https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj Fourth Wall Productions. en-us 2021-07-21 09:13:02 UTC 2021-07-21 14:10:13 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657081496 Started with a relatable tone
Weird "kitne hi alag"
"trying" to showcase a defined Body Language but struggling in sudden movements
Lovely "sad ke kaale bhi hojate hai"

]]> 2021-07-21 12:40:57 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657081496 arsh7119jain https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657083624 2021-07-21 12:43:52 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657083624 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657083759

]]> 2021-07-21 12:44:05 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657083759 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657083819 Actions were driven by an awkward body.
The performance was dull because of no changes in the scene]]> 2021-07-21 12:44:11 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657083819 riyakirar25 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657083837 2021-07-21 12:44:12 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657083837 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657083931 2021-07-21 12:44:21 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657083931 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657084139 2021-07-21 12:44:42 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657084139 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657084192 A bit hesitant delivery - could be a character trait dont know, but still - more confident and open tone might help]]> 2021-07-21 12:44:47 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657084192 sidagarwal20004 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657084254 2021-07-21 12:44:53 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657084254 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657085391 Weird start
Sudden expression changes, movements seem awkward
Inactive hand in an uncomfy position
posture could have been improved
Rushed "now please listen to me"]]> 2021-07-21 12:46:36 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657085391 arsh7119jain https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657086982 2021-07-21 12:49:00 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657086982 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657087708 2021-07-21 12:50:06 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657087708 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657087780 the body movements seemed mechanical especially when he was leaning back]]> 2021-07-21 12:50:13 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657087780 arsh7119jain https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657087796 2021-07-21 12:50:15 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657087796 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657087803 Had a pattern in his voice, stress words looked rehearsed and fake. 0 points for posture. Felt like he's sleepng through the enitre convo with a couple of jumps in between. Could've been much better. Storytelling needs work.
Plus, the body and the voice were not in sync at all. Depicted different emotions altogether.]]> 2021-07-21 12:50:16 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657087803 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657088004 2021-07-21 12:50:35 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657088004 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657088276 The voice was pretty comforting, but the body was pretty stiff, hand movements were constant and distracting - should try to be more free body-wise ]]> 2021-07-21 12:51:02 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657088276 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657088378 Needs to observe a therapist. could do with a few more pauses. the storytelling does not need to be so animated. Body posture was not convincing.]]> 2021-07-21 12:51:11 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657088378 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657088784 2021-07-21 12:51:46 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657088784 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657090402 Foot movements looking artificial
slight disconnect between body language and dialogues, tone
heavy breathing appears, then goes away and then reappears
looking like a "monologue" (speaking out dialogues)
"is---ka kya karna hai"
pauses too long, feeling disconnected
unclear voice towards the end, message very unclear]]> 2021-07-21 12:54:22 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657090402 arsh7119jain https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657090548 Pauses are too long. Last bit not audible. Couldn't feel the tension in the situation the someone just has been killed]]> 2021-07-21 12:54:37 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657090548 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657090925 Need to work on the pauses. All are almost of the same duration. Great lighting and sound effects. Monotone.]]> 2021-07-21 12:55:06 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657090925 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657091421 Need to work on delivery, looks like she's trying tor recall dialogues. But great setting and lights. Unable to set the seriousness of the situation through acting]]> 2021-07-21 12:55:44 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657091421 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657092983  ]]> 2021-07-21 12:58:10 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657092983 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657093598 Wish you could've read more about laxmi's character. even the synopsis would've worked. It's the peak moment of the entire play and had a drastic character revelation. The voice was missing, the anger was missing, the unapologetic laxmi was missing infact. ]]> 2021-07-21 12:59:05 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657093598 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657094122 Very boring, same posture same tone no voice modulation no stress words. Couldn’t pay attention to the performance. Lines looked fake. Should try to be more free and take more chances with voice modulation and body movements ]]> 2021-07-21 12:59:37 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657094122 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657094405 should improve body language and tone.

