Critique Board by Dominique Django

I like how that 22-23 put some real stuff that happens and put it into a realistic fiction story

2024-12-05 18:16:21 UTC

number 16

2024-12-05 18:16:33 UTC

I love this sentence " surrounded by Mother Nature’s tears" It is an excellent way to get your readers interested

26-27-28 is my all time favorite like how he went into a court room and had to spend a day in a shelter

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2024-12-05 18:18:34 UTC

i like this story its intresting (:

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2024-12-05 18:19:00 UTC

i like this story

what story?...

shoffman2032 — 2024-12-05 18:19:24 UTC

ermmm

2024-12-05 18:19:42 UTC

I really liked page 16. It was very detailed and interesting.

2024-12-05 18:20:41 UTC

I like the way its interesting so much feeling (: and, I think I'ma say I love it hope u read this!

2024-12-05 18:20:54 UTC

good

shoffman2032 — 2024-12-05 18:22:04 UTC

I lOvE 26 to 27 it so good

- shiloh

this is so good

2024-12-05 18:22:46 UTC

29-30

2024-12-05 18:23:02 UTC

It was very descriptive. I enjoyed reading it! :)

26/27/28

2024-12-05 18:23:07 UTC

I absolutely love how this author wrote this story it has every element its works so well with the story and the movement and the flow it fits so well with the concept and I love it this is my favorite of all time it has the people talking the flow and its beautiful I love it and thank you for writing this story

2024-12-05 18:23:08 UTC

u need to make the story make sense i mean the words like we drive but its ok...

2024-12-05 18:23:39 UTC

I really like number 16. It was detailed and very interesting.

hmmm

shoffman2032 — 2024-12-05 18:24:40 UTC

20 is my faVoritE I would read in my free time - $hiloh

Page 16 4th Paragraph 2nd Sentence

2024-12-05 18:24:45 UTC

"A mix of heaven and jail."

daguilar2032 — 2024-12-05 18:25:25 UTC

i like 1-2

test

2024-12-05 18:25:25 UTC

number 16

2024-12-05 18:25:34 UTC

your writing is so neat and edited and its so cool

26-28

2024-12-05 18:26:13 UTC

It was lacking emotion throughout the story, maybe add characters expressions and how they felt?

2024-12-05 18:26:14 UTC

hello

I like 34 (:

shoffman2032 — 2024-12-05 18:26:23 UTC

well that's all i have to sayyy - shiloh

2024-12-05 18:26:42 UTC

I love 2-3 "My best dream was to have four kids, to raise them the best I could, and to make them good citizens and very nice people… and I think I did it"

Test

ddjango2 — 2024-12-05 18:26:44 UTC

For number 15

2024-12-05 18:27:18 UTC

yours was very good to read it was very enjoyable to read.

21/22/23

2024-12-05 18:27:19 UTC

Is the best story so yeah heart and comment :)

Number 15

2024-12-05 18:27:37 UTC

I really liked how you added so much description/ detail to your story.

Page 16

2024-12-05 18:28:16 UTC

I really liked this story because it was very detailed and interesting.

soo prettyyy

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love the storyyyy missssssssss ,aaa

Number 33

2024-12-05 18:30:23 UTC

I like how you added so much detail to your story!! It helps a lot to understand the story

2024-12-05 18:31:14 UTC

Like if you like

👇

yeah don't look my bio

2024-12-05 18:32:40 UTC

I really like the way 21/22/23 put the sentence I woke up in the morning its very touching and I love the way they surrounding it

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2024-12-05 18:32:53 UTC

like my story for 1$

for number 16

2024-12-05 18:33:06 UTC

your writing was very interesting the part were you wrote about the rain it was very intresting its like I was really in the story.

2024-12-05 18:33:08 UTC

I like goodbye green mountains because it is very powerful

hi

2024-12-05 18:33:30 UTC

26-28

It was interesting, but there could be more detail, and maybe make sure your grammar is correct. Overall, great job!

goodbye green mountains

2024-12-05 18:34:31 UTC

I LOVE this one because is has the Korean language and English so you can still read it and it has GREAT description! :)

2024-12-05 18:35:35 UTC

I love refugee

33-34

2024-12-05 18:36:43 UTC

I like how the author added character to this story and added emotion.

2024-12-05 18:36:44 UTC

love this pls dont bully people the storys mean a lot and the mountain ones so good respect others things

16

2024-12-05 18:36:53 UTC

it is one of the best

don't bully these story's mean a lot just dont

2024-12-05 18:37:28 UTC

The smell of Manila

2024-12-05 18:37:42 UTC

Very interesting. I like this one!

26 27 28

2024-12-05 18:38:35 UTC

this is so very good Fitzgerald Cronenworth is on try hard mode

Goodbye green mountains.

2024-12-05 18:39:08 UTC

I love this story! You added so much description and I love how you added Korean to your story. And I like how you added confusion to her.

Great work!!

for number 22

2024-12-05 18:39:12 UTC

The first part of your story was very good and descriptive about what was happing

Goodbye green mountains

2024-12-05 18:39:20 UTC

It was amazing! it was very descriptive and I love how the main character spoke their native language. :)

I love this story its called the mountains and also I like the way it has emotions in the story's its cool and the bags the airport is just everything if that's u its amazing

2024-12-05 18:40:07 UTC

13-14

2024-12-05 18:41:21 UTC

Desirey Jones- the author who made this is such a good writer and keep writing i would love to read more!

page 4

2024-12-05 18:41:53 UTC

I liked how the author set the story

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apagebedolla2032 — 2024-12-05 19:18:38 UTC

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Roman Lvovskiy - I love how the author wrote page 9 descriptive and they planed the story so well Good Job!

2024-12-05 19:20:10 UTC

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apagebedolla2032 — 2024-12-05 19:36:39 UTC

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