https://padlet.com/23rfigueroa/pnfacwcsthsm Thanks for reading my writing pieces! Don't leave too negative feedback! Thanks! en-us 2017-06-22 14:04:47 UTC 2018-03-28 13:34:16 UTC hello@padlet.com 23rbaumgartner https://padlet.com/23rfigueroa/pnfacwcsthsm/wish/236922549 I am impressed by your very good word choice. The word choice in your story made it way more detailed and understanding. I also liked how you had a lot of detail about what Hollywood was like and what happends in Hollywood. You obviosly read the article and listened very closely to the video to get all the detail. Next time try to not use the same words over and over again.I was getting a little confused because of the same words being repeated. Overall great writing piece!]]> 2018-03-01 14:36:49 UTC https://padlet.com/23rfigueroa/pnfacwcsthsm/wish/236922549 23mfountain1 https://padlet.com/23rfigueroa/pnfacwcsthsm/wish/237433677 I really liked how u described all the minor details by doing that you made me set a really clear picture in my mind that made me feel like I was there. I also liked how you SHOWED NOT TELLED in a really descriptive way. One thing I wished you did was varied your use of word choice, and maybe included more complex and compound sentence, this would make your piece more intresting and descriptive for me the reader. But, overall great job.

- Max]]> 2018-03-02 15:16:06 UTC https://padlet.com/23rfigueroa/pnfacwcsthsm/wish/237433677 23mgrill https://padlet.com/23rfigueroa/pnfacwcsthsm/wish/237524766 Hey Richie, I really like how you added detail to defend scar and saying hes not the real bad guy. Also, I like how you made the story go on if it were to continue. One thing though, Does the Setting ever change throughout the while story. I feel that when scar signals the people towards the exit, the setting should switch. Overall, I liked the way you made the story go on.  ]]> 2018-03-02 17:53:57 UTC https://padlet.com/23rfigueroa/pnfacwcsthsm/wish/237524766 23mlaurenzano https://padlet.com/23rfigueroa/pnfacwcsthsm/wish/246883881 Hey Richie it's Matt, and I  just wanted to say first off that your article was great! Anyway now I have to get to buissness, one star I have for you is I really enjoyed the way you added comedic jokes but also had a related story line as the article went on like how the one normal guy was thrown into a penguin, the fries were made from penguins, and the best was when PETA burned down McDonald's. I guess I don't have to do a wish so, good job and bye, 
Matt]]> 2018-03-28 13:26:48 UTC https://padlet.com/23rfigueroa/pnfacwcsthsm/wish/246883881