]]> 2021-07-21 13:00:05 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657094405 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657094909 loved the tone and color of the setup. monotone made me detach from it for a while but other than a decent piece]]> 2021-07-21 13:00:44 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657094909 ishuppal99 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657095210 2021-07-21 13:01:03 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657095210 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657095254 Could have used her body better, the whole performance was very stagnant 
The facia expressions can be worked on as well.



]]> 2021-07-21 13:01:06 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657095254 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657096996 newspaper reading and laughing looks slightly artificial
Clarity in voice and dialogues is decent
echoed dialogues (repeated words/phrases) seem fake "upward" "reach out with compassion"
the shot in which you had your hands on the bed, should have been  the camera angle originally
mirror act looking good
Sometimes swift movements ; looks like you are actually applying make up]]> 2021-07-21 13:03:29 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657096996 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657098106 Can't see her entire face. Actions happenig on the left side of her face are not visible. 
Why not use the mirror during the entire performance?? can see the face better.
Could not see how the context helped the monologue. Good voice and voice clarity. ]]> 2021-07-21 13:04:50 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657098106 arsh7119jain https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657100310  what was there on the opposite side of the mirror?
Kept me engaged till the end though. Wanted to know what will the character do with the makeup
The voice was forming patterns but after a while looked like a character trait, some experimentation on the inflections could have looked better. Otherwise a decent piece.

]]> 2021-07-21 13:07:43 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657100310 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657101178 the pauses in the starting were very long and seemed unnecessary ]]> 2021-07-21 13:08:48 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657101178 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657101293 had clarity in her voice
good use of the mirror
camera angles could've been better
voice looked veryyyy animated, know that it was intended but still. 

]]> 2021-07-21 13:08:59 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657101293 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657101752 Performance wise - not much, just that the pace was too slow and the pauses were too long. Otherwise, couldn’t really understand the angling of the scene as well as who was the piece being addressed to. Also, the monologue lacked progression - same thing was being said through diff examples ]]> 2021-07-21 13:09:32 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657101752 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657101836 can improve on the energy, overall nicely done.

]]> 2021-07-21 13:09:39 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657101836 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657102475 honestly couldn't link the context, setup and the monologue. Expressions were good but again monotonous]]> 2021-07-21 13:10:23 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657102475 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657102953 Face reflected sadness, body displayed fear. Could have been in better sync]]> 2021-07-21 13:10:55 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657102953 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657105328 could have hidden book cover
weird after waking movements
unclear facial expressions
poetic delivery .. why? not clear ; is it mockery, or some other feeling?, it is looking more Ish centric than Sukhdev centric
need to work a bit on clarity
pauses?
even after the irregular poetic deliveries, it seems monotonous

]]> 2021-07-21 13:13:41 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657105328 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657108491 Most lines and pauses seem rehearsed. Also, to make the audience believe the performance is happening in the open ( outside) the actor needs to believe the same and could have been pulled of instead of giving a disclaimer. Stop interacting with props just because you had planned something. Also, do not have anything on set taht distracts the audience. During the entire performance I was wondering about macro and micro economics. ]]> 2021-07-21 13:17:13 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657108491 riyakirar25 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657114513 If it was supposed to be shot outside and you had to do it indoors ultimately, the adaptation could have been way better. It just seemed like a bedroom to me and since I could probably see the door behind you, at one point I thought you were talking to yourself in the beginning.]]> 2021-07-21 13:23:05 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657114513 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657115570 Bhai maza aaya]]> 2021-07-21 13:24:17 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657115570 arsh7119jain https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657115585 The use of sound was interesting. The monologue felt like a mockery throughout but didn't go anywhere from there. The voice had a lot of patterns. ]]> 2021-07-21 13:24:18 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657115585 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657115857 really really nice and interesting. The emotion that came out was somewhere between remorse and cunning pleasure.]]> 2021-07-21 13:24:39 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657115857 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657117340 again the surroundings didn't feel realistic to the characters demand. the rain probably spoiled that
Taking that out, expressions felt a bit forced at times but I enjoyed the piece ]]> 2021-07-21 13:26:20 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657117340 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657119248 Voice unclear in start
good tone 
evident clarity in pronunciation
decent facial expressions
tonal changes were great
could have been more impactful though
after the whole performance, my feedback remains the same except I didn't get exactly how to feel, it seemed there were too many feelings to absorb, wasn't communicated effectively, you never fail to amaze, keep going!]]> 2021-07-21 13:28:07 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657119248 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657119712 Great diction. Great voice modualtion. Pauses would make it a really really good monologue. Expressions 100/100]]> 2021-07-21 13:28:38 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657119712 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657119791 2021-07-21 13:28:44 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657119791 arsh7119jain https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657119958 Great command over voice and diction. Even though couldn't understanding the meaning of the words, wanted to listen more. The intensity of the tone could have been played with.

