Ethos Check Up! (7th) by Marisa Pribnow https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9 Copy and paste ONE (two max) example(s) of using ETHOS in your persuasive letter. I will respond to you by tomorrow before class with feedback! en-us 2019-02-25 18:02:30 UTC 2019-02-28 20:11:59 UTC hello@padlet.com Breckin Killingsworth https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589639 But do you want the kids at this school, to be the best at everything ever?

***Breckin, I love the tone that you are using in this sentence. It is straightforward and stern. I am searching for more uniqueness and emotion in this sentence though. I cannot remember what your topic is at the moment; however, I do know that it was something that required a lot of power to be heard. Please expand the vision of this statement with more imagery, description, and colorful word choice. I see that you are trying to use the third strategy of ethos in this statement; therefore, it is important to be a strong advocate for the kids you are speaking on behalf of. Let me know your thoughts!***]]> 2019-02-26 19:17:08 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589639 Phat Nguyen https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589681 I wanted to write this letter because I have close friends and relatives who are negatively affected by tobacco, and thought that restricting the sale of tobacco products would help relieve the issue of tobacco addiction, and it’s other negative effects.

***Phat, this use of ethos is very close! You present valid discussion by bringing up the relatives that you are close to and the negative effects it may have. I think the direction this piece needs to move in would be using the third strategy: advocating for others showing your good character. This would be a perfect place to show that you truly care about your family/friends, and you want them to quit smoking. Keep the sentences that you have; however, add another layer to this by mentioning why are you so concerned about them and why you want to help them in the long run. Let me know if you need assistance with this in the future!***]]> 2019-02-26 19:17:12 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589681 Brynna Madison https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589693 I was born and raised here in Lincoln. Over my years of growing up in Lincoln I have done a lot of fun activities like going to The Lincoln Children’s Zoo and the  Lincoln Children’s Museum .

Now that I am in high school, however, I am finding it harder to do fun things with my sister and friends. 
***Brynna, this part of ethos is very close! I can see you are trying to make connections with your childhood and being someone who is speaking from experience, which is exactly what you should be doing; however, I am looking for another layer. It might be a good play on words to use descriptions to describe your time at the Children's Museum/Zoo. Showing that these places are more fit for children will show that there is a lack of activities for teenagers. It may also be a good idea to dive into what an effective hangout space for teenagers would be. Your ethos is present; now take it to the next level in terms of pathos in this part! Let me know your thoughts!***]]> 2019-02-26 19:17:13 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589693 Elijah Workman https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589699 According to the article “Practices for the use of technology in high schools: a Delphi study” by Kevin Clark, They state “While technology is making its way into schools, it has not had the impact as hoped for. Reasons for this lack of progress may include: limited up-to-date hardware and software, limited infrastructure and technical support staff, ineffective integration of technology into curricula, lack of compatibility among computers, and lack of staff development.” This speaks for itself. 

***Beautiful use of citations to help show you are able to gather sources/information when you don't have the answers yourself!***

If I had access to youtube on my chromebook I would 100% take advantage of it. 

In all of my classes I still have a hard copy of a textbook. I still have paper assignments and I still have to use pens and pencils. 

***Eli, these examples are very close! You provide a lot of valid examples to use when talking about your experience; however, I am missing the heart, originality, and personality. In particular, the third paragraph you provide in this post could be tied more closely with the second paragraph you post. Talk about your frustrations with still having to use paper/pencil on a daily basis. How does it affect your ability to rise to your potential? Keep in mind of the definition from our guided notes for ethos. Always have those three steps when you are using the first strategy. The bare bones here are great; now add to it! Let me know if you need assistance with this!***
]]> 2019-02-26 19:17:13 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589699 Hussein https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589724 I know that reading book and reading in general is really fun, in my experience reading is really important and here is why I am writing to you to express my thoughts on reading, I am hoping that I change people’s minds on reading and how and why we should read on constant bases. 

By reading, you are painting those pictures of the story in your mind. Books can take you anywhere you want to go.
***Hussein, this piece of writing is very close in terms of using ethos! I see the use of "you" quite a bit in this part. It is important to keep "ethos" focused on you or the use of "I" as your main pronoun. By switching "you" to "I", you will be demonstrating and showing that you have lived these experiences as the person who reads. Think of this as if you are trying to tell a story about your experience with reading and being able to paint the picture. Also, "painting the picture" as a metaphor can be diving into more cliché writing; therefore, consider coming up with a phrase that is original but means the same thing. Let me know your thoughts!***]]> 2019-02-26 19:17:16 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589724 Seth McKeighan https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589755 That’s great but 70% of homicides by guns were from handguns. The major shooting were from assault weapons but more deaths are from handguns.

