In the sea there are crocodiles: By Magdalena Mandl by Magdalena Mandl

In the sea there are crocodiles: By Magdalena Mandl by Magdalena Mandl https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u en-us 2018-03-07 21:33:41 UTC 2025-10-01 03:02:46 UTC hello@padlet.com What should be in the PEE paragraphs: y3b_Magdalena_M https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239420838 Point (5 points)

1. Is the point of the author worded clearly and efficiently? (2 points)

2. Does the Point include an element of fiction? (2 points)

i.e. plot, metaphor, imagery, foreshadowing

3. Is the Point between 2 and 5 sentences in length? (1 point)

Evidence (5 points)

4. Is there a linking sentence that links the Point to the Evidence? (1 point)

i.e. An example of this is … / Evidence to support this idea is …

5. Is quoted material signaled by “quotation marks” and is it followed by a correct reference to the original publication: (2 points)

i.e. (Geda, 2001, p.81)

6. Does the evidence provided include the element of fiction mentioned in the Point? (2 points)

Explanation (5 points)

7. Does the explanation link the Evidence to the Point in a clear manner? (2 points)

8. Does the explanation link the Evidence to the Point in a logical way? (2 points)

9. Is the explanation written efficiently, without too many redundant words? (1 point)

General impression (5 points)

10. Is the paragraph at least 150 words in length? (4 points)

11. Does the paragraph have a good layout? (1 point)

* Add: Literary devices:

]]> 2018-03-07 21:42:22 UTC https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239420838 PEE paragraph Metaphorical Title: IMPROVE y3b_Magdalena_M https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239421328 The metaphorical title, in the sea there are crocodiles, says that on a vast journey unlikely dangers will await. It the context of this book it means that on the long journey Enaiatollah made from Afghanistan to Italy, there were unexpected and unlikely dangers on his path. The author uses imagery, through a metaphor to give the reader a personal image of Enaiat’s story.

The title is:“in the sea there are crocodiles”. (Geda 2010, cover page)

The sea symbolizes a long or vast distance that can be covered, but only conquered with wit and luck. The sea shows this because of its large expanse and because it covers a large part of our home planet, the earth. The crocodiles, who are predator from nature, symbolize the danger that can be found on the journey. Crocodiles are used instead of sharks or whales, which are sea bound because it is very unlikely that a crocodile will be encountered at sea. This means that the crocodiles are shown as unexpected, unlikely and rare situation or danger.
By: Magdalena Mandl

Extra: In the books, we see in the first chapter that one of the “crocodiles” is that Enaiat’s own mother abandoned him (although with good intentions). And the sea is shown by the long journey that was already behind them, but only made up a tiny spec of the vast journey to come.

]]> 2018-03-07 21:43:30 UTC https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239421328 Chapter Afghanistan - best passage y3b_Magdalena_M https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239422066 The best part of the first paragraph was the part that we get a foreshadowing of what will happen next after we have had a glimpse at the situation at hand (Enaiat’s mother leaving him with 3 valuable lessons).

Example: My favourite quote of the first paragraph (Afghanistan) was the part where Enaiat subconsciously realises that there is something wrong with the situation he is in. And that good luck does not fit with, see you soon. We see this in the passage: “Good luck, little Enaiat… Why wish me good luck if we were going to meet again soon?” - (Geda 2010 p.15)

This is the best part of the paragraph because it ties together the whole journey of getting to the part where Enaiat is alone. This immense part of the journey is told in a very short chapter, but this passage ties the whole story together. The readers are shown a small foreshadowing of what will happen once the journey continues. I also think that this part shows that somehow Enaiat’s subconscious already told him that this journey will become a lot harder for him soon.

By: Magdalena Mandl

]]> 2018-03-07 21:46:11 UTC https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239422066 PEE paragraph Afghanistan - Conflict y3b_Magdalena_M https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239423006 The school that Enaiat attended being shut down, was on of conflicts in “Afghanistan”. This conflict was person vs. Society.

Example 1: “The Taliban came into the classroom, carrying a rifle, and said in a loud voice that the school had to be closed immediately. The teacher asked why. Mt chief’s orders, the man replied, You have to obey. And left without waiting for a reply or giving any other explanation.”- (Geda, 2010 p.21)
Example 2: “Ba omidi didar, boys, he said. Goodbye. They shot him. In front of everyone. From that day on, The school was closed, and without school, life is like ashes.” - (Geda , 2010 p.24)

This conflict is person vs. society, or society vs. society because the Taliban are forcing the Hazaras, against their will, to close their only school. At first sight, it only seems like person vs. Person, because the one Taliban came into the classroom and confronted the teacher. But this conflict also affects the rest of the Hazaras, the children, other teachers and the parents. Which makes this conflict: Society vs. Society, or Tribe vs. Tribe.

The Conflict shows why the school was closed, and also contributed to the fact that Enaiat would not have a fair shot at life if he stayed in Nava. Because he could not go to school and was being “hunted” by the Tablbhan. So this small conflict had a big impact on the larger story because it was one of the reasons for Enaiat’s journey to a better life.

