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However, you may provide feedback to more than one group if you desire. en-us 2020-04-22 17:59:09 UTC 2020-04-29 02:45:02 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/528827656 2020-04-24 16:32:28 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/528827656 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/528827918 2020-04-24 16:32:33 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/528827918 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/528885699 2020-04-24 16:56:19 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/528885699 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/528887076 2020-04-24 16:56:56 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/528887076 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/529250380 2020-04-24 20:08:01 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/529250380 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/529250908 2020-04-24 20:08:23 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/529250908 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/529251658 2020-04-24 20:08:52 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/529251658 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/529285525 2020-04-24 20:32:32 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/529285525 349167817 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/529568394 2020-04-25 02:55:20 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/529568394 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/530202789 2020-04-25 16:33:53 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/530202789 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/530329349 A wonderful and very relevant message! I very much enjoyed how you guys showed the audience how we can all use social media to put positivity in our lives during this difficult time. I also loved how you addressed all the ways we can still stick together with our peers and family. One very picky thing would just be to perhaps add some more visuals or some editing. But overall the message was clear and relevant and certainly something we all need. -Jordan]]> 2020-04-25 18:54:11 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/530329349 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/530561110 2020-04-26 01:37:06 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/530561110 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/530561225 2020-04-26 01:37:25 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/530561225 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531336198 I really liked the costumes and overall vibe of the short so far. Although, there is not much material I can give feedback for. Maybe try expanding or making longer scenes. ]]> 2020-04-26 15:26:54 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531336198 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531340968 I really liked the creativity of the editing and voice overs. Maybe next time try to articulate and make it more clear for the audience to know which characters are talking. I found myself getting lost between the detectives and the suspect. ]]> 2020-04-26 15:29:56 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531340968 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531418629 2020-04-26 16:18:28 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531418629 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531419720 It was off at some points, like after the line "Once Robin gets here we gotta move." It was a long pause before the next line. ]]> 2020-04-26 16:19:11 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531419720 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531424627 This is a minor thing for me, it may be because of my headphones but I felt like Xandra's/Kyle's voice were louder than everyone elses when they spoke. ]]> 2020-04-26 16:22:07 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531424627 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531426912 I don't need to say much here, I burst out laughing right after Shira said it]]> 2020-04-26 16:23:31 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531426912 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531427915 Kyle really just went off with all that emotion when he started talking about his timeline. Amazing.]]> 2020-04-26 16:24:06 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531427915 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531429406 Why is Lucas good at acting like someone is choking him/about to kill him? ]]> 2020-04-26 16:24:56 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531429406 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531433303 Adele does have a point. Why can't we all just be beautiful? ]]> 2020-04-26 16:27:09 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531433303 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531438637 Some of them are too quiet or off, like the gunshot that Kyle fired.]]> 2020-04-26 16:30:07 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531438637 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531440916 I really love this piece. There are a lot of great moments and the vibe is immaculate. With the resources that you all had and the time you took to film and edit, it was pretty good.]]> 2020-04-26 16:31:14 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531440916 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531480315 When Asia walked in like "O i mOp-ToP p a n t y w a i s t! GeT a GriP" I gained a little more life in my dying body so thank you for that.]]> 2020-04-26 16:54:56 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531480315 349339572 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531498265 One note about the scene where you were being Gordon Ramsey: you started laughing. It's natural, obviously as it's a funny scene, but the laughing took away from the moment. ]]> 2020-04-26 17:06:03 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531498265 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531544395 Literally the funniest thing I've seen in a very long time. It was very unique and enjoyable.]]> 2020-04-26 17:34:27 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531544395 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531546927 Xandra please look after your Walkman mkay ]]> 2020-04-26 17:36:03 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531546927 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531554155 - Few weird parts with the grammar in the texts
- I felt like it took away from the scene with the footage of that guy being in prison because it cut off your head when you stood up. It might've been my laptop but it took away from it.
- The editing was pretty good ]]> 2020-04-26 17:40:25 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531554155 adelelevyal https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531600440 - The acting was really good. I love that you were playing something that we haven't seen before from you.
- It was very easy to see your intentions as the character even without the visuals so good job.
- I really enjoyed the overall storyline to this piece.
- I really want to see/hear the perspective of the ex boyfriend.
- There is about a minute without audio at the end. ]]> 2020-04-26 18:10:58 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531600440 349931576 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531952818 Your idea of using stop-motion  is very ambitious and time consuming. I'm impressed that you chose this as your idea.
Overall I need a fully edited video to give proper feedback, right now half of the video are unlabeled which makes me really confused as to what's happening within the story. Plus there are no sound effects I don't know if you intended to not have any sound effect but it could help with the audience's understanding of the story.

