https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs Made with an aura of mystery en-us 2021-05-10 12:00:31 UTC 2021-05-10 13:00:52 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508783613 2021-05-10 12:31:38 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508783613 jbarnhar1 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508797809 GLOW:
I love how clear your push factors are!
GROW: I think you could organize your journal into paragraphs. :)]]> 2021-05-10 12:35:40 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508797809 574803 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508798497 For kira- glow I liked the details on why your charcter was leaving there country. grow- add more dialogue.]]> 2021-05-10 12:35:52 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508798497 5378311 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508798980 glow :  the pull and push  factors were very  clear and you could understand them

grow :  I think one thing you could have made better was  make it flow smoother.

- Alex M

]]> 2021-05-10 12:36:00 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508798980 570393 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508801544 Glow: I loved how you described that their mother wasn't with them

Grow: I think you should explain more about seeterage ]]> 2021-05-10 12:36:44 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508801544 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508803797 To myself
Glow: I think I had very good details in my journal.
Grow: I think I can say a word less often.
To Jasmyn
Glow: I liked how detailed the boat part of the journal was.
Grow:  I think you need  to look over your punctuation and capitalization.
To Daisy
Glow: I liked how you highlighted your research
Grow: I think you should look over your capitalization.]]> 2021-05-10 12:37:23 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508803797 588873 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508804704 Glow: I love how detailed the push-pull factors were.
Grow: adding more talking.]]> 2021-05-10 12:37:36 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508804704 574554 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508805036 Glow: You have really detailed push and pull factors 
Grow: maybe your journal could have more paragraphs.]]> 2021-05-10 12:37:42 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508805036 632502 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508807947 Glow- I liked how she told the story
Grow- I can tell she worked hard with researching the topics]]> 2021-05-10 12:38:25 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508807947 603834 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508813176 Glow: I liked how you started your paragraph. 
Grow: Make sure to include where your coming from!
-Radha ]]> 2021-05-10 12:39:45 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508813176 527029 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508813844 Glow: A great story with a good plot
Grow: Some words and sentences were left out

]]> 2021-05-10 12:39:57 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508813844 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508814073 glow: I loved how many details there were 
Grow: I think you could say where your coming from.]]> 2021-05-10 12:40:01 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508814073 577133 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508817223 The details where really good]]> 2021-05-10 12:40:43 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508817223 588873 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508819588 Glow:There was a lot of deitail.
Grow: I could add more dialogue.]]> 2021-05-10 12:41:14 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508819588 574895 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508819928 Glow- Good details on journal 1 and 2 
Grow- Better details in journal 3 ]]> 2021-05-10 12:41:20 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508819928 641482 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508820236 glow
that i got everything in on time

grow
tell more details about the girls]]> 2021-05-10 12:41:24 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508820236 dmidrony https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508821164 glow - I used really strong vocabulary. 
grow - I should talk more about my sister.]]> 2021-05-10 12:41:38 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508821164 574895 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508825499 Gkow- Good Details about the boat ride
Grow- Tell us more about your age and how old you are 
-miles]]> 2021-05-10 12:42:43 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508825499 588873 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508829145 Glow: It's really historically accurate
Grow: The pull factors were not that clear.]]> 2021-05-10 12:43:37 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508829145 jbarnhar1 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508830331 GLOW: Great details about the tenements
GROW: I feel like bits of dialogue would be a great addition, but great work!!]]> 2021-05-10 12:43:55 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508830331 632502 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508831093 Glow-I liked how you described your characters experience on the ship. A lot of good details.
Grow- I think the first entry was good,so I do not even think theres a grow needed. ]]> 2021-05-10 12:44:07 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508831093 dmidrony https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508834392 Glow - Your story is very detailed.
Grow-  you could add dialogue, you don't talk to anyone you only talk about yourself.
from Maayan]]> 2021-05-10 12:44:56 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508834392 574803 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508834569 for myself- glow the events were based off of history.
grow-add more dialouge]]> 2021-05-10 12:44:58 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508834569 603834 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508834714 Glow; You described everything well.
Grow: Dont forget to capitalize words. 
-Radha ]]> 2021-05-10 12:45:00 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508834714 573923 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508837400 glow relly good detals
grow small spelling errors. ]]> 2021-05-10 12:45:37 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508837400 527029 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508840118 Glow: Good story, I enjoyed the story

Grow: Capitalize words]]> 2021-05-10 12:46:15 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508840118 573448 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508841596 glow:liked the story line
grow: make sue to add more periods.
-celia

]]> 2021-05-10 12:46:37 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508841596 5378311 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508842989 grow: i would add more of  the befor you had to leave

glow : i liked how you made there feelings stand out  and make us feel some thing for them.

