FBLA Feeback & Questions by ZOE,MILLER

Excellent slides/work

jwalker413 — 2025-02-10 16:34:48 UTC

Thought your slides were on point! The colors and how you got there were great (development). I could understand what you were saying, but felt like you need to slow down when you speak. Make it sound more like you are explaining it to a friend for the first time, instead of like you are reading from a script. Super cute plushie! Great job on little to no filler words like "ummm" or "uhhh".

2025-02-10 16:37:10 UTC

I like how you didn't read off the slides exactly. You sounded like you knew what you were talking about! The presentation looked detailed and creative! The only suggestion I would give would be to slow your speaking and annunciate a little more. But I understand you haven't performed this in a while and that will come with practice! Love the conclusion!

2025-02-10 16:38:10 UTC

Colors were very engaging. I like how you didn’t read off the slides directly and have us some more information.

Mr. P

2025-02-10 16:40:42 UTC

Overall - fantastic presentation / project. I legitimately think you have a shot at winning this. I would like to try to encourage you to edit your PowerPoint a bit. I think you could use less text and more graphics, making a more alluring presentation. Otherwise, I think this is a championship level presentation.

2025-02-10 16:46:23 UTC

Absolutely hilarious! I love the creativity and editing.

Unfortunately there were a few points where it was hard to understand what was being said. Try to annunciate a little more.

I love the puppets! Bubbles is awesome.

The interviews were natural and fun to watch!

"EVERYBODY PANIC but remain calm. CALMLY PANIC AND EVACUATE"

Mr. P

2025-02-10 16:46:24 UTC

I am really blown away because I think this can be a state competitor as well. The creativity is off the charts here. The humor is great. Very well timed as well. There were a few times where you guys broke a little, and you kind of got caught up over your words, but man, this was solid. If you clean that up, you will be in competition in the state.

godslizard — 2025-02-10 16:47:08 UTC

It really looked and sounded professional! Your design was put together very well, and your explanation was thorough!

2025-02-10 16:47:10 UTC

That was so good! I loved the creativity! And Bubbles, raccoon, the scientist and PC were incredible.

2025-02-10 16:47:38 UTC

Your speech was awesome, incredibly informative, and the graphics were great. Slowing down a bit would make you a little easier to understand, and give your voice some more weight, but it's not detrimental to the presentation.

gilbe919_1 — 2025-02-10 16:48:11 UTC

This was a GREAT presentation. Comedic, educational, and it got the job done. The only thing I would say is just to annunciate a little more to make sure everything you're saying is clear. Loved the impressions and puppetry. great work!!

godslizard — 2025-02-10 16:50:50 UTC

Your delivery and transitions were done very well, sounding professional. You thoroughly explained the situation, getting feedback from other. I loved how you went to many different locations, and had many interviewees. It was so creative! I do agree that it may be better to annunciate when you speak, it was a little hard to understand things here and there ;)

2025-02-10 18:03:59 UTC

Your overall design was great! The presentation at the beginning felt a little rushed to me, the slides had a lot of words too, but the rest was fantastic! My only real feedback is the sample hat logo looked a little off center to me. The Instagram account is really good!

Great work!

mille352_1 — 2025-02-10 18:29:32 UTC

Great work on your presentation Maia! I liked how your slide background color matched the color of the Scranton Sharks. My only feedback is that in the beginning you said it was for 17+ but then later you said it was for 13+. I just found that part confusing. Also, when you give credit to what sources you used like Canva, maybe you could write the name underneath the logo? This might help because like the one on the end was just a logo but it did not say what it was on the logo. Very nice work on this project! I like the addition of the Scranton Shark plush! 😀

2025-02-24 16:37:14 UTC

Very great ! i love the confidence it really drew my attention to what you guys were selling i love it , i also love how it doesnt just benifit you it benifits the atmosphere also .

Flautistfox — 2025-02-24 16:40:54 UTC

Your PowerPoint was super easy to follow and had some great visuals. Your speaking was loud and clear, and I loved how you were able to smoothly transition between who is speaking! However, I would have loved to seen a hook or something at the beginning to really draw me in. It felt like we were thrown into the presentation quickly, maybe provide some background on the project? (Ex: Why made you decide to make eco-friendly spoons instead of something else?) Otherwise, you did a great job!

2025-02-24 16:42:06 UTC

I thought the presentation was very informative. For some reason when you spelled cheddar "cheter" threw me off a bit, but other than that it was very good.

love

2025-02-24 16:43:59 UTC

i loved your presentation and the theme. one thing that i would improve upon is that the flow of your presentation could be improved by maybe putting the information in the order of progress of the company

gilbe919_1 — 2025-02-24 16:45:55 UTC

The speaking and presentation itself were wonderful. I would consider revisiting the Powerpoint - adding graphics will strengthen the presentation and make it easier to follow along with.

On one of the spoons, cheddar was mispelled as "cheter". There were also some filler moments during speaking such as "umm" or "uhh". Try to minimize these as much as possible. But other than that, great work!

kysegina821 — 2025-02-24 16:47:52 UTC

Amazing job to the both of you! The work you put in was well and the color's were not overwhelming but very nice and subtle. I found you're presentation very well but I was left grappling with some questions about your product, why should we be buying this? Some questions that I had were, is it healthy for peoples teeth and mouth? What about people with braces would it be easy to eat with metal in ones mouth since it would have to be durable enough to not melt within our dish? And finally how accessible would this be? Other than my over analysis I found your presentation fun and creative the idea and drawings are amazing. Great job! :D

2025-02-24 16:48:16 UTC

I enjoyed your presentation. I would recommend showing different angles of the spoons so that the consumers could see the depth and relative size of the spoons.

2025-02-24 16:49:31 UTC

i really like the differnt websites telling us when events are starting it really caught my eyes and gave me a reason to want to continue being inerested

2025-02-24 16:50:13 UTC

I loved how informative the presentation was, as well as how easy to follow you made the powerpoint. This was, overall, spectacular. The only suggestion I can think of is to work on the amount of filler words and phrases in it. Great job!! *confetti*

2025-02-24 16:54:42 UTC

You sounded confident and clear! Great job! The website looks clean but detailed. I appreciate the arrow that brings the viewer to the top of the screen. The calendar is a great idea.

I feel the ending was slightly abrupt, maybe a "thank you, have a good day!" would aid in making the closure a bit more smooth.

Looks amazing and congratulations!

Rubric

2025-02-24 16:56:08 UTC

Sales Presentation Graded Rubric 1

2025-02-24 17:00:44 UTC

Judge 1 Feedback:

Tatiana stated that the spoons come in a paper bag, but Genevieve later said that the packaging was clear. I think she meant to say that the packaging is clearly labelled, but it was confusing to hear it said it was 'clear'.

Sales Presentation Graded Rubric 2

2025-02-24 17:01:50 UTC

Judge 2 Feedback:

While you mentioned future products for suggestion selling, you would ideally want to use existing products that you could sell in real-time. The two of you had noticeably different energy levels throughout the presentation, which can be a bit off-putting for your audience.

Website Design - Rubric & Guidelines

mcclu161_1 — 2025-02-24 17:50:24 UTC