice build 
Joel: Rick
         -slow down just a tad 
         -great build and levels 
Chelsea: Ellen
          -excellent story telling
          -great focus
          -good levels
Madison: Isabel
          -be careful not to touch your
           hands too much
          -good use of tactics
Morrigan: Georgie
          -good job taking your notes
           from last time
           -good build
           -nice relationship between 
            you and whoever you were 
            talking to
Lance: Hamlet
          -great moment before
          -focus could've been a little 
          clearer
          -find more times to pull back
          -subtext was clear
Bridget: Princess Buttercup
           -Nice hook
           -Needs some smoother 
            transitions
           -Good comedic timing
           -I would've like to have seen
            you go even farther
Katherine:
           -Good comedic timing
           -Nice levels 
           -It's very fast, slow down a 
            little 
           -Good subtext
Kyra: Maggie
           -Be careful with taking too 
           many pauses
           -Good levels 
           -Nice storytelling 
           -Nice job with the dialect, 
            it does slip sometimes but I
            appreciate the fact that you 
            did it 
Maya: Naomi 
            -Nice storytelling 
            -create some more levels
            -smooth transitions 
Gili: Antigone
            -Great focus
            -More levels
            -Your diction is very clear
Victor: 
            -Slow down a bit
            -Good objective
            -Smoother transitions
            -Good focus 
            -Need a reason for sitting 
             back down
Alex P: A Woman of no Importance
            -Be careful not to look down 
             at the ground
            -Make the conflict clearer
            -Excellent diction
            -Good tactics 
-Stronger objective
   
       
           
             

]]> 2016-10-27 17:07:52 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700177 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700192 -Lawrence- Othello: good moment before. Nice transitions, could see subtext even though shakespeare
-Lily-Amanda, Food Chain: Good objective. good build up/ character development 
-Alex Hardin- Roxanne: could tell she had a good understanding of text. Voice and speech good. Could see objective.
-Michaela- Black Mary, Gem of the Ocean: Good build up and could see beat changes. Transitions were smooth. 
-Logan-Iago, Othello: Subtext present even though Shakespeare. Good build up
-Roy-Paul, A Chorus Line: really nice character development/ build up. 
-Zoey-Eleanor, Easter: Good transitions from loud to soft. Levels. Good objective. 
-Amaru-Holden: Moment before was good to bring in the rest of monologue. Levels and transitions good, determined. 
-Joel- Rick: Transitions made sense. Levels good. Build up/ good voice and speech/projection.
-Chelsea- Ellen: Transition from her to her mother was smooth. Objective/ tactics shows. Beat changes good. honest conversation
-Madison- Isabel, Measure to Measure: Good levels. Argument within herself. Good beat changes.
-Morgan- Georgie: good moment before and transition to intense. Levels made sense/ clear beat changes. 
-Lance- Hamlet: took time with moment before- made sense. more diction but clear intentions through the shakespeare. 
-Bridget- Buttercup: Good first moment- urgency clear. Beat changes made sense. goofy and cute intentions as well as intense ones.
-Katherine: very funny- objective still clear. Intentions clear- could even be bigger. 
-Kyra- Maggie: Accent brought time and place. Tactics and transitions clear. urgency shown more in end
-Maya- Naomi: very honest and believable conversation. beat changes clear. 
-Gili-Antigone: Memorization? but the urgency was clear and honest.
-Victor: Urgency was there but could be more intense. Good transitions. 
- Alexandra Grace Plummer: Good moment before. Accent brings in time period. Strong character. good transitions and points of focus. ]]> 2016-10-27 17:07:54 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700192 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700365 Lawrence: I see the loving othello, however I do not see the "drawn to madness" othello. I love the lovingness though.

Lilli: I don't see a change of beats, only anger-which is needed, but cannot be the only emotion felt throughout.

Alex H: I do not see the comedic tone that this monologue needs, however I do see the naive love this character has-that was nice.

Michaela: I saw a beat change, however the emotion went right back to anger. But it was good!

Logan: Hands in pockets? I saw Iago's evil nature-nice, however I did not see Iago's love for Desdemona.

Roy: Too fast-running words together! I saw the character's tortured nature, however I did not see the comedic nature of the character. Made me tear up a little :)

Zoey: I see the CRAZY Elenora! I like the ending a lot better!

Amaru: "No pun intended"-make it funny! Good beats. 

Joel: Good beats but live in the comedy-it's funny without subtext but you should embrace the comedic writing. Take your time!

