Best bits by NWebster https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative Excellent writing en-us 2017-11-16 11:22:18 UTC 2017-11-16 11:44:24 UTC hello@padlet.com Name nwebster2 https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207602991 Post something excellent from your writing and explain why it's effective.]]> 2017-11-16 11:23:35 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207602991 Bessy https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207603927 I am proud of how i improved use of semi colons in my writing. This creates tension and makes my writing more fluent. 
"It wasn't darkness this time; it was a pack" 
This shows how they do not come across wolf packs in their normal missions and creates tension as the reader wants to find out what happens next.]]> 2017-11-16 11:26:57 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207603927 Perran 16pburley https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604006 Without anything but 5 bottles of water and 5 cans of soup, we were stranded in the middle of this unknown forest. 

I used this complex sentence to add effect to what has happened and it shows the background of what has happened ]]> 2017-11-16 11:27:10 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604006 Abbie Downing 16adowning https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604027 My dog was like a everlasting gobstopper, never tired and always happy. This is effective because it compares something to something else.]]> 2017-11-16 11:27:15 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604027 Louis https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604072 I am proud of my variety of sentences. For example, I used short sentences for tension and longer for description and to evoke emotion.

Almost sure a blood thirsty creature would lurk at my feet. I almost laughed. It seemed stupid.]]> 2017-11-16 11:27:24 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604072 Zak Clemens https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604077 I am proud with my use of a semi colon.
I pulled at the barbed wire frantically; it wouldn’t break. ]]> 2017-11-16 11:27:26 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604077 Tallulah https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604088 I like my use of short sentences to create suspense and tension. “I was walking. Just walking. I could smell the pungent air. I could feel the hot gravel underneath my feet. It was gone. Everything. Everyone.”]]> 2017-11-16 11:27:29 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604088 Hugo https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604225 he grinned a warm welcoming smile. MY TING]]> 2017-11-16 11:27:58 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604225 Josh https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604238 I like my use of my similie:

Living this life is like hell on earth...]]> 2017-11-16 11:28:00 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604238 Millie https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604256 I used a range of sentence types. It helped to build up the tension in the writing. 

I was walking down the path. I could see something in the distance. What was it? I started walking at a faster pace. As I got closer, I could see that it was a small brown and black furred animal. I ]]> 2017-11-16 11:28:03 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604256 Harry Rogers https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604298 Devastation, hunger, fear tore us apart from within. Starvation fed their minds with anger as the captain’s plan/idea was short lived. 

This is effective as it uses descriptive words to create an atmosphere and makes the reader interested in how this links to the story.]]> 2017-11-16 11:28:14 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604298 Annabelle 16abull https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604370 I used a veriety of sentences...it was over= simple]]> 2017-11-16 11:28:28 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604370 Lana https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604402 I whimpered - I dared not leave his side even though he could no longer defend me, his cap lay by his cold, pale face, I picked it up and held it. Exhausted I lay down, ignoring the pain that suddenly struck my side.]]> 2017-11-16 11:28:35 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604402 Zoë https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604463 I use a variety of setence lengths, this particular example had repetition;
That he didn't have to live without me. That he didn't have to suffer. That we would be soon reunited once again.]]> 2017-11-16 11:28:45 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604463 Kaiya https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604480  I howled but I felt like nothing could hear me and then my owner said to me go. go and stay safe and here is my hat it will protect you...
I'm proud of this it brings out the tension and suspense and leaves it on a cliff hanger. What is going to happen next?]]> 2017-11-16 11:28:49 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604480 Zelie 16zwilkes https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604511 Trucks were pushing past us on the dusty lanes ; luckily i had my hero by my side.
( the dogs hero is its owner ) this is showing that he is scared but the soldier has protected him before so he will now.]]> 2017-11-16 11:28:55 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604511 Arthur https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604516 I lied my use of narrative and my short and long sentence to create affect
"Shh" hissed his wife 
This gives description of how she spoke giving them a realistic feel

]]> 2017-11-16 11:28:55 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604516 Otis 16orobertson https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604586 Brad was the first to go. In a bolt of panic he sprinted for cover, oblivious to the soggy wet soldier who shot him twice in the back the force jolting his body forward. 
 
