*Read and analyze this students work. Open your own padlet and write your first and last name using the red line. Using the black text answer the following questions. Please number your responses and write using a complete sentence.

1. Identify the controlling idea and write it down.

2. Identify the hook and write it down.

3. Find and write one simple sentence from the text.

4. Find and write one compound sentence from the text.

5. Find and write one complex sentence from the text.

6. Find and identify one detail that uses sensory language, figurative/literary language, or vivid details(imagery).

7. Find a sentence that uses a conjunctive adverb(transition word) and write the sentence down.

8. Identify the changes, insights, or lesson learned and write it down.

9. Score the personal narrative essay based on a scale from 1-4. Use your personal narrative rubric. Prove your answer using ACE. This answer should be written in paragraph format. 5 sentences or more.  

2. I sat on the bench, looked at the time left in the game, and couldn't have made a bigger grin.

3. 0ur fears were over!

4. We were already eliminated from from the playoffs, so we were very pessimistic when it came to winning.

5. In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something,we should put it aside and work as a true team would.

6. The buzzer screamed as the shot lock went to zero.

7. In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something we should put it aside and work as a true team would.

8. They learned that even if you aren't the best team you should still try because you never know what will happen.

9. In the C-Team personal narrative essay, I would score it a 4 because it had a lot of good detail and the story flows perfectly. The hook grabbed the readers attention and kept it all the way through.

2. The buzzer screamed as the shot lock went to zero.

3. Our fear was over

4. We were already eliminated from the playoffs, so we were very pessimistic when it came to winning.

5. I sat on the bench, looked at the time left in the game, and couldn't have made a bigger grin.

6. We were on top of the world!

2.I sat on the bench ,looked at the time left in the game , and couldn't have made a bigger grin.

3.Our fears were over!

4.We were already eliminated from the playoffs , so we were very pessimistic when it came to winning.

5. In the end , we learned that instead of being negative towards something , we should put it aside and work as a true team would.

6. We chanted “win" with the help of our cheerleaders.

2.i sat on the bench,looked at the time left in the game,and couldn't have made a bigger grin

3.our fears are over!

4.this was a remarkable moment because it was the first time we over came losing and accomplished something together

5.we learned that instead of being negative towards something,we should put it aside and work as a true team would

6 the buzzer screamed as the shot clock went to zero

7.it all started after we lost the first nine games

8.we should put the negative aside and work as a true team would

9.3,not a lot of detail hik

2. I sat on the bench ,looked at the time left in the game,and couldn't have made a bigger grin.

3.Our fears are over!

4.We where already eliminated from the playoffs ,so we where very pessimistic when it came to winning.

5.This was a remarkable moment because it was the first time we overcame losing and accomplished something together.

6.The buzzer screamed as the shot clock went to zero.

7.It all started after we lost the first nine games.

8.In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something, we should put it aside and work as a true team.

9.

2)I sat on the bench, looked at the time left in the game, and couldn't have mad a bigger grin.

3) Our fears are over!

4) We were already eliminated from the playoffs, so we were very pessimistic when it came to winning.

5) This is a remarkable moment because it was the first time we overcame loosing and accomplished something together.

6) THe buzzer screamed as the shot clock went to zero.

7) IT all started after we lost the first nine games.

8) in the end , we learned that instead of being negative forwards something, we should put it aside and work as a true team would.

9) 6

2. "I sat on the bench, looked at the time left in the game, and couldn't have a bigger grin."

3. "Our doubt has mutated into pure determination."

4. "We were already eliminated from the playoffs, so we were very pessimistic when it came to winning."

5. "This was a remarable moment because it was the first time we overcome losing and accomplished something together."

6. The buzzer screamed

7. It all started after we lost the first nine games

8. In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something, we should put it aside and work as a true team would

9. In c-team prevails essay, I would score it a 4. This essay uses a lot of sensory detail. For example,"caught a glimpse of coach crying"," buzzer screaming" and "cheated win." Uses the sensory detail of sight. Also uses sensory detail of hearing and personification. Uses sensory detail of sound

2 I sat on the bench, looked at the time left in the game and couldn't have made a bigger grin.

3.Our fears are over!

