https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-10-04 18:15:09 UTC 2025-11-19 03:03:12 UTC hello@padlet.com http://www.greatadventurehistory.com/Forums/uploads/monthly_2020_08/11157F68-27BD-4F4B-B4E8-E597984CB5EB.jpeg.68f5b90ce559f42b3804551406acd4b1.jpeg 28jbryant https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2/wish/1790572765 This is a place where you can give feedback! I have a serious addiction to rollercoaster please help]]> 2021-10-04 18:32:13 UTC https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2/wish/1790572765 28cbeck https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2/wish/1800647288 Hi! I just came from your wacky writing and it was amazing! I loved the part where you said “I will run away at my top speed, 1 MPH.” I love the weekly thoughts as well! You may want to go back and look at spelling but you did a great job! 

Hopefully somebody can help your rollercoaster addiction.

-Caden Beck]]> 2021-10-07 18:11:08 UTC https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2/wish/1800647288 28hbeversluis https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2/wish/1926160674 Your external details are on point and you seem to have great power with sighting the details around you. I truly find that you have an amazing internal view that connects to the story, the setting, and the readers and that this is a true “centerpiece” of your work. My only wish for you writing is to slow down externally due to setting comprehension reasons but otherwise you have put together an amazing memoir.]]> 2021-12-02 22:02:19 UTC https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2/wish/1926160674 28hbeversluis https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2/wish/2084310873 Hey, Joseph! I enjoyed your essay and the liberties you took and the direction you veered your essay in. I thought of it as well crafted and joyful with all the intentions you added for the reader’s understanding. The large amounts of work put in is visible with the professionalism you held through your writing and why and what you were persuading. But I held the fact that there were certain transition words and phrases that were redundant and clear up something like that can have a major impact with the tone of the essay.]]> 2022-03-08 16:05:58 UTC https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2/wish/2084310873 28azajac https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2/wish/2165953388 Hello Joseph! I really liked the description of how Meg looked at the beautiful lake and the forest, because I can imagine myself there in real life. Another thing I liked is the person who arrested Meg because at first I thought he was just your generic town guy with a country accent, but he turned out to be a police officer. The last thing I liked was the ending because at first it was kinda sad, but then it also had a happy feeling to it as well. It was like a bittersweet ending. No wish, because I thought your story was amazing! :)]]> 2022-05-01 19:13:52 UTC https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2/wish/2165953388 https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2/wish/2167230197 Hi Joseph! A thing I like about your piece is how you developed all of the characters. For example you gave the cop a southern accent. Another thing I like about your piece is the detail in your piece. For example, “The windows shined bright light into the room. There was a wooden planked door to the right with a golden doorknob. The walls were all logs looking like they came locally.” A wish I have for your piece is that you expand/explode some of the moments in your piece. Other than that your piece was really good.]]> 2022-05-02 18:36:37 UTC https://padlet.com/28jbryant/pdlo9n3p4dzzoa2/wish/2167230197