https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri P2 Thesis Revision en-us 2022-11-22 16:02:08 UTC 2022-11-28 21:50:07 UTC hello@padlet.com valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394393846 For collegiate female runners, body image related issues are enabled by idealized body image and the competitive nature of the sport.  ]]> 2022-11-22 16:06:05 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394393846 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394396461 1. Thesis sentences introduce the central ideas of the entire paper 
2. It is useful to include subtopics or categories within the thesis statement without getting into too much detail.
3. Thesis statements look different depending on the type of paper which you're writing. Expository essays should use strong and decisive language.]]> 2022-11-22 16:08:09 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394396461 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394396803 Body image and eating disorder issues are enabled within collegiate female runners through idealized body image, extensive training, and dieting. ]]> 2022-11-22 16:08:26 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394396803 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394424283 Body image is  “based on a cultural ideology that underlies body satisfaction, senses of ideal and desirable bodies, and activities motivated by these perceptions and feelings" (Eisend 103). ]]> 2022-11-22 16:30:14 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394424283 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394424493  Research collected by Torres-McGhee showed that many female athletes would like to be “smaller than they currently are” (435) and those who were satisfied with their physique were for the most part actively dieting.  ]]> 2022-11-22 16:30:24 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394424493 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394424760 “female athletes... in lean sports are at an increased risk for disordered eating... compared with those competing in nonlean sports” (Robbenson 349)]]> 2022-11-22 16:30:36 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394424760 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394431975 This quote means that the way people, specifically females, feel about their bodies has to do with what our culture deems as desirable]]> 2022-11-22 16:36:23 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394431975 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394434959 This matters in relation to collegiate runners because ideas of desirable "athletic bodies" impact how runners see their own bodies]]> 2022-11-22 16:38:50 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394434959 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394436226 I chose this quote to further develop my idea about idealized body image in female athletes.]]> 2022-11-22 16:39:54 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394436226 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394436881 This connects to quote #2 because the experience of women wanting to change their bodies is impacted by this cultural ideology of a desirable body.]]> 2022-11-22 16:40:18 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394436881 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394436997 This connects to my thesis because it directly contributes to body image ]]> 2022-11-22 16:40:23 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394436997 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394442767 This quote means that research showed female athletes we dieting to feel satisfied with their body]]> 2022-11-22 16:45:08 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394442767 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394445827 This is important to my topic because the cycle of dieting and body dissatisfaction is what leads to eating disorders in athletes.]]> 2022-11-22 16:47:04 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394445827 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394446623 I chose this quote to show that even female athletes aren't excluded from the diet culture in our society]]> 2022-11-22 16:47:46 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394446623 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394447563 This connects to quote #2 because it is a cause and effect; the desire to be smaller is prevalent in lean sports and is also associated with dieting and they reinforce each other. ]]> 2022-11-22 16:48:34 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394447563 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394449984 This connects to my thesis because eating disorders often begin with feeling the need to diet, especially when the purpose is changing one's appearance. ]]> 2022-11-22 16:50:28 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394449984 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394453324 The meaning of this quote is that athletes who compete in sports which are endurance-based or don't require a lot of muscle mass have an increased risk for eating disorders]]> 2022-11-22 16:52:52 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394453324 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394456741 This matters to my paper because I am focusing on eating disorders and body image in runners-- which is considered a lean sport in this case]]> 2022-11-22 16:55:27 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2394456741 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2400945853 I chose this quote because I continued to develop on the idea of the sport of distance running promoting a "lean" build in athletes]]> 2022-11-28 21:34:13 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2400945853 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2400945957 This connects back to quote 2 because the result of promoting a lean body type is the development of eating disorders in female athletes.]]> 2022-11-28 21:34:21 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2400945957 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2400946093 This idea relates to my overarching topic because ideas establishing a certain body type as "more desirable" is the main driver of body image issues.]]> 2022-11-28 21:34:33 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2400946093 valdezv4 https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2400946234 If I were to revise my essay I would first make develop each of my sections to be more detailed and include even more quotes from my sources. I would also go back and make my tone more assertive to show my stance on the topic. I could improve my grammar and word choice to better connect my evidence to my elaboration. Lastly, I would try to add another section to develop on how body image and eating disorders are different for women specifically.]]> 2022-11-28 21:34:41 UTC https://padlet.com/valdezv4/nu9spygogftc58ri/wish/2400946234