https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn Be honest ... I know you hate it en-us 2018-03-01 13:23:21 UTC 2025-12-28 19:13:08 UTC hello@padlet.com 23msmith1 https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn/wish/237375380 I like the way that you started each paragraph with a new transition.]]> 2018-03-02 13:24:20 UTC https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn/wish/237375380 23mcutaia https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn/wish/237407848 -Mia Cutaia 
Overall your vignette was really good! I really enjoyed how you added in a lot of description and detail throughout your whole piece! My favorite part was when you stated, "   Flipping page to page section to section looking for that night’s due work. One page two page three page four. Then finally jackpot, the pile of papers that needed to be struck with a pen and dragged along the page." In the future, I would suggest to add figurative language about the pizza. But overall nice job! ]]> 2018-03-02 14:34:36 UTC https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn/wish/237407848 23lcerchio https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn/wish/246859996 Louie Cerchio]]> 2018-03-28 12:33:17 UTC https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn/wish/246859996 23lcerchio https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn/wish/246860004 2018-03-28 12:33:18 UTC https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn/wish/246860004 23lcerchio https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn/wish/246860026 2018-03-28 12:33:19 UTC https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn/wish/246860026 23lcerchio https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn/wish/246860229 Louie Cerchio
I really enjoyed your word choice it really gave me a good picture in my head of what this religion is. One thing you should work on is putting your comma's in I did find some places where they could be put in. Overall, amazing job I look forward to reading your next story! ]]> 2018-03-28 12:33:50 UTC https://padlet.com/23jdesantis/ofkexz3ryvdn/wish/246860229