https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat Post your comments here en-us 2019-03-20 16:32:20 UTC 2026-03-10 19:42:58 UTC hello@padlet.com janamsetty https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516187 First that jumps off to me is that the thesis is not well articulated. This sets off a tone for the entire essay of confusion. While the warranting and explanation of her ideas are sufficient enough, they are by no means "convincing" enough to earn an eight. Her diction and syntax, while good, is not amazing and contians some lapses.]]> 2019-03-20 19:29:47 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516187 irisnacer https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516257 Clear ideas that flow from one to the other through the use of transitional language. Not any higher because it relies //too much on said language and uses the phrases as a crutch for wording variety. However, the author does quote incorrectly, even if they ideas are well supported ]]> 2019-03-20 19:30:00 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516257 brockbvp https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516474 Solid stance on the subject with an acceptable amount of evidence and analysis. Overall,  it's a solid attempt, but it is missing that sort of flare that could give an essay like this a higher score. Diction and syntax were good also.

]]> 2019-03-20 19:30:39 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516474 kusperjs1 https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516872 The writer clearly takes a position and uses valid sources to back their argument up but they do make some grammatical and syntax errors which is why it doesn't get a 7]]> 2019-03-20 19:31:39 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516872 kaden_nv https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516899 Though the argument clearly argues for one side and has good progression, it is not as developed as possible. ]]> 2019-03-20 19:31:44 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516899 belkacabuk https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516900 although the writer does make a clear stance the evidence used was uneven throughout the text.]]> 2019-03-20 19:31:45 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516900 salejandre911 https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516906 They make a decent stance on the subject and their claim is clear. However, their style is not mature and the writing is not flawless. At the same time it is not below average and their writing is not weak.]]> 2019-03-20 19:31:45 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343516906 destinymikroulis https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517050 The thesis is not clearly stated , but the evidence provided is used to back up claims in the body paragraphs. There is a lot of repetition and transitions could be more fluid. ]]> 2019-03-20 19:32:07 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517050 squeaksmaash https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517091 While the author has a grounded stance on the subject and uses sufficent evidence to support their claim, thus creating a coherent connection with their overarching claim. However, their individual execution of the writing itself does not evoke any kind of personal constructive thought or emotion within the reader. ]]> 2019-03-20 19:32:16 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517091 angelcaslv https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517110 The writer fails to use the sources efficiently but still manages to incorporate them when needed. Overall, the writer takes an explicit stance on the topic but is unconvincing.]]> 2019-03-20 19:32:19 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517110 ivanwind2002 https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517135 The essay has decent, clear points within it. The issue however, seems to be the little amount of evidence and the long paragraphs that made me lose focus.]]> 2019-03-20 19:32:23 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517135 ghvcaslv https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517171 Although the argument has great diction, the essay seems to be stretched for example, in the last paragraph there are only two sentences. He uses a wide variety of sources that boost his score a bit, but other than that pretty good.]]> 2019-03-20 19:32:29 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517171 waffleslgs https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517208 solid use of evidence, multiple minor grammatical errors and some decent diction problems. a couple subclaims were stated with no warrants or evidence. Also a weak conclusion. However, the main claim was supported acceptably enough I feel it deserves a 6 or so.]]> 2019-03-20 19:32:35 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517208 nivetha_nithyan https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517272 The writer's claim overall is not the strongest, however, the evidence and analysis used creates a strong connection with the claim. I think they just didn't go in depth enough with their ideas.  ]]> 2019-03-20 19:32:45 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517272 ashleyjohn4618 https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517278 2019-03-20 19:32:46 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517278 azaeippa https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517330 The author includes information in the introduction to clearly state the side he/she resides with (however, they do not provide evidence for the budget cuts). As you progress, you are being thrown information left and right, but they really dont have such a great impact on you. It is somewhat clustered]]> 2019-03-20 19:32:53 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517330 charlecolor05 https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517335 There is a solid position and a sufficient amount of evidence and analysis to support it, however, there are several mistakes in grammar and the argument is not as elaborated on to be truly effective.]]> 2019-03-20 19:32:53 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517335 thatblakekid7 https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517354 The essay is able to achieve all descriptions of 6 like supporting their claim clearly and using sufficient analysis while at the same time using advanced syntax which for me gives it the edge for a 7.]]> 2019-03-20 19:32:57 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517354 jerziggy https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517381 The writer has a clear position and supports it thoroughly. The punctuation is very poor, and the thesis is not intriguing.]]> 2019-03-20 19:33:00 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517381 codymehargreaves https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517462 While the writer fails to meet several conventions of writing, the overall argument is supported well and the position is relatively clear when stated in the introduction.]]> 2019-03-20 19:33:13 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517462 detigerfan https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517594 There is not a clear thesis, and it is kind of confusing to know the writer's stance throughout the essay. The evidence was used poorly, and does not do a good job at development. ]]> 2019-03-20 19:33:32 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517594 zsuerdieck24 https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517615 2019-03-20 19:33:36 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517615 thomasverhoeve https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517688 The Writer makes a strong claim, and uses a sufficient amount of sources, although the authors writing seems odd and out of place.]]> 2019-03-20 19:33:47 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517688 duaasaeed99 https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517742 The writer could have done a better job at defending their position; diction and syntax were mediocre ]]> 2019-03-20 19:33:58 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517742 conlion3 https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517769 The essay had a really good structure and flowed well though some of the claims she made were not backed up by supporting evidence. Mediocre syntax ]]> 2019-03-20 19:34:01 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343517769 fafn2018 https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343518202 The essay adequately argues the position; 6 instead of 7 because it could be more complete and more devel ]]> 2019-03-20 19:35:01 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343518202 katiekat2729 https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343518247 the author is clear and uses the correct amount of sources but the essay isnt]]> 2019-03-20 19:35:07 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343518247 ghvcaslv https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343518309 Although the argument has great diction the essay seems bland and also seems to be stretched for example the last paragraph has only two sentences the evidence helps his argument but its nothing outstanding]]> 2019-03-20 19:35:17 UTC https://padlet.com/acarlone/pl6bnbconhat/wish/343518309