***Seth, this piece of ethos is very close! I see that you are attempting to use other sources to show you are someone that knows how to find answers; however, I am missing the citation of this statistic. It is important to mention who the author /title of the website. Also, it may be a good idea to clarify the second sentence just a tad. Consider saying, "Even though the media broadcasts that the mass shootings are caused by assault weapons, one could argue that, statistically, handguns are liable for the majority of homicides in the United States." Let me know your thoughts on this one if you need a little bit more assistance!***
]]> 2019-02-26 19:17:20 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589755 Madison Dahlstrom https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589816 According to a Scholastic, inc article, “Some sea creatures are fooled into thinking microplastics are real food. They stuff themselves with it, to the point that they don't have room in their stomachs for any actual food. They die from starvation as a result."

***Madison, well written! You have hit the nail on the head in terms of using the second strategy for ethos. The only correction I would make is using the author's name and webpage title instead of the company's name. The reason is because Scholastic is a huge company with a huge audience to cater to. By using more specific information, it will allow your audience to grab onto the information better.***]]> 2019-02-26 19:17:26 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589816 Maddy Fischer https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589921 I do have a lot of qualifications for a lot of jobs, but they’re all $3.35. 

 We could use these people that are potentially jobless in many different careers

***Maddy, this piece of ethos is very close to be effective! In order for the second strategy to be present for ethos, it is important to mention what the source is for any information we gather. For example, when you state the $3.35, what is the author's name/title of website? Also, it would be awesome to play up your word choice in the second part that you posted. If you are advocating for someone, it is important to show that you are willing to fight for their rights. For example, how would it help jobless people to be employed? Could you provide a situation where someone might find refuge in a job that many people might not want in the first place? Expand your thoughts to include specific examples for the audience to grab onto. Let me know if you need assistance with this in the near future!***]]> 2019-02-26 19:17:36 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335589921 https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335590047 Base on my experience and knowledge, I will respond all you help us to make the Nebraska being better 
***Hello, mystery student! This sentence is very close; however, it is missing the original/unique element to help this stand out. Specifically what experience and knowledge? It is best to paint a picture of this truly happening instead of "telling" the audience that you are the one who can talk knowledgeably about this topic. Expand your thoughts here and include really nice word choice. Let me know if you need assistance with this!***]]> 2019-02-26 19:17:50 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335590047 kaden koerperich https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335590281 address the issues of how school shootings occur not because of gun law issues but do to the fact that mental health in teenagers go unnoticed and unhelped.
 The second amendment isn't the problem when it comes to school shootings it would never be a issue if we listened to kids and helped when they need it. 

***Kaden, this use of ethos is very close to being extremely effective! I can see that you are trying to touch on the third strategy for ethos; however, I am left searching for the emotional side of this ethos. If you are truly speaking on why it is important to make schools safe for the children, I would try to find more colorful language to bring your message up another level. In the third strategy, the goal is to "advocate" for others, not necessarily just side with. Advocating means you are fighting for them, marching with them, and doing all you can to provide a safe space for the population you are talking about. Figure out what tone you want to use and form these sentences around the idea of "advocating" for these kids. Let me know your thoughts!***]]> 2019-02-26 19:18:10 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335590281 Pla https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335590383 It’s been proven that financial literacy programs can aid student retention and recruitment, boost graduation rates and the school’s reputation, and build goodwill and support from the community. 

***Pla, I am impressed with your use of word choice in this sentence. It is professional, to the point, and concise, but easily understood. The only item that is missing in this piece of ethos is the credibility. It would be helpful to list the source name where you have gathered these materials/ideas to give credit where it is due. Once you include the author's name/name of website, the use of ethos in this part of your letter will be fully present. Let me know if you need assistance with this!***]]> 2019-02-26 19:18:22 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335590383 Phu https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335590944 Since the very beginning, libraries have helped me though many ways. It help me with my social skill and English, as I start to borrowing books and read from the libraries every week. 

***Phu, this statement truly shows your ability to connect with libraries and also express how you feel about the situation! This is a clear cut strategy #1 from ethos; however, I would suggest adding another layer to this already well crafted sentence. Consider implementing the strategy #3 into this piece of ethos by stating that other teenagers have experienced something similar to what you have gone through in terms of reading at libraries and growing in those skills that can be fostered at libraries. All in all, this is a great start for ethos!***]]> 2019-02-26 19:19:17 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/335590944 Nyanchiew https://padlet.com/mpribnow/mcp6th1bkbi9/wish/336104755 We´ve seen in the news many things that people  do in the world We help on another in need  we try to help the earth it´s amazing  but I've also seen it do the most of heinous,unspeakable of things . Like Selling children ,mothers ,fathers,on the internet or in real life as if they were objects and not humans.I don't know how we are united but so separated at the same time.

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