https://padlet.com/26rlopez/mugz9uxr1av8 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 16:40:26 UTC 2019-12-09 16:09:37 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f94a.png 26elamberti https://padlet.com/26rlopez/mugz9uxr1av8/wish/420849486 as I slammed my locker closed as I thundered down the dark and musty stairwell. I smiled maliciously as I weaved in between one person after another. As I sped down the hallway I heard my pencils shake with each step, and the cold hardcover books bounce off the side of my hip. As I walked into the science room, I looked for Jake but spotted him nowhere. I walked to our usual table and setdown my binder and textbook. I looked around and saw shelves of tall, thick science textbooks. There were metal cabinets for beakers and glass containers with a worn-out sign. I told our science teacher about what we were making and sat down. As I waited, I watched as Grayson entered the room and immediately shot me with his most evil smile and sat down. 
I love how you described the setting. I could really picture what was going on in this scene. I remember the first time I read this part of the story and I didn't get what was going on and now I can picture the scene perfectly. I would change how you just wrote that you talked to the teacher. I would bring us into the conversation with the teacher. Other wise I LOVE your story.]]> 2019-12-06 16:34:04 UTC https://padlet.com/26rlopez/mugz9uxr1av8/wish/420849486 26kdieujuste https://padlet.com/26rlopez/mugz9uxr1av8/wish/421664746 I love your story! I feel like your beginning made the reader (me) wonder what was going to happen when the two characters first introduced would meet. Would she get into an argument with him? Would it be the other way around? Would he do something to provoke her? What would happen next is all I thought and that was running through my head when I was rereading my story. The writing sort of confused me while on the other hand, I understood the concept of your piece. I recommend that you don't have so many unexpected stops in your story. For example, when you kept mentioning brand Addidas. I felt like that wasn't necessary for the beginning so personally, I would edit it out.  Other than that little part, I felt that your story was, (just simply put,) OUSTOUNDING, AMAZING, PERFECT.]]> 2019-12-09 15:50:04 UTC https://padlet.com/26rlopez/mugz9uxr1av8/wish/421664746