]]> 2020-04-26 22:29:58 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531952818 349931576 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531953358 Very nice, overall the acting was very good, you tone is coming through to me that you are a completely different person. I can tell that it sounds kinda bitter. 
Suggestions: I found using talk to you soon right after saying "you probably don't want to talk to me" is kinda weird. Also, you should use your parent's phone to give yourself a bunch of voicemails, then record the voicemail person(?) and put it into the recording. Also the one min at the end is interesting you should probably take that out.]]> 2020-04-26 22:30:39 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/531953358 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/532136556 very cool concept and way of presenting! the acting is really good, I can pick up on your intentions on tone clearly. as for suggestions, there was one minute at the end with no audio, but I don't know if that was just an accident or not. ]]> 2020-04-27 01:38:53 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/532136556 adelelevyal https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/533599662 I agree with what Kyle said wholeheartedly. It was kind of hard to follow. Because of this I really wish we could see a plot structure or a script to maybe help it make more sense. It could also be helpful to label your scenes just to help the viewer in the pre editing stage. As there was no sound I can't really judge the acting aspect of it. But the stop motion looks very good from what I have watched so far. I am very excited to see what will come of your piece when it is fully completed.]]> 2020-04-27 14:14:07 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/533599662 340857879 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/533627253 Overall I think this is a great piece. your character had very clear intentions, the story line was easy to follow and you did a great job of changing your tone. I especially liked how awkward the endings of each message where. At the end of the piece there is a minuet of silence (don't know if that is on purpose) and I am really interested to hear the exes perspective of the story of their reaction/ response to the voicemails. One suggestion I have is to maybe try adding the voicemail beeps and such to make it sound even more realistic.

]]> 2020-04-27 14:21:57 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/533627253 340857879 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/533707144 Overall I think that this is a really cool idea that will be amazing when completed. Agreeing with Kyle and Adele, I think that the stop motion is a very creative idea and I am very impressed with how good it looks. However, The plot is very hard to follow, honestly I had no Idea what was going on. Also there is no audio or sound effects( I'm not sure if this is on purpose) but, I think that it would make it a lot easier to follow your story.]]> 2020-04-27 14:44:48 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/533707144 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/533738322 2020-04-27 14:53:38 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/533738322 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/533800655 2020-04-27 15:11:35 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/533800655 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/533808208 2020-04-27 15:13:43 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/533808208 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534192999 Agreeing with my peers, the stop motion idea is very clever and entertaining. However touching on what Shira said it was a little hard to understand what was going on and therefore the plot was kind of messed up for me. Maybe subtitles, a voice over, sound effects or a mix of them might help piece the plot a little better and help the watcher understand what is happening. I’m very excited to see the final presentation of this!

]]> 2020-04-27 17:15:11 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534192999 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534559448 Not going to lie, it was a little bit confusing trying to watch all of the different videos in order or not. only because rhwy were all submitted in random areas. I assume however, that that will be fixed for the final poduct. ]]> 2020-04-27 19:39:31 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534559448 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534565530 ok so i loved all the monolouges however it was really hard to hear you at some points. make sure that even though you're on a video you're still projecting]]> 2020-04-27 19:42:26 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534565530 catherine_clarke https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534818162
What is the working title? 

The stop motion is a really great demonstration of spacing. Make sure in your collaborative project portfolio to transfer staging language (i.e. you wanted the couch centre because it’s a dominate set piece where the “real” conversations happens.  Because of this, you balanced off the rest of the stage with the other furniture and stage dressings upstage left). 

Voice over? Sound effects?  Make sure that the audios are balanced and CITE every piece of music you use. 

Playing Cards - impressive stop motion.  Same thing - why is the bed upstage right (to facilitate the conversation and bring out the tension between the characters/heighten the emotion and atmosphere)

The car is brilliant! Nice work showing perspective. 

The car crash is also brilliant!  Be careful with your sound effects here - you want to keep the right mood/tension to keep driving your play forward. 

Cannot wait to see how the FaceTime calls bring together everything.  Keep in mind TEAM (Tension, Emotion, Atmosphere, Meaning) as you are putting together your final presentation.  Remember: everything needs to drive towards the storyline’s main message and meaning.  What is the lasting impact that you want to leave on the audience?

VERY GOOD WORK ON THE STOP MOTION!!!!!!!!!!!]]> 2020-04-27 22:09:20 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534818162 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534836124 I don't have much to add that hasn't already been said. I agree with the rest of my group that it looks really cool, but I would like to get a better understanding of what's going on or even who everyone is, because this is my first time seeing it, and I can't quite tell what's going on. I know adding voices would be a big undertaking, and probably impossible with this time frame and how it's already been filmed. The videos are very short, and thus you would have to talk really fast. A more detailed caption/title for each section might do wonders, as well as sound effects. The last thing, is that I don't know who the characters are. Is it important for me to know who everyone is? I only ask because I do see people's names in the titles. Is there any way to make the order to watch the videos in more clear? Or are they all going to be compiled into one video? I love the visuals and the idea, and I'm excited to see the final product!]]> 2020-04-27 22:23:07 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534836124 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534864273 I think I don't have much to say that hasn't been touched on already. I love the way this is presented, and I'm excited to see what happens next in the story. I really like Shira's idea of adding the beeps and such to really bring us into the world. If there is one main thing I would add, it would be that. I really like the acting so far, all the intention is very clear, and the pacing is great, it's nice to listen to. I really like the fact that it's audio only because these are messages on an answering machine because it makes the audience feel like they are part of it all. I imagine that minute of silence is a mistake, so that's just an editing thing. Can't wait to hear the final product!