Chelsea: Don't run over the comedic beats. Dumped by arthur-sarcasm? I liked "vinyl string."

Madison: Perilous? Abhorred pollution-disgust? Maybe have a doubtful tone after realizing what you're asking of your brother...

Morrigan: Would you YELL at Lidia? It was nice however if Lidia was standing there you probably would have scared her off with that YELL.

Lance: I saw the expression of fear on your face but did not hear it in your voice. "So loving to my mother"-where is the sweetness? "let me not think on't"-beat change? I liked you ending!

Bridget: "I have loved you for several hours now"-make it funny! Really good Bridget! Wesleys?

Catherine: Wait for the man to speak. Funny! Take your time with your words. 

Kyra: I liked it a lot, but i think more beat changes could be added, and i think there is an element of comedy in this that should be expressed more distinctly. I like the crazy.

Maya: I liked "maybe I need help." "What do you think i should do?" was really nice. I think there is some anger in there that should be expressed.

Gili: I can't really give a ton of notes because of how holding the script effected your beats, but it sounded nice. 

Victor: Too fast-words slurring together. Make beats more definitive. I like "Thanks Ms.Blank..."







]]> 2016-10-27 17:08:19 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700365 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700370 lawrence
good projection
clear intentions
lili
good use of voice
levels in voice are good
alex h
good use of painting a picture of the letters
watch being too demure
michaela
good respectfull yelling
good intensity
logan
really good i could tell intentions and everything he was saying.
power in standing
roy
good story telling
good at panting a picture
amazing emotion
zoey
good insanity
good intensity
ending was way better
amaru
as it went on it felt like you really wanted her to be with you
moving alot 
joel
good voice
good feeling
lot of intensity
lost point of focus
chelsea
good difference between mom and her self
nice going into feeling and then using comedy to cover it up
madison
good trying to convince her self
i could tell everything that was said clearly
lance
opening was a lot  better
nice levels
amazing intensity
brigdet
good levels
good intensity
clear intentions
kathen
very good super funny
seemed realistic
good intensity
kyra
accent is nice
good intensity
maya
realistic
intensity was good stakes seemed high from how depressed she seemed
gili
the feeling was nice
felt real
victor
very quiet at the beginning
you can tell your talking to some one
good picture painting
alex p
good opening moment and accent
good joking tone
you can tell your talking to some one
too quiet some times

]]> 2016-10-27 17:08:20 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133700370 thall110 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133701064 2016-10-27 17:09:40 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133701064 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133702553 Lawrence:
- You could really see the person that he was talking to
 Alex H:
-I really like what she did with her voice
Michela:
-Great build up
-Great voice levels
Logan:
-Beats where good
Roy:
- Don't forget to slate
-Good job taking the notes from last time
Zoey:
- Nice note taking with the clock part
- Took the notes very well
Amaru:
- Good moment before
- You could really see the conflict with in
- Very real
Joel:
- Good build up
- Good levels
- Make sure you finish it
Chelsea:
- Nice screechy voice
- I really saw the character
Madison:
- Really ask "To who should i complain? "
- Very nice ending
Morgan:
- Like the voice levels
- Good climax
- Nice choices
- "Good shame on you" in the end
Lance:
- Good Beats taken
- Strong focus points
- Great Build up
- Strong character
Bridget:
- Be more confident during slate
- Great Beginning
- Clear objective
- Great Character
Katherine:
- Cheat out when talking to the sir
- Nice treating him like a dog
- Did the comedy part very well
- Great Job
Kyra:
- Don't lose the accent
- Good beats taken
- Very real when talking about having no money
Maya:
- Very deep
- Vey truthful
Gili:
- Think about voice levels
Victor:
- Diction
- Good character
- Can go further
- Have more levels
- Great ending
Alex P:
- Great confidence 
- Great Moment before
- Nice Accent 
- Great Character

]]> 2016-10-27 17:12:50 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133702553 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133702931 Lawrence as Othello:
-way to use levels
-knows what he's talking about
-could understand everything, very clear

Lili as Amanda:
-good volume
-took notes from last time well

Alex Hardin as Roxanne: 
-good diction
-good moment before

Michaela:
-good build up and energy
-good control of the words

Logan as Iago: 
-good beats
-could see the points of focus

Roy:
-a little quiet at the beginning
-the last moment is great
-focused

Zoey as Eleanor:
-points of focus are good
-beats are good

Amaru as Holden:
-good moment before
-very determined and passionate at some points
-honest



]]> 2016-10-27 17:13:43 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133702931 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133703073 Lawrence-  Good use of your candle. Had a really nice transition at I Must Kill Her line. 

