https://padlet.com/23nsaeheng/n2eg7naklw4v Welcome to my padlet! Thank you for reading my writing pieces. Please leave positive and constructive feedback :) en-us 2018-02-01 18:18:57 UTC 2018-03-02 18:10:52 UTC hello@padlet.com 23kchiang https://padlet.com/23nsaeheng/n2eg7naklw4v/wish/236895487 Star- I really enjoy how well thought out your warrants felt, it felt as though you really thought about it rather than rushing through.
Wish- I noticed that before you got into the data you put a lot of in-depth info before it, this would be great for your warrants but I think that it would be better to not go too in depth before getting to your data.
Star- Your data was really well selected, it really fit your claims.]]> 2018-03-01 13:54:14 UTC https://padlet.com/23nsaeheng/n2eg7naklw4v/wish/236895487 23efang https://padlet.com/23nsaeheng/n2eg7naklw4v/wish/237434805 Hello Nikki! I really enjoyed your vignette. One thing that I liked was the lead. The sentence brought the reader in as it made me want to read more. I also liked your usage of GUMS. You correctly used GUMS and did not make many mistakes with it. In the future remember to show not tell and slow down time. As the story was narrated you should try and show what happened instead of just telling. Overall, you story was great!
- Emma F]]> 2018-03-02 15:17:52 UTC https://padlet.com/23nsaeheng/n2eg7naklw4v/wish/237434805 https://padlet.com/23nsaeheng/n2eg7naklw4v/wish/237526235 Hi nikki something I really enjoed you suspense narrative. Something I really liked about your suspense narrative was your word choice such as tinge. ]]> 2018-03-02 17:56:49 UTC https://padlet.com/23nsaeheng/n2eg7naklw4v/wish/237526235 https://padlet.com/23nsaeheng/n2eg7naklw4v/wish/237530840 Something I suggest for your suspense narrative is not to repeat your dialouge because it i very repeate so adding maybe a couple of sentences between so it's not as constant. Doing this will make your piece much better than it already is right now.]]> 2018-03-02 18:06:28 UTC https://padlet.com/23nsaeheng/n2eg7naklw4v/wish/237530840