]]> 2020-04-27 22:47:10 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534864273 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534903830 2020-04-27 23:22:31 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534903830 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534918410 * "contented" - read: "connected"]]> 2020-04-27 23:36:15 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534918410 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534989445 2020-04-28 00:49:54 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/534989445 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/535056807 I really like how everyone speaking used articulation and vocal quality in order to make their act more believable. This was evident when Lucas tried to confirm if Loki did something wrong or not. For something to work on, I believe that the story should be a little clearer as I did not understand the main goal or plot structure. One example being when Loki does something bad but I don't know what that is and what the significance is. ]]> 2020-04-28 01:46:24 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/535056807 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/535066512 I really liked the general melodramatic element and comedy used. One example would be the end where Harry was sleeping and casually confirms that he killed Gordon Ramsay. I believe that, if there is time, it may be beneficial to re-shot some of the scenes to create a bigger difference between the characters as sometimes it becomes difficult to keep track of who's who even when names are given. Another possibility would be to create a difference in the scenes depending on who's being seen using effects.

]]> 2020-04-28 01:54:48 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/535066512 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/535133943
     In order to build this project, this would not be possible without the devotion of my fellow peers.  Character building was a cool aspect of making this project as we were having to go back in time.  Making the characters was interesting as we had to gather or create a set of individuals that represented the different trends that people were following.  While I was listening to the audio my group had created, the communication towards other characters was very clear.  Also, through the audio I could see how much effort  was put in towards making this project. This is evident as the lines were strongly delivered and everyone had kept up with equal pacing. Keep up with the good work!]]> 2020-04-28 02:47:41 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/535133943 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/535180811 HAHA I love the concept! From the music, the stock photos, to the chef references, your piece is very funny and unique. Overall, I think it's a very enjoyable piece but I would suggest reading over the text to fix some of the grammar mistakes. I think some others already touched on this, but just try to keep a more serious tone while acting as Gordon Ramsey or the more "harsh" characters. 

]]> 2020-04-28 03:31:17 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/535180811 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/535200729 Overall, the piece was very fun and the audio quality and recording was amazing! Dialogue delivery was very good and I could hear each line very well. However, I would agree with Ada. I think you should try fitting your piece into a more clear plot structure to help the audience understand better and follow along. Good job!!!


]]> 2020-04-28 03:50:47 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/535200729 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/535205547 Well written, funny plot twist. Easy to visualize. I liked the idea a lot and the characters. Just a little bit confused about Brad, because if he loves Stephanie, he wouldn't "treat me like garbage" as she said. Or is she just saying that?]]> 2020-04-28 03:55:15 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/535205547 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/536995505 The concept of stopmotion

]]> 2020-04-28 16:53:12 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/536995505 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537352366 The Ideal of using the concept of stop-motion  is very  creative and ambitious. I think that the project is unique,  because  the  visuals were really innovative. I could see there a lot of effort being put in as the process to make each individual scene must have been time consuming.  
Feedback: 
However,   it was hard to follow up with what was happening in the story,  I think this could easily be fixed by including captions/ subtitles over a voice recording, and it would be cool if you added sound effects. Or even label a title for each scene. Lastly, I can't wait to see this groups final product. ]]> 2020-04-28 19:09:00 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537352366 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537548047 2020-04-28 20:48:11 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537548047 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537676592 2020-04-28 22:20:45 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537676592 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537885475 I really loved the audio because this is something that was different for many teens finding out, but we know it's for the better. One thing to say is, in the video where Sam was on the couch, you were staring at the camera a little too ]]> 2020-04-29 01:21:45 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537885475 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537913483 The costumes were amazing however the ending does seem to need a little more editing. But other than that, it was really good.]]> 2020-04-29 01:44:41 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537913483 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537914468 The voice over was really creative. I just think that now you need to make it clear for which character is talking because I was a little confused by that. ]]> 2020-04-29 01:45:33 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537914468 https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537981992 Really liked how every character had an individual issue like the doctor hasn't seen his kids in weeks or how the single mom is trying to take care of her son. It really touches up on every aspect of quarantine that we are dealing with now. Some improvements would be definitely volume some clips were quite quiet but thats an easy fix. Also I would say that perhaps add some different form of distractions, so every character has been distracted by someone doing something or speaking to them behind the scenes. Maybe switch it up and one character might get distracted by an alert on their "phone" or notice something out their window, just to add some difference or else it's kind repetitive. Other then that it looks super good so far.]]> 2020-04-29 02:41:31 UTC https://padlet.com/catherine_clarke/niid7b1ldfu3jke2/wish/537981992