●Work in group in 15 minutes on Padlet

●Check your friend’s paragraph based on the rubric
MAKE ONE COMPOUND OR ONE COMPLEX SENTENCE 

Content:
Topic sentence: Too long
Supporting: Good supporting ideas and examples for history. Need more for philosophy
Concluding: Met the requirements
CC: Acceptable
Vocab: Have a variety of vocabulary, good
Grammar:  perfect

Compound/Complex sentence: Later, philosophy not only exposes you to become a great debater but also teaches you critical thinking, which is important for your learning in college.

Topic sentence: Clear topic, controlling idea.

Supporting sentence: 

Coherence: This paragraph is pretty simple, but clear and logical, but there should be more than 3 thesis statements.

Lexical resource: have, chat, is a risk

Should have more grammar.

Complex and Compound sentences: 

We have more knowledge and confidence exchanging with other foreign people. => SV, AND SV

We do not learn bilingualism, so we can go backward in society.

 

1)Content:
A.
- Clear content but not strong enough, develop more
- Paraphrase is not good enough
B.
- Few linking words
C.
- Concluding sentence is not relevant

2) CC: No coherent
3) Vocab:
    Hardly don't use new words
    Repeat some word too much such as country, history
4) Grammar: small mistake in grammar

Complex sentence: history is an indispensable part when talking about a country,  because it is considered the origin and culture of that country/ nation.

Supporting details 1: the Product will be known by lots of customers. The graduate reputation of company

Supporting details 2:  Surveys of young  workers  show that many are drawn to companies that are socially responsible

Main idea 1: Implementing social responsibility contributes to increasing profits for businesses.

Supporting details 1: CSR has a positive relationship with return on internment, assets, and revenue growth. CSR will form the basis of success for all the important business activities in the organization. on the one hand, CSR helps businesses reduce produce production costs through safe and economical production methods

Main idea 2: enhance the image of the companies

Supporting details 2: if the company wants to develop long-term, it must build a good image and quality to attract customers.

Concluding sentence: To sum up, every corporation should add CSR plans in their business because CSR is not only trendy but it also shows the ethics of companies.

Topic sentence: All companies should have corporate social responsibility

Main idea 1:Preserving and developing the company's cultural identity

Supporting details 1: For example, doing charity helps improve the company's image.

Main idea 2: Create favorable working conditions for employees

Supporting details 2: companies easily connect with employees

Concluding sentence: To sum up, all companies need to be socially responsible to employees, partners and shareholders.  

Topic sentence: I strongly agree with the idea "All companies should have corporate social responsibility"

Supporting details 2: A lot of skills can be developed when taking part in any kind of CSR activity and beyond this, employees are able to learn about potential clients, develop their communication skills and improve leadership

Concluding sentence: Finally, CSR is an important project for companies in today's growing economic sector

Topic sentence: I completely agree and support that all companies should have corporate social responsibility. It is extremely important for any business, for the following reasons

Main idea 1:  CSR attract talent

Supporting details 1: Because CSR can improve culture helps attract and retain top talent, improve employee engagement and morale

Main idea 2: Drive profitability

Supporting details 2: Customers tend to buy products from socially responsible companies.
Example: Starbucks corporation, after they ranked #3 in Fortune magazine's 2017 list of WMAC, their stock jumped a staggering 1,200 percent within 8 years. 

Concluding sentence: In summary, corporate social responsibility is considered as one of the most important factors for a business to help it survive and develop.

 

Topic sentence: In my opinion, I completely agree with the view that living in a big city is harmful to our health.

Main idea 1: The more time you spend in an urban environment, the more risk of developing a mental disorder

Supporting details 1: Many people spend a lot of time working and that causes lots of stress -> mental disorder

Main idea 2: Crowded in the city that makes environmental pollution like noise pollution, air pollution, water pollution.

Supporting details 2: Traffic jams because there are many vehicles -> air pollution, noise pollution.
Many industrial companies -> air pollution, water pollution.

Concluding sentence: To sum up, I strongly agree with the idea that dwelling in an urban area is not good for our health 

1 Topic: I actually agree with the idea that human’s health will be adversely affected when living in the city.

Main idea 1: Smoke and vehicle emission cause bad effect to our lung

Sup1:

Main idea 2: Electromagnetic waves cause bad effect to our brain

Sup2:

Main idea 3: City life can easily cause depression.

Sup3 : 

Conclusion: Living in a city is bad for our health and causes several serious problems, so we should know how to balance life to protect our health

I completely agree that living in a city is bad for our health for the following reasons. Firstly, electromagnetic waves have a bad effect on our brain. As Professor Andreas Meyer-Lindenberg's author explains, we all know that the risk of mental illness is higher for people living in cities, and Leszczynski's research shows that cell phone waves can damage the mobile phone. cells without heating them. Second, city life is prone to depression. Because living in the city, we will be negatively affected by financial, work and social relationships, so these invisible pressures will make us gradually become depressed. Finally, smoke and vehicle exhaust have an adverse effect on our lungs. According to the IARC, particulate matter (PM) is one of the main components of air pollution classified as a group 1 carcinogen in humans. On the whole, Living in a city is bad for our health and causes several serious problems, so we should know how to balance life to protect our health.

In my vision, I believe that living in a city could be considered bad for our health. First of all, smoke from gas burners or vehicle emissions cause bad to our respiratory system. A research of IARC shows that particulate matter from combustion is the main factor which causes air pollution classified as a group 1 carcinogen in humans. Otherside, children who grow up in heavily polluted areas are likely to suffer irregular structural changes in the nasal mucosa. This can cause weakened airways, lung infections and inflammation. Secondly, electromagnetic waves from digital devices cause bad effects to our nerve system. To prove that, Professor Andreas Meyer-Lindenberg explains that we all know that the risk of mental illness is higher for people living in cities or  Leszczynski's research shows that cell phone waves can cause cell damage without heating them up. And lastly, a life in the city can easily cause depression. Because there are many financial pressures, work, social relationships that adversely affect the spirit. Some research shows that urban areas account for a higher rate of depression than in rural areas. To conclude, living in a city is bad for our health and causes several serious problems, so we should know how to balance life to protect our health.