Edward M Peer Feedback 2022 - 2023 by Edward Marques https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 15:31:10 UTC 2026-02-25 21:39:35 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f60e.png In your memoir “My 11th Birthday” was a very happy and cheerful story that warmed my heart. The best part of your memoir was all the little details about your surroundings and your feelings. It all struck me in such a nice way. Another thing that I loved was when you first saw the hamster and called it a fluffy potato. I was trying to hold in from bursting out in laughter. It was so good. I also really liked how you were describing the hamster that made a lot of the difference. P.S love the name hammy. 29tprizgar https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv/wish/2357435568 2022-10-26 14:49:34 UTC https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv/wish/2357435568 29nbizzarro https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv/wish/2405419698 was amazing the inner thoughts were so good I liked the inner thought WHAT THE HECK! That was amazing.  Another thing that was good was the dialogue.  I think you did a good job.  However the part when you used dialogue like heeeeelp maybe don't use a lot of e’s.]]> 2022-12-01 16:35:46 UTC https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv/wish/2405419698 Ben Halpern https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv/wish/2486674979 Hi Eddie! I just want to start off by saying amazing job. One thing that I really liked was how you loaded up your essay with persuasive words such as monstrosity, ugly, and much more. Another thing I liked was how much detail and emotion you put in the essay. I really felt the emotion of all the kids in the essay. One wish I have is that I noticed you kept using some lines over and over again and I think you could have mixed it up a bit more. Over all great job and what and essay. ]]> 2023-02-17 18:44:42 UTC https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv/wish/2486674979 29eburke https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv/wish/2490394742 Hi Eddie, I agree that you could’ve done better, the speech, but other than that it was great. Grammar, emotion, and detail. It was all great.]]> 2023-02-21 23:46:00 UTC https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv/wish/2490394742 Cooper Balestrino https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv/wish/2523834047 Hi Eddy! One star I have for your essay is that your claim and sum up. You did a great job with your claim and you did good not using the exact same words for your 
sum up. I think this made your essay a lot stronger. Another star I have for you is your word choice is very good and it sounds like you put a lot of work into it. You elevating your word choice makes your piece so much better. Using words like burrowing, gigantic, etc was really smart, However, I wish you would have added more to your explanation. Your explanation needs a little more work but it is still really good. Overall, you did great!
]]> 2023-03-20 15:49:52 UTC https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv/wish/2523834047 Sadie H. Malone 29smalone https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv/wish/2526087444 Hi Eddie, I really liked how your writing was “simple.” I feel like it was simple and easy to understand. You didn’t use big words like Constantinople but kept it to easy little words. The message was right there for the reader. I also liked how you repeated the claim of going out of your comfort zone but not to the point where it’s annoying. It made sure that the claim stuck to the reader's head but not in an annoying way. Although you had an excellent writing piece, I wish you would put both parts of the timestamp. In a time stamp you are supposed to put the time it starts and ends. You only put the part it started. Apart from that you had a great piece. ]]> 2023-03-21 21:13:33 UTC https://padlet.com/29emarques/np8ll1z2nl5n2yuv/wish/2526087444