https://padlet.com/26elamberti/mprjf4v18cn Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 16:40:26 UTC 2026-01-19 21:24:59 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f3d0.png https://padlet.com/26elamberti/mprjf4v18cn/wish/421695931  One Thing that I really liked about your story is how you described how chloe felt always being lila´s shadow. Like when you said chloe was like the minions and lila was drew. In addition i really liked how you explained how chloe and lila met, also how it was almost like a flash back too. One wish I have for you is that I still think that you could have put more detail in the beginning of your story when you were explaining how chloe´s room looked like.]]> 2019-12-09 16:34:15 UTC https://padlet.com/26elamberti/mprjf4v18cn/wish/421695931 https://padlet.com/26elamberti/mprjf4v18cn/wish/421703625 I really liked how you had really described what you main character in the beginning and really used sensory language throughout the story. I really like that you did this because the description really caught my eye kept me hooked onto the story. Not only did it help keep the reader hooked, but it also gave me a good picture of what her room looked like. It also made the story easy to understand for the reader and slowed the story down so that the reader could process what was happening and what the main character is thinking. I also really like that you had also used figurative language in your hook because it had really shown the intense heat of the pavement and also had given a funny connection. I really liked your story but, my 1 wish would be that you don’t explain why your character says something in a certain way or acts a certain way. I suggest this because when you explain why your main character said something a certain way or acts a certain way or feels a certain way, it ruins the flow of the story and makes the reader less interested in what is happening in the story. Other wise i love your story and keep up the good work.

]]> 2019-12-09 16:46:01 UTC https://padlet.com/26elamberti/mprjf4v18cn/wish/421703625 26vvirga https://padlet.com/26elamberti/mprjf4v18cn/wish/422274954 I love how in your story you describe her words so much. Your speaker tags are very descriptive so I can really picture it in my mind. I also love how you describe Lila’s past with your main character. One thing that that you could improve is explain more of what happened with Lila. Besides that, your story was awesome!]]> 2019-12-10 16:54:39 UTC https://padlet.com/26elamberti/mprjf4v18cn/wish/422274954