- Alex m]]> 2021-05-10 12:46:57 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508842989 574554 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508847631 Glow: the parts about your community 
Grow: you could add more about the ship]]> 2021-05-10 12:48:02 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508847631 527029 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508847977 Glow: GREAT STORY! Loved how you introduced more than one character!

Grow: Fix grammar. That's all!
From Bennett]]> 2021-05-10 12:48:07 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508847977 603834 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508852009 Glow: I liked how there was dialogue.
Grow: Check your spelling :)]]> 2021-05-10 12:49:00 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508852009 574895 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508854960 Glow- Great details
Grow- Tell us how old you are and what your name is ]]> 2021-05-10 12:49:38 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508854960 570393 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508855506 Glow: I think I did a good job detailing the story.

Grow: I should of added dialog ]]> 2021-05-10 12:49:45 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508855506 573448 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508860780 glow: your story was very well done with a lot of detail
grow: maybe dont add that much detail to dome parts to keep the story moving-celia]]> 2021-05-10 12:50:54 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508860780 5378311 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508860790 grow i would add more how they were feeling.

glow i liked how  it was set up and the push and pul factors.
 

]]> 2021-05-10 12:50:54 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508860790 dmidrony https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508862696 Glow - you are very detailed.
Grow - Talk more about where you came from. ( some more details )
from Maayan]]> 2021-05-10 12:51:16 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508862696 573436 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508865827 Glow: I love how she added a lot of detail 
Grow: Nothing really(:]]> 2021-05-10 12:51:56 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508865827 570393 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508866045 Glow: I loved how you talked about what is was like before the boat ride over

Grow: You could of added more about your character]]> 2021-05-10 12:51:59 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508866045 574803 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508870750 For daisy- glow the first journal was very detailed.
grow- talk more about the person who sent you a letter.]]> 2021-05-10 12:53:01 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508870750 632502 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508872384 Glow- A lot of good details
Grow- Describe your characters experience on the ship a little bit more. ]]> 2021-05-10 12:53:23 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508872384 574554 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508872744 Glow: It is very detailed 
Grow: I could have added more about where I came from]]> 2021-05-10 12:53:27 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508872744 527029 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508875323 Glow: Good story and good organization

Grow: Longer sentences and more detail
From Bennett]]> 2021-05-10 12:54:01 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508875323 573436 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508875747 Glow: I love how your journal was very organized 
Grow: Nothing really

]]> 2021-05-10 12:54:06 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508875747 603834 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508876737 Glow: My push factors were essay to see and I had a lot of detail. 
Grow: I should check my grammar in general. ]]> 2021-05-10 12:54:19 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508876737 jbarnhar1 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508877386 Great organization with your paragraphs!
Consider adding dialogue :)]]> 2021-05-10 12:54:29 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508877386 527029 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508885428 Glow: Good story! Introduces more than one character.
Grow: Separate sentences 
From Bennett]]> 2021-05-10 12:56:09 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508885428 dmidrony https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508888625 Glow - you talk a lot about the bout.
grow -  your story is all over the place it seems like all your journals are put together.
from Maayan]]> 2021-05-10 12:56:47 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508888625 5378311 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508889271 Grow   i would add  more about how you felt t after eles island 

glow i liked how detailed every thing was .

- Alex]]> 2021-05-10 12:56:53 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508889271 577133 https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508897945 It was very detailed]]> 2021-05-10 12:58:48 UTC https://padlet.com/jbarnhar1/pcbmhll2a24kenrs/wish/1508897945