]]> 2021-07-21 13:28:56 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657119958 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657121179 Great scene, great movements, excellent character adaptation.
Emotions could've been better.
Edit: definitely looked like a father figure but couldnt match the vibe of a king or however fathers are supposed to be in the olden times. They are not much vulnerable, not much expressive, rather authoritative. 
Progression was missing imo
Numbness worked for me but spaces were missing. Anger in a father's voice was missing.

]]> 2021-07-21 13:30:05 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657121179 riyakirar25 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657121208 The speech was unclear, the tone at some places fell flat. The body language was overly stiff and didn't work for the character according to me. You have a very specific way of doing all the characters you take up. And you didn't step out of your comfort zone while performing this one. The diction was amazing. The expressions at some places were good. Very less efforts put in the production and the sound design. ]]> 2021-07-21 13:30:06 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657121208 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657121715 this was not definitely a man speaking, the voice was undertone ]]> 2021-07-21 13:30:26 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657121715 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657121853 Tooo goooooooood. Great control over body, voice - great stability. Amazing]]> 2021-07-21 13:30:34 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657121853 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657122266 the body language appeared more of a child than a lost warrior. Voice modulation was great but clarity of words was missing. ]]> 2021-07-21 13:31:04 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657122266 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657123348 The acting felt a bit mature and natural. So I appreciate that. I think I would've wanted to see this live]]> 2021-07-21 13:32:11 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657123348 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657123448 Good delivery, but seems confusing what the character is feeling

]]> 2021-07-21 13:32:18 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657123448 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657123664 Could've shown anger as well along with grief

]]> 2021-07-21 13:32:35 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657123664 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657125666 Isko pauses ki ek ek goli subah shaam agle ek hafte ke liye.

Needs to work on his body language. ]]> 2021-07-21 13:34:41 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657125666 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657126355 low voice, can't hear much
body language inconsistent (seems weird sometimes, okayish in general)
can't comment much on tonal differences due to feeble voice 
lacking energy
expressions decent]]> 2021-07-21 13:35:22 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657126355 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657128306 body language and energy, need more confidence, keep practicing


]]> 2021-07-21 13:37:26 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657128306 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657128830 needs to work upon his body language, his voice. Consoling and reaffirmation, both should be there. ]]> 2021-07-21 13:38:02 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657128830 arsh7119jain https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657128862 Could have pushed the emotional range a bit to show the frustration. The monologue otherwise has a good flow, had my attention throughout. Liked the contrast between the spiteful character and the not so spiteful looking actor playing the character.

]]> 2021-07-21 13:38:04 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657128862 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657128953 body language established the maturity and age of the character but it seemed a little off because he was loosing it sometimes. Change in voice was great but some modu lation could have make it better. 
Considering how far he reached from himself, it was definitely one of the best to watch.]]> 2021-07-21 13:38:10 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657128953 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657131572 A bit rushed, otherwise it was very nice]]> 2021-07-21 13:40:40 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657131572 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657132870 as most have pointed the body language was an issue. But a decent try!]]> 2021-07-21 13:41:54 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657132870 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657134227 2021-07-21 13:43:21 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657134227 riyakirar25 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657134579 Production - the teal and the faded pink of the curtain, the cool undertones do a good job at creating the space.

