2nd Hour Peer Revision Wish List by Carolyn Clavelli https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2 In the space below, create a post that will tell your classmates what types of comments would be beneficial for you during a peer revision en-us 2016-11-09 14:22:19 UTC 2026-01-08 18:28:17 UTC hello@padlet.com - Me https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136424437 It would be helpful to know if part of my narrative doesn't make sense.]]> 2016-11-09 15:17:29 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136424437 I would like them to tell me my mistakes or if a part in my story doesn't sound right. Also if I could have used better word choice. https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136424836 2016-11-09 15:18:14 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136424836 I would like them to give me corrections on how to add more detail https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136424949 --grace


]]> 2016-11-09 15:18:28 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136424949 https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136424998 It would be helpful if a part doesn't
 make sense or a better word choice could be used]]> 2016-11-09 15:18:34 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136424998 https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425037 it would be helpful if someone pointed out the parts that don't make sense]]> 2016-11-09 15:18:38 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425037 It would be helpful if they tell me mistakes, ways to make my narrative sound better, and tell me how to make the reader want to continue reading. https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425053


]]> 2016-11-09 15:18:39 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425053 It would be helpful if they would tell you what you need to work on. https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425079 2016-11-09 15:18:42 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425079 It would be helpful if  https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425097 2016-11-09 15:18:44 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425097 Not anonymous https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425098 Helpful tips

]]> 2016-11-09 15:18:44 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425098 https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425123 It would be helpful to know if I should add something or get rid of something.]]> 2016-11-09 15:18:48 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425123 I would want someone to tell me if any of my grammar is incorrect. https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425136 2016-11-09 15:18:50 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425136 https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425145 I would want to here their opinion on my piece and see what they would suggest.

]]> 2016-11-09 15:18:51 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425145 https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425207 It would be helpful because they could tell you what you did wrong and tell you things you could add in your narrative.
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]]> 2016-11-09 15:18:58 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425207 I would want someone to be honest and not just say it was great when you know its not. I am not a little child https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425310 -- Lizzy


]]> 2016-11-09 15:19:09 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425310 https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425438 Anyhting helpful :)]]> 2016-11-09 15:19:24 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425438 I would like to hear what they didn't like about my paper and how I could change it. https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425453 2016-11-09 15:19:25 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425453 I would be helpful and say any mistakes and if the story makes sence 8020814 https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425461 2016-11-09 15:19:27 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425461 Any mistakes I made https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425515 -jason bourne

]]> 2016-11-09 15:19:31 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425515 I would https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425636 2016-11-09 15:19:46 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425636 George: It would be helpful someone could tell me if you need a comma or if i have incorrect grammar  https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425768 2016-11-09 15:20:02 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136425768 Helpful things https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136426006 2016-11-09 15:20:27 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136426006 Morgan https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136426138 I would like it if someone would say something I could work on like grammar
 ]]> 2016-11-09 15:20:41 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136426138 I would want people to make sure that I have some good explanations  https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136426428 -- Lizzy]]> 2016-11-09 15:21:09 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136426428 I would want people to be sure that I am using correct puncuation https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136428173 -- Lizzy]]> 2016-11-09 15:24:23 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136428173 https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136428953 2016-11-09 15:25:51 UTC https://padlet.com/carolyn_clavell/mc0y4cegsdv2/wish/136428953