I have used a wide range of discription to add emotion and effect 

]]> 2017-11-16 11:29:09 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604586 Zander This was a good part of my quick story I like the discription:I hesitantly glanced towards the jumbo cloud that filled the beaming blue sky. My heart sank, all those innocent lives, vanished. I saw the blast quite a time before I heard it, perhaps 10 seconds after. At least I was an sufficient distance away from the blast, but even so, I started to run. Thousands of deaths. Innocent lives. These two phrases ran through my mind, almost as fast as I was running. My vision was a blur; I couldn't concentrate on moving my body properly. 16zhughes https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604615 2017-11-16 11:29:14 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604615 Abi 16aperrett https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604647 My mission had just started......
This is good because it gives tension and it is a good use of ellipses also it draws in the reader as it starts on a cliffhanger and it also draws them in because they want to find out what the mission is and why he went on it.]]> 2017-11-16 11:29:22 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604647 Kensa https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604650 It had writing on in black ink on the top; i couldnt read it.]]> 2017-11-16 11:29:23 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604650 Alice-I am proud of the range of sentence lengths 16aarcher https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604691 2017-11-16 11:29:31 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604691 Lily https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604807 Liked my use of repetition of “ he was dead”. This helped to build up a sense of tension ]]> 2017-11-16 11:29:52 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604807 Will https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604895 Just then i heard a rustle in the leaves and a metal ball landed next to me. It looked fun to play with but i was wrong seconds later something clicked and that was it.... they had found me.

This is good because it creates a emotianal image


























]]> 2017-11-16 11:30:13 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604895 Elizabeth https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604908  I can feel my heart dropping to the ground and shattering into millions of pieces. 
I like my use of description to describe how the character is feeling.]]> 2017-11-16 11:30:17 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604908 Erin Devery https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604910 I like this piece of writing becuase I think I have used different uses of adjectives.

It all ended.My life.My love.My everything. I have nothing.
He is still there, at the back of my mind, it’s, it’s like I can almost hear him, but I can’t see him. 
My ears dropped and so did my tears.A dark shadow loomed in my soul.Nobody could even see my hurt.I felt alone.He was my only friend, my only everything.My only owner
]]> 2017-11-16 11:30:17 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604910 Merryn 16mgrosvenor https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604950 He was never afraid of dying unlike us. Emphasises my character and how brave he is. ]]> 2017-11-16 11:30:25 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604950 Osaka https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604955 I am only seventeen and i have been ordered to assasinate the german leader; Arnold Spasticken who is known by the other german leaders as Big Shaq. 

I think this is good because the semi colon tells us more about what is happening.]]> 2017-11-16 11:30:26 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207604955 https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207605205 mooo]]> 2017-11-16 11:31:27 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207605205 MOlly https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207605301 It was the only way...]]> 2017-11-16 11:31:50 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207605301 https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207605304 hello ie it me your looking for skeerat ta tat]]> 2017-11-16 11:31:50 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207605304 Kairi https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207605326 He was dead. The one person I loved was gone. 

I think this is effective because it starts at the beginning and shows how it happened.]]> 2017-11-16 11:31:56 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207605326 https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207605373 The poor man beliving he could out run alpha; he must be mental.

I used this because ]]> 2017-11-16 11:32:08 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207605373 stawbees https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207605475 2017-11-16 11:32:34 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207605475 https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207606324 Peanuttttttt Butterrrrrr]]> 2017-11-16 11:36:00 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207606324 https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207606352 The poor man beliving he could out run alpha; he must have been joking.

I think this is effective because it shows the power of alpha and that the dog could out run anyone.]]> 2017-11-16 11:36:07 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207606352 https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207606397 sunshine,lollypops and wainbows]]> 2017-11-16 11:36:21 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207606397 16aarcher https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207606959 2017-11-16 11:38:39 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207606959 lila https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207607197 His eyes. His beautiful, sad, brown eyes that stared into my broken face.  
I am proud of this sentence because it is very descriptive and shows how much pain she is feeling. This creates sympathy for the reader and makes the curious for they want to know why she is so upset]]> 2017-11-16 11:39:42 UTC https://padlet.com/nwebster2/creative/wish/207607197