By using this literary device, the author shows How the Taliban and the Hazara interacted. The conflict gives the reader a clear picture of the seriousness of the situation, and how oppresses the Hazara was. Which makes this conflict effective in communicating the relationship between the 2 tribes, and how this contributes to the rest of Enaiat’s story.

By: Magdalena Mandl

]]> 2018-03-07 21:48:55 UTC https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239423006 PEE paragraph Iran - best passage y3b_Magdalena_M https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239423485 Enaiat is always honest about his story, and despite all the things he has gone through he still sees the positive perspective in every bad situation.

“I have to tell the truth, because if anyone ever reads these words, any of the men I met in Isfahan, I want them to know, because I don't think I ever told the: I liked in there, on the site. So, thank you.”- (Geda, 2010 p.81)

This passage shows that Enaiat is always truthful, and tries to always tell the truth, be clear in his words and be polite. No matter how long ago it was that he worked at the site, or how unlikely it is for one of the men that he met at the site, to read this book; he wants to thank them and he wants everyone who reads his words to know that he liked working there. In this way, we also see that he sees the light no matter how dark the situation might seem. Because even when he had to work at the building site as a young boy and was separated from all of his family and friends; Enaiat saw the community at the site and how lucky he was that everyone was good to him at the site. So he was thankful and did not complain. This paragraph also foreshadows that Enaiat will not stay at eh building site. We notice this because he drops hints about the situation being good and him being unaware or ignorant of the constant danger. There are also other hints throughout the chapter that lead the readers to believe that he will have to leave the building site. Like that Sufi left and he was left alone. So this passage shows his courage, honesty and his optimism that helped him through many difficult situations.

By: Magdalena Mandl

]]> 2018-03-07 21:50:38 UTC https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239423485 Orientation in place and time - Nava to Quetta y3b_Magdalena_M https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239423650 Place: Move from Nava to Quetta

Question: What causes Enaiatollah to move on to a different place?

PEE:

Enaiat moves from Nava to Quetta, because it is not safe anymore from him In Nava. This part of the story is a very important part of the Exposition because it kindles the rest of the story.

"That’s how things are in my country. There’s a saying among the Taliban: Tajikistan for the Tajiks, Uzbekistan for the Uzbeks, and Goristan from the Hazara. That’s what they say. Gor means ‘grave’.” - (Geda, p.2010 12)

This saying shows that Enaiat is not safe anymore in Nava because he is a Hazara. Hazaras are the black sheep in Afghanistan and they are threatened by the Tajiks and the Uzbeks. If Enaiat would stay in Nava he would have to live a life of fear and would always have to watch is back. So Enaiat’s mother decides to take 10-year-old Enaiat away from Nava to Quetta, to give him a better shot at life. This quote gives us a broad picture of the country Enaiat lived in (where his town was). It shows how dangerous it was if you were born in a tribe that is not an Ali of the Taliban. Which also gives us a good impression of the living conditions and the constant fear that Enaiat’s family, friends, and tribe lived in. The choice of Enaiat’s mother to bring Enaiat away kindles the story. However it is still not easy for him, and he encounters new dangers on his journey to Italy, which replace the Taliban that used to ‘hunt’ him.

By: Magdalena Mandl

]]> 2018-03-07 21:51:21 UTC https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239423650 Orientation in place and time - Move form Quetta to Isfahan y3b_Magdalena_M https://padlet.com/y3b_Magdalena_M/oqfjibsclq4u/wish/239425296 Place: Move from Quetta to Isfahan (Kerman)

Question: What role do country borders play in the way that humans are connected in the story? How do borders connect or divide the people? What are the consequences of this for Enaiatollah?

PEE:

Enaiatollah moves from Quetta to Kermen (site in Isfahan) in order to the better business opportunities, and to make a living (which was not possible with only selling goods on the streets). In order for Enaiat to get across the border from Pakistan to Iran, he has to go with a Human trafficker. In this situation, the borders are setting him apart from society (because of he is illegal). However, sharing their journey with other Hazaras also connects him to other people on the same road. This connection helps Enaiat on his way to Iran.

“I felt hot and cold at the same time. I was sweating… Go call the man. Which man? The one who defended me from the long beard.” - (Geda, 2010 p.68)

When Enaiat is sick, and he cannot get help from a doctor, because he is an illegal in Iran (due to the separation of borders between Iran and Pakistan). In this way, Enaiat is divided from the Iranian society, because of the border separating Iran from Pakistan (and his home country, Afghanistan). However, Enaiat gets help from the people around him, the people who are also illegal and are on this journey from Pakistan to Iran over the border. In this way, the border connects Enaiat to the people on this journey, and but to this connection, he is helped and can get better. And although he can not get helped by a doctor, Enaiat and his fellow immigrants stick together due to their common problem (the borders). This connection and division of people is also very visible in the way Enaiat is treated, by different people, and plays a large role in the success of his journey.

By: Magdalena Mandl y3b

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