https://padlet.com/26lferencevych/o761rsxaov2a Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 18:36:43 UTC 2019-12-12 18:39:03 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f36d.png 26gbrown https://padlet.com/26lferencevych/o761rsxaov2a/wish/420941802 Luba, I absolutely adored the evaluation of Emmie falling from the bridge! It really added suspense for the readers. It put me through a rollercoaster of emotions. Your gorgeous descriptive writing helped me truly see the world from Emmie's perspective. I love how, through Emmie’s thoughts while falling, you added her estimate of how her mom felt. I also deeply enjoyed how Emmie ended up being rigid towards Estrella. This created a plot twist, which spiced up your story even more! The one wish I have for you is to make this book into a novel!]]> 2019-12-06 18:56:28 UTC https://padlet.com/26lferencevych/o761rsxaov2a/wish/420941802 26ryaney https://padlet.com/26lferencevych/o761rsxaov2a/wish/422236916 One of your sentences that stood out was “Her frilly pink and purple dresses and skirts that bounced as she walked.” when I read that sentence, I could see what she was wearing. You also had amazing description, it was amazing to read so much of those juicy descriptions. However some of your descriptions have words that I have never heard of, and a lot of other kids our age might not understand what those words words, so maybe next time you can make your description with a little less of those types of words, you don’t have to but when I don’t understand a writing piece I always put the book/story down and read something else. Overall your story was really amazing.

]]> 2019-12-10 15:58:37 UTC https://padlet.com/26lferencevych/o761rsxaov2a/wish/422236916 26ramberg https://padlet.com/26lferencevych/o761rsxaov2a/wish/422494045 I love your title!! You have a lot of amazing description that makes the reader feel like they were in the moment!  Your title and your theme go perfectly with your story! I like how Emmie realized to forgive Estrella and become good friends with her. In my head, I could picture every moment perfectly, your story is amazing! Like Rosie said, your story is really good! My wish for you is to keep writing no matter what! : )

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