Carly C. Google Sites Peer Feedback 2020 - 2021 by Carly Chichester https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-04 16:45:54 UTC 2021-06-18 14:47:49 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f30a.png Sarah Ward 27sward https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1067472300 I like your story "The Letter"
I like how you describe you feeling and thoughts about what your mom could be hiding. It helps me get more exited to read further into the story.
I also liked the intensity as your opened the letter. I kept wondering if you were even gonna open it. I understand your nevousness.
If i could change one thing about the story i would tell more about how it was your first audition so other readers could under stand it better. ]]> 2021-01-08 15:44:18 UTC https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1067472300 27mvalera https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1067837692 Your story, “The Letter” was very intriguing and descriptive. Something that I really liked about your story was how suspenseful it was. When you said “Opening the letter, I can make out a T, an M, and a P,” I start wondering what those letters mean and it makes me intrigued to read more. Another thing that I liked about your writing piece was your description. “The smooth paper felt like daggers sticking into my skin.” That sentence helped me feel what you were feeling. I cannot think of anything that I would change about the piece because I just really liked it!]]> 2021-01-08 16:59:16 UTC https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1067837692 Carly C. Small Moment Snapshot 27liannotta https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1074647030 The thing that I liked most about your piece is that your inner thoughts made me feel like I was in the moment. I also really liked your description in your piece. My favorites were your metaphors. Specifically, My heart was a beating drum trying to rip itself out of my chest so it won’t have to face the disappointment. I also really liked your ending. The last sentence was very powerful. I am going to be completely honest. I read through your piece a couple times and didn’t find anything that was significantly out of place, but I would have liked for you to be a little bit more specific about the setting in the beginning. Was the ground wet? Was it dry? Muddy? Overall I really really liked your snapshot piece.]]> 2021-01-11 15:54:21 UTC https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1074647030 Small Moment Snapshot https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1074907769 Your moment seems very important to you and is exciting and made me want to read more and more! I have come to a clear conclusion that you dance and as a fellow dancer I know how it feels to get your marks and level up. Your thoughts and emotions were detailed and priceless it escalated my interest! The thing I wished you would’ve dived in more on was the letter physically. Not just the texture knowing letters there is usually writing on it. Did that catch your attention? But overall great Snapshot! ]]> 2021-01-11 16:38:15 UTC https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1074907769 Persuasive Essay https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1509725458 Hey, Carly! I loved how detailed and truthful your essay was. You had the perfect amount of background information to help back up your points. Kids nowadays don't get enough sleep daily and it's important for schools to notice that it's affecting their students. Another thing I liked was how descriptive you were and your use of transitions. It really helped the sentences in the paragraphs flow and fit together. It made it easier to understand and worked very well. However, I feel as if the last couple of sentences to wrap up the paragraphs were not quite strong enough. All in all, great essay!]]> 2021-05-10 15:41:52 UTC https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1509725458 Sarah https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1513612863 Star-Carly, I really liked how you included and dug deeper into how lack of sleep can also affect not only your focus but your grades, because that is very true and is an important thing to remind people who you are trying to persuade. 

Star- I also really liked your transition words and word choice and how you used all different ones. It truly made the essay more flowy and more interesting and better. That is a great way to hold onto the reader!

Wish- I honestly didn’t have a wish because your paragraph was so great and persuasive.
]]> 2021-05-11 14:40:24 UTC https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1513612863 Persuasive Essay 27mvalera https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1513889254 Something that I really enjoyed about your piece was your introduction paragraph because I could really picture the scene with your word choice of ‘the beating sun’ and ‘sluggishly.’ When reading the introduction paragraph, I was  very interested. I also liked how you included so many transitions words in each part of the paragraphs. The transition words helped me to better understand it all and it helped with the structure. I don’t have a wish for you because I thought that the paragraph was very intriguing and well written! Great job!]]> 2021-05-11 15:34:14 UTC https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1513889254 Creative writing piece 27dharmer https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1614452682 Hey Carly! Your story was so good and I really enjoyed reading it! One thing I really liked about your piece was your top secret mission. The date and time is very funny and creative! I also really liked your log, I liked how the file was disguised as a rat with 3 legs. Another thing I really like about your story was how detailed it was especially when Samantha got sucked into the tv. “Unwilling to go down without a fight she starts to punch and kick at the cage door.” I thought that was a really funny and good line! I don’t have a wish for you, your story was so good, funny, and well written! I loved reading it! Great job!]]> 2021-06-18 14:45:23 UTC https://padlet.com/27cchichester/ndrva02c8i1h0f0i/wish/1614452682