Introduction and Conclusion Paragraphs by Mary Petty https://padlet.com/mry160/crit Critique Exercise en-us 2020-06-03 06:53:18 UTC 2020-06-03 16:11:52 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f5a5.png Based upon what you learned today, what is missing in this sample introduction and conclusion paragraph? What advice would you give this student to help them revise? Double click anywhere on the board, to write your response. mry160 https://padlet.com/mry160/crit/wish/608261661 Intro: Attention hyper activity disorder is a disorder that effects everyone and not just young adults. Persuasive strategies are used by the CDC to demonstrate an argument centered around ethos through a connection with children and pathos plus logos through facts and knowledge.
Conclusion: Anyone is prone to ADHD. The CDC persuades people of all ages they can have ADHD. Through demonstrations of ethos using kids and everyday symptoms people seek treatment. Pathos stating facts, and through ethos the knowledge is applied to self-diagnose symptoms of ADHD. The CDC uses these three elements to persuade anyone who is prone they can have ADHD. 


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