Narrative Publishing Feedback by Peter Damroth https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3 Please write a star (great positive note) and a wish (something that can be improved) for your partner's published narrative. Make sure to put your name as the title. en-us 2019-10-09 00:00:30 UTC 2026-02-24 20:12:10 UTC hello@padlet.com Mr. D pdamroth https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395357552 Max wasn't here for the writing published piece. I'm looking forward to his fantastic work for the future.]]> 2019-10-09 00:05:50 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395357552 Mr. D pdamroth https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395357720 Jane wasn't here for the writing feedback day. I'm looking forward to reading her published narrative when she returns.]]> 2019-10-09 00:06:32 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395357720 Amara https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397431
Star: Maddie added a lot of great and interesting details.
Wish: I wish that she added more characters to her story.]]> 2019-10-09 03:04:20 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397431 Tanya https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397434 Her wish is to let me work on my spelling. 

The star is I have a lot of detail.]]> 2019-10-09 03:04:20 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397434 https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397462 Julian 
Star is that you have good talking parts
Wish is that you need more details ]]> 2019-10-09 03:04:27 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397462 Amanda https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397551 Amanda:my star  is that I like the dialogue.

Amanda:my wish is that i  would like you to add more detail to your characters of Who they are.
]]> 2019-10-09 03:04:48 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397551 Agnes and Emeline https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397585 Agnes and Emeline’s star for me is that I have lots of detail, and show not tell. Agnes said that my work was the best it could be, but Emeline said I might need to add more to the end.]]> 2019-10-09 03:04:57 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397585 https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397702 Jayden

My wish for you is to put in more details. My star for you is I like how you put a lot of thoughts ]]> 2019-10-09 03:05:22 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397702 Tommy https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397797 My star is I like how you used proper punctuation.

My wish is I think you can work on your hand writing ]]> 2019-10-09 03:05:48 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397797 https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397877 Evangeline 
Star: pictures in her mind
Wish: More details ]]> 2019-10-09 03:06:10 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397877 Benjamin https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397954 “My star for you is i like your dialogue.”
“My wish is that you could have used more understandable words.”]]> 2019-10-09 03:06:37 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395397954 Elsa https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398020 My star for her is that she puts a lot of  detail in her sense, my wish for her is to be more careful about spelling.]]> 2019-10-09 03:06:55 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398020 Callen https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398113 I like that you write capital letters on each character
I wish you can write lighter next time.]]> 2019-10-09 03:07:30 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398113 Bitchan https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398238 Your setting description is very good
But you should write your name on cover!]]> 2019-10-09 03:07:48 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398238 Austin https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398350 1. The star I had for you is that there are both boys and fish in your book!
2.the wish I had for you is That you need to replace fish for   Fresh water  dolphins!]]> 2019-10-09 03:08:31 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398350 Julie https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398394 My star is you give like description like he has red clothes green shorts 

My wish is to understand what you said.]]> 2019-10-09 03:08:45 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398394 https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398463 Bobby 
Ethan did a great job on his punctuation 
Ethan should improve on his organization ]]> 2019-10-09 03:09:06 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398463 Meimei https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398485 I like how you show not telled.
I wish you had more detail]]> 2019-10-09 03:09:15 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398485 https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398537 Senena 

Star: Jiah has long sentences and describes good 

Wish: I WHISH she would add more talking part.]]> 2019-10-09 03:09:33 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398537 Candace https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398625 My reading partner wish for me is add more detail, and star is I write it very neatly , easy to read and it’s very clear.]]> 2019-10-09 03:10:06 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398625 Jayden https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398852 Star:easy to picture 
Wish:better spelling(you can use iPad to help with the spelling)]]> 2019-10-09 03:11:27 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398852 Bitchan https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398913 You have good sound words and next time you could have neater hand writing and spelling.]]> 2019-10-09 03:11:54 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395398913 Kailin https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399057 Jayden my star is that you made good  dialogue. My wish is can you next time go slower  to make handwriting neater ]]> 2019-10-09 03:12:39 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399057 Joon https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399100 Star: I like how you have many dialogue.

Wish: I think you can work on your punctuation.]]> 2019-10-09 03:12:57 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399100 Maddie https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399106  Star:I liked how you added entertaining dialogue 
Wish:Maybe you should work on handwriting]]> 2019-10-09 03:13:00 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399106 Jake https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399316 You are a very good writer you just need to work on more details 
My star is you have a lot of action ]]> 2019-10-09 03:14:15 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399316 Meimei https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399320 I like how you had lots of details, and I could really picture the scene.
I wish you had better spelling. (No offense)]]> 2019-10-09 03:14:20 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399320 Bitchan https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399473 I like your story starting with the dialogue
Next time you could skip line between paragraphs ]]> 2019-10-09 03:15:20 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399473 Kylene https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399551 I really like that you make the reader have a picture in there mind, my wish is that next time people talking need to skip a line


