https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. Constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-10-04 18:12:50 UTC 2025-11-15 03:39:37 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-uploads.storage.googleapis.com/1385616208/4d8beef31bbc06a4184985e236fb0cca/0EFF6FEE_1F02_4361_BC4B_8F553CACD0C9.png https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll/wish/1797474008
I like the way you introduced the piece. It is really creative and a good way to start off. I like the segment about drawing. Drawing hands can be easy until you get to the thumb. Like, why do thumbs exist. Oh ya, not to mention if you are drawing a hand smaller, then a foot, good luck. And last, I would want it more in-depth about the rock section. What type of rock do you like? And then once you got that, what type of bands do you like? But besides that i like writing. Good luck!]]> 2021-10-06 18:30:17 UTC https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll/wish/1797474008 28sgaona https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll/wish/1800238137 One thing I like in your studio of stories is how you explained all of your likes and dislikes and gave reasons why you don’t like those. It made me understand why you like what you like and don’t like what you don’t like.Another fascinating thing in your writing is your greeting. It made me feel like I can read your stories in peice and it made me feel welcomed your stories. One dislike that I have is ow your overused “drummer.” You said that you wanted to be a drummer multiple times and it just felt repetitive and unprofessional.]]> 2021-10-07 15:36:03 UTC https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll/wish/1800238137 28ealvarez https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll/wish/1876169350 2021-11-08 19:37:05 UTC https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll/wish/1876169350 https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll/wish/1921187098 I adored your memoir. It was a very fun and memorable experience for me. It was fascinating to read what was going through your mind as this was all happening, which I couldn’t do in person. I really loved hearing your thoughts about the family. In addition, the detail was immaculate. The words describing these moments were amazing! “BOOOM!” “The concrete felt like needles!” “A chill goes up my spine.” However, I think you could’ve spent a few extra minutes going over and re-reading your piece, because I noticed some grammatical flaws throughout. Otherwise it was a spectacular piece that I wouldn’t hesitate to peruse again! Good job!]]> 2021-11-30 18:55:48 UTC https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll/wish/1921187098 https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll/wish/1921276328 This was a great memoir especially since you accidentally had your iPad disabled most of the time. I really like how you mentioned the family at the beginning and the end as it brought the story to an importantance of real life. Your memoir was very detailed as well. However, I felt the begging in about running there was slightly unessicary as it did not involve the rest of the story




Uh oh. I Think you disabled your iPad again]]> 2021-11-30 19:40:03 UTC https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll/wish/1921276328 https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll/wish/2082408736 This essay was incredible! The way you included so many amazing word choices was amazing, as you packed every paragraph with great word choice and it brought me into every single moment. Another great thing was how you took all the feedback I gave you and incorporated it into the essay. You took my feedback very well. However, there were a few typos. For example, the very first sentence says “Comment here” which seems like a note you put in that you forgot to delete.]]> 2022-03-07 19:31:22 UTC https://padlet.com/28ealvarez/rocknroll/wish/2082408736