Samuel H. Google Sites Peer Feedback 2021 - 2022 by Samuel Herman https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-10-04 14:45:36 UTC 2022-04-25 15:30:06 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-uploads.storage.googleapis.com/1385157694/dca6b731df7882d9ced1172dcc8ce601/drawing.png -Jon Kohler 28jkohler https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn/wish/1793380502 i realy liked your writing. I realy like the beginning were it said Hi welcome readers to my rainforest of  writing. Don’t worry you won’t get wet this is not a real rainforest. I also liked your quote. I like how you got it from your grandma.
There is just one thing i fell like you should fix is this line.My favorite food out of all the food I like is lobster. I fell like you should do this to It My favorite food out of all the food is lobster. But its realy good .good job
]]> 2021-10-05 14:57:25 UTC https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn/wish/1793380502 Cooper B. 28cblank1 https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn/wish/1923270034 I really enjoyed how you described a fortnite game where you got 31 kills, From 28 to 31 and a win. That felt impossible to complete but somehow, it was not. Stories like these are the reason writers get lots of people reading their stories, I loved this story and how you explained what was going on in the game. It also seems that you loved this moment, and you will never forget it even when you grow up and potentially be a world famous gamer, which I think is really possible for you. This memoir was great and I noticed how you got the kills and imagined it in my head. However, This was a great story but what I think you could add is maybe describing who was with you and fully where and when it was, and what skin you were wearing, basically can you add more, Because I would really love to read more of this story. I really enjoyed it and hope you can make more. Shalom! -Cooper]]> 2021-12-01 16:48:54 UTC https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn/wish/1923270034 Amazing work, keep it up! 28azajac https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn/wish/1925483517 Hi Sam! It’s me Adam, and I really liked your writing piece! My first star is that I really liked how suspenseful it was when I kept reading it.  Was like, “Oh God! What’s gonna happen next?” It got me really hooked to the story and it was just really good. In addition I really liked the ending, and the inner thoughts, because the inner thoughts give us more story, and what your perspective was like, and the ending I definitely agree with, that if you want to accomplish something, and you think that it is impossible, it’s not, and you just gotta keep trying. However, I would maybe like a little bit more to the ending, because it was so good. Other than that, your writing piece was really good, and I really look forward to more writing pieces from you!]]> 2021-12-02 15:51:29 UTC https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn/wish/1925483517 Your memoir, From Marco 28mlaurenzano https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn/wish/1925619287 Your memoir was the best I’ve seen yet. It was action packed, it was filled with emotion, It was filled with humor. This memoir is amazing Sam. My favorite part was when you blew Angle’s eardrums out. That was very funny and made me chuckle. There are just a few things I think you need to work on. Number one is spelling, Number two is grammar, and Number three is you need to reread your piece. This was by far my favorite memoir and I look forward to reading your other writing pieces in the future. Awesome job Sam!]]> 2021-12-02 16:48:07 UTC https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn/wish/1925619287 Your Persuasive Essay, From Marco https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn/wish/2082069857 Your Essay was a very great essay, it was filled with facts that I wouldn’t have known unless I read yours. You did so well in painting pictures in my head, especially the first one. I imagined it so clearly, I could have been seeing it in front of me. Now thats so great writing. Some things I think you need to fix are some of the grammar didn’t make sense. At the start you say “Picture a boy sitting on their couch” Now I get what you tried to say, but I would have said it more like this “Picture a boy sitting on his big brown couch” The reason you should make it like that is because by saying their, people will understand but it won’t make too much sense to them. By saying big brown couch, it is adding more descriptiveness. Overall, your essay was amazing and I would definitely recommend it to people, I would just say to re read it a couple times. Good Work!]]> 2022-03-07 16:39:56 UTC https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn/wish/2082069857 About your Story Task- Marco L. https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn/wish/2156786645 Hey Sam! A strength in your writing was that you were very detailed on the writing, you had many smilies, many metaphors, and overall, it was very detailed. I especially liked where you said “I was like a hopeless little mouse trying to do something” I liked this because it showed how she wasn’t able to do anything. I addition, I also really liked you were really capturing how the character was feeling. I feel like the way you were talking in her perspective and the things you said, just made me feel what she was feeling. A suggestion I could give you is the story felt a bit rushed. I feel like you should make it a bit slower. When you said that she screamed but they were already outside, I would have said “I heard the patter of all their feet, running outside the door” it’s little things like this that can make the story way better. Great Job!]]> 2022-04-25 15:29:46 UTC https://padlet.com/28sherman/ob82wxeyr0asevyn/wish/2156786645