Sounds - The echoing voice somehow added to the feeling of being enclosed in a sterile space.

Performance - Seems like spoken word poetry.
The pacing of the dialogues is kinda working for me.
almost sounds like an actress from black and white english movie.

I know it's not a typical Sarah Kane piece, atleast not performed that way, but overall this sort of made the entire writing feel more layered and subtle which I personally liked. This piece definitely has potential. If you maybe work a little on your delivery of dialogues, this can infact be a good performance piece. ]]> 2021-07-21 13:43:43 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657134579 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657135859 good start
expressions good
some movements seem artificial and rehearsed
character's feeling being communicated]]> 2021-07-21 13:44:44 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657135859 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657137756 dramatic water drinking.

]]> 2021-07-21 13:46:28 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657137756 arsh7119jain https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657138351 Some actions like drinking water seemed unnecessary. The rushed delivery somehow sounds good. 
The setting complimented the tone of the monologue.Overall an engaging piece.]]> 2021-07-21 13:47:09 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657138351 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657139599 the colors were definitely speaking, apart from the delivery of dialogues that was a bit off , the performance seemed quite natural and was definitely a treat to watch]]> 2021-07-21 13:48:20 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657139599 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657140448 can be more creative with the movements and expressions, don't make it look like a slam poetry, good attempt still]]> 2021-07-21 13:49:12 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657140448 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657140486 She's known for her hysterics, for the drama that lies in every bit of her scene. Directly looking at the camera didn't work for me, maybe could've had some objects at your disposal to fiddle with, maybe roam around in your space, dance and whatnot.
otherwise great expressions, voice looked poetic but worked for me. needs to remove the monotone though]]> 2021-07-21 13:49:14 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657140486 riyakirar25 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657151910 Production and sounds - I didn't see a lot of efforts put in the sounds. The setting and the slight shabbiness to it again gave me at least some information about the character and the current situation, which was not expected by me.

Performance - It was a nice piece overall, things were synchronized pretty well. all the elements gelled in pretty well together. There are definitely places where you can work a bit. But overall I liked the piece. Your performance was the only one where I got the most information about the character in the given time. And you held onto the character pretty well. There were some spaces where you can work on the delivery and the monotone. But overall great efforts.]]> 2021-07-21 13:59:52 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657151910 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152133 best ..]]> 2021-07-21 14:00:03 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152133 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152161 2021-07-21 14:00:04 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152161 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152220 what a growth man! keep it up
great character adaptation, your voice smh didnt work for me but you were successful in creating the drama, the tension, basically everything that this scene needed. 
just work in your voice and you'll be good.]]> 2021-07-21 14:00:08 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152220 arsh7119jain https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152375 It was really good. Engaging. There were moments of silence which were lovely. Just wanted to keep listening. The heavy breathing seemed a bit off though could have found a better alternative to show anger or frutration

]]> 2021-07-21 14:00:12 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152375 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152572 The fact that not a single feedback was given between the performance is a testimony to how engaging the performance was. Absolutely brilliant. The breathing could have been toned down a little. same goes for the transition between the emotions as well as movement ]]> 2021-07-21 14:00:23 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152572 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152883 try to do something about the jaw man, overall it was well executed, and the door slam and screech was ninja

]]> 2021-07-21 14:00:45 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152883 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152976 The tough hindi words dint appear so while they were used because they were so excellently said and uttered. Transition from anger to vulnerability was really good. Loved it. The BEST...]]> 2021-07-21 14:00:54 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657152976 https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657154011 Felt a bit overdramatic initially but it evened down eventually. at a few moments it felt as if the actor was trying a bit too hard but yeah all in all I think it was a pretty good one ]]> 2021-07-21 14:01:37 UTC https://padlet.com/vnkbirla/nsnqjcpb4n7pzhzj/wish/1657154011