]]> 2019-10-09 03:15:41 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399551 Miranda https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399668 star:show not tell 
Wish:I don’t know what you meant ]]> 2019-10-09 03:16:21 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399668 Marlee https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399669 1.My star for you is that you had a lot of good details !
2.my wish for you is to work on your grammar!]]> 2019-10-09 03:16:23 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399669 Ruby angkumn https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399953

Star is funny and I can understand how you feel.
Wish is better spelling and better detail.
]]> 2019-10-09 03:17:57 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395399953 Meimei https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400000 I like your plot
I wish your story had more detail, and  maybe make it longer.]]> 2019-10-09 03:18:17 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400000 Meimei https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400091 I also agree with Bitchan, skip lines when a new person speaks.]]> 2019-10-09 03:18:51 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400091 Jiah https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400412 Star: you have lot of details and your story is very interesting 

WHISH: you will add more dialogue in your story

]]> 2019-10-09 03:20:22 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400412 Aidan https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400421 A star for Maddie is that her handwriting is fantastic!
A wish is that she could start to writ from the far left.]]> 2019-10-09 03:20:23 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400421 Maddie https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400456 My wish is that you worked a little more on your spelling and your star is that you added very much needed details.]]> 2019-10-09 03:20:29 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400456 https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400485 Ethan 
I liked how much humor you added
I think you should improve your organization ]]> 2019-10-09 03:20:38 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400485 Marlee https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400557 Star:good  description 
Wish:  grammar  ]]> 2019-10-09 03:20:57 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400557 Joon https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400653 Star: I like how you added lots of dialogue.

Wish: I think you can work on your hand writing.]]> 2019-10-09 03:21:24 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400653 Bitchan https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400657 I like your name creation and skipping line when new person is speaking 
I wish you could have more feelings to characters next time 

]]> 2019-10-09 03:21:25 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400657 Max https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400759 Star is you have good details  Wish is you can do more spelling ]]> 2019-10-09 03:22:01 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400759 Miranda https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400887 My star is that you start with dialogue 
I wish you put your name!!]]> 2019-10-09 03:22:39 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400887 Jayden https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400945 My star is that you put it on the right place
My wish is skip a line]]> 2019-10-09 03:23:04 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400945 Aidan https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400981 Star:easy to picture
Wish:less dialogue ]]> 2019-10-09 03:23:17 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400981 MeiMei https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400988 I like how you described everything with great detail.
I wish that your handwriting is neater, no offense.]]> 2019-10-09 03:23:20 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395400988 Kylene https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401051 like that you have good describe words, I wish that you have more thoughts.]]> 2019-10-09 03:23:41 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401051 Kailin https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401204 Ashely my star is that you made some good  Punctuation. My wish is that can you next time make your handwriting  neater]]> 2019-10-09 03:24:24 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401204 Aidan https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401265 A star for you is all your dialogue.
A wish for you is that you don’t have any punctuation so please improve.]]> 2019-10-09 03:24:54 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401265 Ammy https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401331 I think the star is that I like how  you start the story with dialogue and how you showed the characters feeling  , and wish is that I hope you can write a bit clear.]]> 2019-10-09 03:25:18 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401331 https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401337 Star is you have details Wish is you can do make your story  better ]]> 2019-10-09 03:25:21 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401337 https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401445 Wish: You should work on your grammar 
Star: You had good handwriting ]]> 2019-10-09 03:26:09 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401445 Ethan https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401471 I liked how clear you made your lesson 
I wish you added more detail ]]> 2019-10-09 03:26:18 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401471 Jiah https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401508 I like how you use interesting dialogue 
I WHISH you would add more]]> 2019-10-09 03:26:33 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401508 Bitchan https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401516 I like your creativity 
Wish is that you can write neater]]> 2019-10-09 03:26:37 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401516 https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401534 Jake 

My wish is to have more details 
My star is that you have a good introduction ]]> 2019-10-09 03:26:45 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401534 Marlee https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401547 Star :organization 
Wish:hand writing ]]> 2019-10-09 03:26:49 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401547 Joon https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401556 Star: I like how you did lots of show not tell

Wish: spelling ]]> 2019-10-09 03:26:51 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401556 Maddie https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401673 Star:the bigger words Makes me feel excited]]> 2019-10-09 03:27:33 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395401673 Mrs. Madonna https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395402413 A ⭐️  is that you did a nice job of showing the interaction between you and your family when you couldn’t find your car.

A wish is that you carefully reread your story to be sure you don’t have extra words or missing word. This will help your story make more sense to the reader. 

Great job!]]> 2019-10-09 03:31:38 UTC https://padlet.com/pdamroth/mvaguxnpy4b3/wish/395402413