https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s Made with charm en-us 2020-10-08 00:00:12 UTC 2020-10-09 18:35:00 UTC hello@padlet.com kfort1591 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/812155277 Step 1- Click the link, click "open new window" and go to slide 4.
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Your paper was great! I would recommend adding more transitions at the beginning of your paragraphs. I liked your lead.


]]> 2020-10-08 00:03:43 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/812155400 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814897608 I liked the story, but it needs some more transition words to make it go smoothly. ]]> 2020-10-08 18:02:36 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814897608 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814929238 LA 

I love your story but you need more transitions words to help it flow better ]]> 2020-10-08 18:09:40 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814929238 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814937433 I love your story but maybe add a little more detail ]]> 2020-10-08 18:11:30 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814937433 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814942279 Try to make your theme a one word, but i think that this story is the best that I have read so far.]]> 2020-10-08 18:12:32 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814942279 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814944673 You need a title and some transition words too]]> 2020-10-08 18:13:07 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814944673 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814958415 Maybe you can make the story more as if you were a little kid going through it and not narrating it]]> 2020-10-08 18:16:27 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814958415 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814958730 I like how you told what was happening, but try to right at least a whole page]]> 2020-10-08 18:16:32 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814958730 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814959296 I loved your story because I could connect to the dog treats you making but could add a title]]> 2020-10-08 18:16:40 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814959296 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814959503 Such great humor I loved it! Maybe less of the cut offs to say comments, but over all I loved it!]]> 2020-10-08 18:16:43 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814959503 s27salp7133 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814961549 LA
Great story, but in your conclusion try to put the theme without saying “The moral of the story is...” 
Parker Salyer]]> 2020-10-08 18:17:14 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814961549 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814968152 Good story but I think you could work on transportation words]]> 2020-10-08 18:18:45 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814968152 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814968742 Maybe add more detail]]> 2020-10-08 18:18:53 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814968742 s27brie0746 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814968956

Good job but add a little detail and a HOOK. And some transitions.]]> 2020-10-08 18:18:57 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814968956 s27brie0746 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814987923 Try to make your theme a one word, but i think that this story is the best that I have read so far.]]> 2020-10-08 18:23:49 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814987923 s27brie0746 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814990650
Great story, but in your conclusion try to put the theme without straight up saying it. And also make sure it’s 1 word.  ]]> 2020-10-08 18:24:34 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814990650 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814992041 2020-10-08 18:24:55 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814992041 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814994363 I liked your story but maybe a title ]]> 2020-10-08 18:25:32 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/814994363 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/815006800 Umm...  what is your theme? What is the story talking about? But over all it’s great I am in your class too it was CHAOS. You told the story in order, ok detail, and used good dialogue]]> 2020-10-08 18:28:46 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/815006800 s27brie0746 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/815019165 Maybe try cropping your screenshots:>]]> 2020-10-08 18:31:57 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/815019165 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/815020756 The detail needs work and transitions and dialogue, but otherwise it’s very good. Nice job!]]> 2020-10-08 18:32:20 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/815020756 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/815033502 If you put more tran. Words and detail give it a punch]]> 2020-10-08 18:35:47 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/815033502 s27brie0746 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/815034114 2020-10-08 18:35:57 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/815034114 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/817609013 Hi

]]> 2020-10-09 18:00:25 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/817609013 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/817643912 I really like your story but add a title :>


]]> 2020-10-09 18:11:17 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/817643912 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/817691325 Good story add more dialogue ]]> 2020-10-09 18:26:51 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/817691325 s27marj8835 https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/817705061 I really like your story but you can add how you rest of you day went]]> 2020-10-09 18:31:39 UTC https://padlet.com/kfort1591/pqsb4ab3x4req32s/wish/817705061