4.Where already eliminated from the playoffs, so we were very pessimistic when it came to winning.

5. In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something, we should put it aside and work together.

6. I even caught a glimpse of coach crying tears of joy.

7. In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something, we should put it aside and work together.

8. In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something, we should put it aside and work together.

9.In the "C-team"personal narrative essay, I will give this story a 4 because it uses careful and good detail in paragraph three and it says "I even caught  a glimpse of the coach crying tears of joy." It's a sensory detail because I can imagen in my head the coach crying. I can also see the "buzzer screamed as the shotclock whet to zero." I can imgen in my head that I am seeing the shotclock went to zero."That why is give this story a 4. 

2.I sat on the bench, looked at the time left in the game, and couldn't have made a bigger grin.

3.Our fears are over!

4.We were already eliminated from the playoffs, so we were very pessimistic when it came to winning.

5.In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something , we should put it aside and work as a true team would.

6. I even caught a glimpse of coach crying tears of joy.

7. In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something , we should put it aside and work as a true team would.

8. In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something , we should put it aside and work as a true team would.

9.

2.i sat on the bench, looked at the time

3.our fears are over

4.i will never forget the time that my teammates and I worked together to win our first basketball game

5.this was a remarkable moment because it was the first time we overcame losing and accomplished something together

6.the buzzer screamed

7

2. "I sat on the bench, looked at the time left in the game, and couldn't have made a bigger grin."

3. "Our fears are over!"

4. "We were already eliminated from the playoffs, so we were very pessimistic when it came to winning."

5. "In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something, we should put it aside and work as a true team should.

6. "I even caught a glimpse of coach crying tears of joy."

7. "In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something, we should put it aside and work as a true team should."

2.I sat on the bench ,looked at the time left in the game , and couldn't have made a bigger grin

3. We were just playing now to not lose everything.

4. This was a remarkable moment because it was the first time we overcame losing and accomplished something together.

5. We were already eliminated from the playoffs , so we were very pessimistic when it came to winning.

6. Our bodies cried whit agony as doubt struck us.

7.

2.i sat on the bench, looked at the time left in the game , and couldn't have made a bigger grin .The buzzer screamed as the shot clock went to zero.

3.The bench raided the court.

4. In the end ,we learned that instead

5.

6.the buzzer screamed.

2. I sat on the bench, looked at the time left in the game, and couldn't have made a bigger grin.

3. Our fears are over!

4. We were already eliminated from the playoffs, so we were very pessimistic when it came to winning.

5. This was a remarkable moment because it was the first time we overcame losing and accomplished something together.

6. Our bodies cried with agony as doubt struck us.

7. It all started after we lost the first nine games.c

8. In the end,we learned that instead of being negative towards something ,we should put it aside and work as a true team

9. 

2 I sat on the bench looked at the shotclock

3 our fears are over!

4 I sat on the bench, looked at the time left in the game, and couldn't have made a bigger grin.

5 this was a remarkable moment because it was the first that we overcame losing and accomplished something together

6 the buzzers screamed as the shotclock hits 0

7 we were already eliminated from the playoffs

8the lesson is don't assume things right away

9 In the "C team" personal narrative essay, I would score it a 4 because it it has great details, it says on topic and used great sensory details to create some imagery... Not done

4. I sat on the bench, looked at the time left in the game, couldn't have a bigger grin.

5. This was a remarkable moment because it was the first that we overcame losing and accomplished something together.

6. The buzzer screamed as the shot clock went to zero

4.We were already eliminated from the playoffs, so we were very pessimistic when it came to winning.

5. In the end, we learned that instead of being negative towards something,we should put it aside and work as a true team.

6. I even caught a glimpse of coach crying tears of joy.

http://www.townsendpress.com/uploaded_files/tinymce/Library%20Excerpts/Timeless_chap1.pdf

Think about this question:

What character trait is revealed about the emperor through his actions as the story unfolds? Choose on trait and back it up with text evidence.

As a class, we will answer this question together using ACE.

8. The lesson learned is not to assume things right away.

9. I would score "c-team" personal narrative a

8.never give up and try

9.i would score it a because they used many details and good of transition words and deserves a 4 !!!!!!!