https://padlet.com/27edoran/mif3ztpk0tzxuphx Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-05 18:20:55 UTC 2025-10-07 20:38:21 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-uploads.storage.googleapis.com/925275924/5a749cd9d1e5048babb3e7bae33805a7/media.jpeg https://padlet.com/27edoran/mif3ztpk0tzxuphx/wish/1074934926 I like the way you described what was happening I felt like I could really understand the way you were talking about looking out the window at the tree. It was very descriptive.
I also liked the way you ended it by tying it all together and saying what you learned from it.
One suggestion I have is to add less dialogue, including thoughts.
Emma ]]> 2021-01-11 16:42:39 UTC https://padlet.com/27edoran/mif3ztpk0tzxuphx/wish/1074934926 27klowe1 https://padlet.com/27edoran/mif3ztpk0tzxuphx/wish/1513684692 Hi Evan! A huge strength in your essay were your anecdotes. I thought they were very emotional. I agree with you on this topic but If I didn't these anecdotes would convince me. Your anecdote was not only convincing but realistic and relatable to a lot of teen girls. To add on another strength was your ending. Your ending quote was powerful and compelling. I also like how you compared to future. You told us what the world would be like with uniforms and without and I thought that was really good. This essay was great however I wish that you had differed your language in your body paragraph so It didn't seem repetitive. The wording was great but it came in a lot and made the body paragraph too similar. All in all I really enjoyed your essay.]]> 2021-05-11 14:54:39 UTC https://padlet.com/27edoran/mif3ztpk0tzxuphx/wish/1513684692 27klowe1 https://padlet.com/27edoran/mif3ztpk0tzxuphx/wish/1614740066 Hi Evan!! Your piece was great. One star is that you made your story involve park middle school. I think as a reader it pulled me in more and made me so invested. Another star is the detail you put in your story. It was so captivating. I liked the idea of your peice revolving around a specific event. I loved the story but a wish from me is that you added more about why they were hiding it etc.  would have liked to see a backstory of the gum monster. I loved your peice!!]]> 2021-06-18 17:41:32 UTC https://padlet.com/27edoran/mif3ztpk0tzxuphx/wish/1614740066