Lili- Can see subtext. Good build up to screaming moments in the monologue.

Alex H. - Good moment before. Good subtext. Nice build up to the i love you. 

Michela- Good moment before. Nice transitions. Subtext shows. 

Logan- Good points of focus. The build up through the piece was very good.

Roy- The subtext is very clear. The ending was awesome. It was very clear.

Zoey- Good moment before. Smooth transitions. 

Amaru- Good moment before. Levels are good. 

Joel- Good Moment before. Suspenseful. The levels are really good. The build was good.  

Chelsea- Good moment before. Smooth transition. The screech was really good. 

Madison- Objective can be shown. The beats are good.

Morgan- Good Moment before. Good levels. The build up is great. 

Lance- Strong moment before. Good beats. Good points of focus. 

Kathryn- Good transitions. Clear beats. 

Kyra- Opening beat could be stronger. Strong transitions. Beats are clear. 

Maya- Moment before? Beats were clear.

Gili- Good moment before. Beats and subtext were clear. 

Victor- Good opening beat. Good transitions. Clear beats and subtext.

Alex P- Facial  Expression is great. Good points of focus. 


]]> 2016-10-27 17:14:02 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133703073 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133703411 Larry- othello:
-great diction
-good starting beat

Lilly- Food chain:
-Nice volume
-good beats
-slow down 

Alex H: 
-good commitment

Michaela-
-good energy
-good beats

Logan:
-nice levels
-points of focus were good

Roy:
-maybe use more inflection
-more levels
-good story telling

Zoey:
-good transitions
-nice story telling

Amaru:
-really good moment before
-slow down
-very believable conversation

Joel:
-slow down
-nice levels

Chelsea:
-really good story telling
-try to find more comedic moments
-really nice diction
-good transitions
 
Madison:
-good speed
-nice start

Morgan
-very conversational 
-good levels
-very realistic

Lance
-good beginning 
-nice speed
-good character

Bridget:
-nice character 
-really strong 
-slow down

Katherine
-really strong character
-nice conversation
-really funny
-good transitions

Kyra
-believable accent
-nice beats

Gili
-Hard to give notes because of script
-good inflection

Victor
-moment before ?
-really could tell that you were talking to someone
-slow down

Alex P
-STRONG CHARACTER
-really funny 
-Nice accent 
-very entertaining 






]]> 2016-10-27 17:14:48 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133703411 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133707016
LAWRENCE- Excellent physicality! It was a lot clearer where you were

MICHAELA- You're powerful and you were so committed! Could be more urgent but it was really strong.

LOGAN- I could see the manipulativeness. Awesome. More variation in tactics maybe?

ROY: You connect very well with this. It started to drag at one point.. maybe vary tactics more? Overall good job though!

ZOEY: Good job at grabbing my attention! (Hook was sharp!) but watch long pauses between beats. They were clear though!

AMARU: The passion was definitely there, but I saw you slip in and out of urgency a few times. (Keep the image of being dragged away in your head)

JOEL: "Don't do the whole "Hi Rick" thing"....Maybe imitate a very monotone "Hiiiii Riiiiick...like from an AA meeting"...You have great energy and passion. 

CHELSEA: "ELLEN YOU NEVER BLAH BLAH BLAH" was a lot better, but could find more humor in the beginning. Way better than last time!  "Doll heads" could be stressed more

MADI: Beginning was tons better, however, it could be more urgent. You could have more of an internal battle complex, but it was worlds clearer than last time

MORGAN: More grounded than last time! Great variation of volume. Love it. Watch inflection and speaking through phrases more. 

LANCE: The beginning needs to be clearer. Watch voice and speech in the beginning (pauses) but props to you for tackling this. You go guy!

BRIDGET: Talk about grabbing attention... jeez! Nice humor. You improved a lot! Watch making repeated lines different. 

KATHERINE: I love you. This was so great. You can do exactly what you're doing, but make it 10X bigger and more "done with people."  "Mile high club" could be emphasized as well.

KYRA: You could be more disgusted with the fact you're poor. Good understanding of the story though!

MAYA: Very honest! Maybe just vary inflection more so it doesn't drag during the pauses. But really loved the honesty.

GILI: Make the beginning a hook. Moment before wasn't clear, but I appreciate how you had a solid focal point.

VICTOR: Watch your diction and give it generally more levels, but it was a better!

ALEX: You always put so much character into everything you do, and you're always entertaining! Just watch focal point. Also, you could build it up a little higher.



]]> 2016-10-27 17:24:02 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133707016 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133710421
Alex H-

Michaela- Good energy, but some times seemed like you didn't have to yell. But you held my attention the whole time. 

Logan- 

Zoey- Watch for leaning forward too much, but much better ending with good intentions.

Amaru-

Roy- Loved the pauses, and the subtext really showed.

Joel- watch talking with hands and moving, but good subtext. maybe slow down a little.

Chelsea- Keep the volume up. Nice beats and tactics.

Madison-  Nice tactics, maybe find more levels.

Morgan- At first you were talking in rhythm. But I could really see who you'r character is and how they feel about the people they were talking about.

Lance- Good character choices, and volume.

Bridget- smooth out transitions, good tactics though, but loosen up and don't talk into the floor.

Cathrine- wow, I don't think I've seen that before. Everything about it was just wonderful! The tactics transitions, diction, beats character, it was all great!! Good job!!

Kyra- Nice character. Good subtext.

Mya- Nice character and subtext.

Gili- 

Victor- Slow done a bit to smooth everything out.

Alex - Good moment before, really sets the character. ]]> 2016-10-27 17:32:13 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133710421 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133711435 good intentions, heaving breathing still there, nice levels,nice voice and speech


]]> 2016-10-27 17:34:47 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133711435 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133712712 Lawerence
- great commitment

Lili
- slow down
-great job

Alex H.
-great job
-very clear

Logan
-more levels
-really good intentions
-great job

Zoey
-great job
-great speed
-great control 

Roy
-great job
-clear tactics

Amaru
-great start
-keep it up

Jewel
-great job
-great intentions

Chelsea
-great start
-great commitment
-really clear
-loved it

Maddie
-great start
-good speed
-great levels

Morgan
-great start
-seems real
-came naturally
-great levels

Lance
-good start
-good speed
-find a reason to sit down

Bridget
-strong start
-but keep the energy up
-slow down

Kathryn
-good job
-very funny
-great transitions
-slow down just a little bit

Kira
-great accent
-much better than last time
-really good at taking your time

Maya
-great start
-way to not make the whole monologue sad
-great levels
-great taking your time
-great tactics

Gili
-Stronger start
-maybe more levels
-just a little more clear on the beats

Victor
-good levels
-great build up in the beginning

Alex P.
-great start
-great character
-nice job

]]> 2016-10-27 17:38:03 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133712712 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133712865 hand movements, very intense, maybe slow down so that we can see more levels? very funny still!!]]> 2016-10-27 17:38:24 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133712865 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133713907 2016-10-27 17:40:54 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133713907 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133715167 2016-10-27 17:44:04 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133715167 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133716311 2016-10-27 17:46:56 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133716311 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133716331 Morrigan- good levels, very strong objective.

Lance- good specific movements, a good build up, maybe some more differentiating tactics.

Bridget-strong start, very clear objective, include more levels and more urgency.

Katherine- Nice pauses, very funny.

Kyra- good character and accent, strong story.

Maya- realistic, very good story telling, extremely honest.

Gili- could use some different tactics and levels, good objective.

Victor- try slowing down to make the beat changes more clear, strong character.

Alex P- very good start, try some more different tactics in the beginning.

]]> 2016-10-27 17:46:58 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133716331 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133717513 varied voice and speech was great! nice leveling, physicality  was good 



]]> 2016-10-27 17:49:35 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133717513 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133719382 (nice intensity for the "wesley"']]> 2016-10-27 17:53:53 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133719382 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133721465 2016-10-27 17:58:31 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133721465 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133722776 good commitment to your character, accent, very honest, great story telling, strong ]]> 2016-10-27 18:01:39 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133722776 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133723927 very honest, excellent character development, ]]> 2016-10-27 18:04:38 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133723927 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133727099 slower build up, more specificity will help you, maybe a focal point. FUCK YOU should be a big deal. you are afraid of how this person will react- that needs to show. ]]> 2016-10-27 18:11:46 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133727099 https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133728853 nice commitment to the accent, find a focal point, great character, ]]> 2016-10-27 18:14:59 UTC https://padlet.com/thall110/pwfe836libkv/wish/133728853